for Snow Shadow4/8/2004 c1 i hate you
YOU SUCK! I HATE YOU!
YOU SUCK! I HATE YOU!
2/1/2003 c1 Athena
Did you write this crap? Holy Christ. Have you ever heard of editing? I can't count as high as these mistakes go. Please do everyone a favour and take your finger off caps lock. When you're writing, it's best to do it calmly. My eyes hurt after reading this crap. I cannot believe that a human actually wrote this. If you were trying to be funny by adding all these exlimation marks..then please stop. Because you're just making yourself look worse then you already do.
Just because you've gotten reviews from yourself doesn't give you the right to make the next chapter. No one reads it besides you. From the length, and the actual content of this..I'd say you've only taken a few minuutes! Work harder, just like the rest of us. And if you're thinking of becoming a writer anytime soon..get another dream because it'll be a very long time before this one becomes reality. Even if it's for loving a molesting supporting couple, or being a disgrace to all the authors here on ff.net...I hate you. I'm sure many others do as well.
I could write something much better than this even if I didn't try. But because many of you are T/p fans here..I probably wouldn't get as many reviews. It still amazes me how many reviews you've gotten for this sorry excuse for a fanfiction. Next time..go over your work 100 0000 times, even though that probably won't help. In your eyes using 100 000 000 exlimation marks after someone says 'Adorable' is correct grammar. I understand that when writing you sometimes use exlimation marks even when they're not suppose to be used..but what you have done is just stupid. What audience have you been writing this for? Grade ones...twos maybe? Because at the writing levels I've seen of many fictions. This is just pure crap.
I'm not a big fan of T/p...hell I hate the damn couple. But at least some of them have the tendency to write for an academic audience. ..Some, not most but some have good plots, and even better grammar. I'm suppose to be able to make you write better, but after contemplating ( Oh. Big word..go grab a dictionary) your work..I don't even believe it's possible anymore.
I don't know what more there is left to say. I could go on and on for hours, but I do have a life. Please go ponder very closely before you consider writing another fiction. If that doesn't work ( which in your case I'm sure it won't) then read this over again, and it'll remind you. Normally, I feel very bad for making others feel bad especially when it comes to art/fanfiction..but you aren't a very good person are you? You may think I don't know you..but I do. This might be deleted. You'll probably read it, cry and say "BELEETED" but you can mark my words I'll be back. You inarticulate sorry excuse for a human being.
And as my friend Rob likes to say "Not Even"
I'll stop for now, but as I have mentioned before...I will be back. So goodbye for now. Adios.
Did you write this crap? Holy Christ. Have you ever heard of editing? I can't count as high as these mistakes go. Please do everyone a favour and take your finger off caps lock. When you're writing, it's best to do it calmly. My eyes hurt after reading this crap. I cannot believe that a human actually wrote this. If you were trying to be funny by adding all these exlimation marks..then please stop. Because you're just making yourself look worse then you already do.
Just because you've gotten reviews from yourself doesn't give you the right to make the next chapter. No one reads it besides you. From the length, and the actual content of this..I'd say you've only taken a few minuutes! Work harder, just like the rest of us. And if you're thinking of becoming a writer anytime soon..get another dream because it'll be a very long time before this one becomes reality. Even if it's for loving a molesting supporting couple, or being a disgrace to all the authors here on ff.net...I hate you. I'm sure many others do as well.
I could write something much better than this even if I didn't try. But because many of you are T/p fans here..I probably wouldn't get as many reviews. It still amazes me how many reviews you've gotten for this sorry excuse for a fanfiction. Next time..go over your work 100 0000 times, even though that probably won't help. In your eyes using 100 000 000 exlimation marks after someone says 'Adorable' is correct grammar. I understand that when writing you sometimes use exlimation marks even when they're not suppose to be used..but what you have done is just stupid. What audience have you been writing this for? Grade ones...twos maybe? Because at the writing levels I've seen of many fictions. This is just pure crap.
I'm not a big fan of T/p...hell I hate the damn couple. But at least some of them have the tendency to write for an academic audience. ..Some, not most but some have good plots, and even better grammar. I'm suppose to be able to make you write better, but after contemplating ( Oh. Big word..go grab a dictionary) your work..I don't even believe it's possible anymore.
I don't know what more there is left to say. I could go on and on for hours, but I do have a life. Please go ponder very closely before you consider writing another fiction. If that doesn't work ( which in your case I'm sure it won't) then read this over again, and it'll remind you. Normally, I feel very bad for making others feel bad especially when it comes to art/fanfiction..but you aren't a very good person are you? You may think I don't know you..but I do. This might be deleted. You'll probably read it, cry and say "BELEETED" but you can mark my words I'll be back. You inarticulate sorry excuse for a human being.
And as my friend Rob likes to say "Not Even"
I'll stop for now, but as I have mentioned before...I will be back. So goodbye for now. Adios.
