for Roots4/14 c9 Guest
This is quite honestly the only well written cliffhanger I've read on fanfiction in a loooong time.
Everyone else's sad attempts at a cliffhanger:
Whatever. I know exactly what's gonna happen. Mmm, mom just brought cookies home. Lemme take a break to eat then I'll come back.
Your cliffhanger:
OMG. I HAVE NO IDEA WHAT CRAZY $HIT IS GONNA HAPPEN OMGOMGOMG. NO, MOM, I CAN'T EAT AN EFFING COOKIE RIGHT NOW! SHUT UP! GET AWAY FROM ME AND LET ME READ! I DON'T CARE IF THE EFFIN HOUSE IS ON FIRE I GOTTA-
*passes out due to hyperventilation*
This is an AMAZING story.
Keep writing!
This is quite honestly the only well written cliffhanger I've read on fanfiction in a loooong time.
Everyone else's sad attempts at a cliffhanger:
Whatever. I know exactly what's gonna happen. Mmm, mom just brought cookies home. Lemme take a break to eat then I'll come back.
Your cliffhanger:
OMG. I HAVE NO IDEA WHAT CRAZY $HIT IS GONNA HAPPEN OMGOMGOMG. NO, MOM, I CAN'T EAT AN EFFING COOKIE RIGHT NOW! SHUT UP! GET AWAY FROM ME AND LET ME READ! I DON'T CARE IF THE EFFIN HOUSE IS ON FIRE I GOTTA-
*passes out due to hyperventilation*
This is an AMAZING story.
Keep writing!
9/23/2011 c14 Time Review
Beautiful. The whole story was just...beautiful.
I kept thinking this would end with random out-of-characterness and scenes that were just stupid, as I find it difficult to find good stories about Lance, but I was pleasantly surprised when I finished reading the whole thing and got a happily contented feeling.
Well, sort of; there still leaves room for a sequel, which actually gives it a feel of an ongoing life. Leaves more for the imagination, y'know? If everything came to a happily-ever-after close, the story wouldn't give off the same vibe as it does now, with him being content to be with his fellow 'abandons.' An interesting twist that was written well enough to be believed. I like it. Good job.
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A heartbreaking thought of never getting to play with his little brother or to have that warm feeling of a real family that loves him... that must be harsh for