12/28/2002 c5 Grammar Queen
Bad bad grammar. Ending sentences. Baaad. Again, nice plotline. Eh, the lil style of writing problem on the last speech:
(You)
"I am Ice Shadow. I am here to kill you."
(What I'd of put)
"I am Ice Shadow. And I'm here to kill you."
Putting two of the same sentence startings together sounds really bad.
Bad bad grammar. Ending sentences. Baaad. Again, nice plotline. Eh, the lil style of writing problem on the last speech:
(You)
"I am Ice Shadow. I am here to kill you."
(What I'd of put)
"I am Ice Shadow. And I'm here to kill you."
Putting two of the same sentence startings together sounds really bad.
12/28/2002 c4 Grammar Queen
Dialoge spacing. You really need it. Aaah. The grammar.
Hmm, you shouldn't put ..." it's really bad grammar.
(You)
"And I don't love her like that..." Ice added in a whisper..."I'm sorry Lin. I really am..."
(Correct)
"And I don't love her like that," Ice added in a whisper: "I'm sorry Lin. I really am..."
-nodnod- Good plotline.
Dialoge spacing. You really need it. Aaah. The grammar.
Hmm, you shouldn't put ..." it's really bad grammar.
(You)
"And I don't love her like that..." Ice added in a whisper..."I'm sorry Lin. I really am..."
(Correct)
"And I don't love her like that," Ice added in a whisper: "I'm sorry Lin. I really am..."
-nodnod- Good plotline.
12/28/2002 c3 Geh. Grammar Queen
Hn. Again... dialoge and paragraphs. Eep! GRAMMAR!
"Grrrr." growled Snow.
It should be:
"Grrrr," growled Snow.
You don't end a sentence in your speech, you end it at the end of the sentence (gah. Confusing, look above)
Hn. Again... dialoge and paragraphs. Eep! GRAMMAR!
"Grrrr." growled Snow.
It should be:
"Grrrr," growled Snow.
You don't end a sentence in your speech, you end it at the end of the sentence (gah. Confusing, look above)
12/28/2002 c2 Geh. Grammar Queen
The fact that this chapter was about 2 sentences longer than the other. I see a -coughcough- *IMPROVMENT*
Seeing as the chapter was basically dialoge. It was even harder to read. But the story was, good. YOu could work on the Paragraphing.
The fact that this chapter was about 2 sentences longer than the other. I see a -coughcough- *IMPROVMENT*
Seeing as the chapter was basically dialoge. It was even harder to read. But the story was, good. YOu could work on the Paragraphing.
12/28/2002 c1 Geh. Grammar Queen
It's rather short,and try to watch your spelling. Eep. The dialoug is kinda hard to read... but... I *guess* this is good.
It's rather short,and try to watch your spelling. Eep. The dialoug is kinda hard to read... but... I *guess* this is good.
9/29/2002 c3 
1KittyMonster
Wow.. You really can't spell very well. ^.^ Read a thesaurus, you need some more insults. I mean, really, repeating "YOU SUCK!" over and over again? How cliche! ^.^ And "**" ain't an insult, its like saying you have brown hair. OH NO! NOT BROWN HAIR! *sob* If you told someone gay that they were gay, they'd be like "Erm.. Yes, yes I am..." It's pointless! You do realize you only dislike me because I can stand up for myself. Something I can do without looking like a total **, like yourself. Ja ne aho! ^.^
1KittyMonsterWow.. You really can't spell very well. ^.^ Read a thesaurus, you need some more insults. I mean, really, repeating "YOU SUCK!" over and over again? How cliche! ^.^ And "**" ain't an insult, its like saying you have brown hair. OH NO! NOT BROWN HAIR! *sob* If you told someone gay that they were gay, they'd be like "Erm.. Yes, yes I am..." It's pointless! You do realize you only dislike me because I can stand up for myself. Something I can do without looking like a total **, like yourself. Ja ne aho! ^.^
9/28/2002 c1 9Pannychan
...once again...take a look at yourself before you judge my writing...at least i know how to seperate dialogue..
9Pannychan...once again...take a look at yourself before you judge my writing...at least i know how to seperate dialogue..
9/28/2002 c2 1KittyMonster
Wow.. Thanks, that made me feel good. Calling me an ** kisser. There's a difference between "nice" and "** kissing". I'm sorry if I butted in, there. (it's butted by the way, not budded) It wasn't my place to say anything there. Hehe.. You know what I think? When you said "princess" the thought that you may actually be a fake person flashed though my mind. Yea, that's right, I think you're a 13-year old kid that gets his kicks out of seeing the reactions of people when you flame them. And if you arn't, and this is how you actually are, then A) You are a spoiled brat, B) You can't insult worth ** C) You can't write and D) You sound like your 7 years old. That's my opinion, and if you don't like it, then you can kiss my **. ^.^ Ja ne baka-yaro!
1KittyMonsterWow.. Thanks, that made me feel good. Calling me an ** kisser. There's a difference between "nice" and "** kissing". I'm sorry if I butted in, there. (it's butted by the way, not budded) It wasn't my place to say anything there. Hehe.. You know what I think? When you said "princess" the thought that you may actually be a fake person flashed though my mind. Yea, that's right, I think you're a 13-year old kid that gets his kicks out of seeing the reactions of people when you flame them. And if you arn't, and this is how you actually are, then A) You are a spoiled brat, B) You can't insult worth ** C) You can't write and D) You sound like your 7 years old. That's my opinion, and if you don't like it, then you can kiss my **. ^.^ Ja ne baka-yaro!
9/26/2002 c1 KittyMonster
oook.. *prepares to write a LOOONG 'review'*
Well, first of all, You need to be a little less.. mean. I HATED it how you flamed DPP's fic, Flame it once, okay, flame it twice, erm.. a little mean, but when you flame it over 25 times and post the same flames repeatedly, it's a little crushing to the authors spirits.
You probably could get friends if you wanted, just be less biased and prejudged.
I don't mind flames, It's expressing your feelings towards something, but saying the writers are 'ASSHOLING **'and 'SLUTTY WHOREs' says nothing about yourself exept for your juvinileness (is that a word?) and unmaturatey. Same thing with threatening people, what good does it do? Calm down!
I think you have a lot of agression to let out, and although writing is a very good way of letting it out, try something physical, like kickboxing or karate, etc etc.
Please email me at , O really would like to get to know you better! Thanks for listening.
KittyMonster
oook.. *prepares to write a LOOONG 'review'*
Well, first of all, You need to be a little less.. mean. I HATED it how you flamed DPP's fic, Flame it once, okay, flame it twice, erm.. a little mean, but when you flame it over 25 times and post the same flames repeatedly, it's a little crushing to the authors spirits.
You probably could get friends if you wanted, just be less biased and prejudged.
I don't mind flames, It's expressing your feelings towards something, but saying the writers are 'ASSHOLING **'and 'SLUTTY WHOREs' says nothing about yourself exept for your juvinileness (is that a word?) and unmaturatey. Same thing with threatening people, what good does it do? Calm down!
I think you have a lot of agression to let out, and although writing is a very good way of letting it out, try something physical, like kickboxing or karate, etc etc.
Please email me at , O really would like to get to know you better! Thanks for listening.
KittyMonster
9/13/2002 c1 Guest
if you hate cuteness then why did you call this a cute fic in the summary?
if you hate cuteness then why did you call this a cute fic in the summary?
5/26/2002 c1 THU KASAM-KANA HAI
THIS SUX! what the fok what cute about this? hey man,don't lie to ppl just cause you want em to read your worthless **! damn it,you will go to he*l for this you sinner.
THIS SUX! what the fok what cute about this? hey man,don't lie to ppl just cause you want em to read your worthless **! damn it,you will go to he*l for this you sinner.
1/2/2002 c1 Guest
WTF WAS THAT U SUCK! AND I HATE U CUSE U HATE MY FAVE. COUPLES B/V AND T/M...LAY OFF THEM U **! GET A LIFE AND STOP WRITING GAY T/p FICS AND SSSSSSSTTTTTOOOOOPPPPPP BASHING MARRON...OR I'LL BASH PAN...BELIEVE ME I'LL MAKE ALL U MARRON HATERS ALL LOOK LIKE $t%%^$$^$$%%%&&&^*(*(^)*)_&^^$^&* OH WAIT U PROBABLY ALREADY ARE GAY! NESHA IS A **...DIE NESHA... DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE...OR I'LL COME AND...U
WTF WAS THAT U SUCK! AND I HATE U CUSE U HATE MY FAVE. COUPLES B/V AND T/M...LAY OFF THEM U **! GET A LIFE AND STOP WRITING GAY T/p FICS AND SSSSSSSTTTTTOOOOOPPPPPP BASHING MARRON...OR I'LL BASH PAN...BELIEVE ME I'LL MAKE ALL U MARRON HATERS ALL LOOK LIKE $t%%^$$^$$%%%&&&^*(*(^)*)_&^^$^&* OH WAIT U PROBABLY ALREADY ARE GAY! NESHA IS A **...DIE NESHA... DIE DIE DIE DIE DIE...OR I'LL COME AND...U
12/12/2000 c7 16Mystical Jade
Ah, that was a sad ending! Not at all like I had expected it to be! But, this was a very cute fic. I'm glad I read it! ^_^
16Mystical JadeAh, that was a sad ending! Not at all like I had expected it to be! But, this was a very cute fic. I'm glad I read it! ^_^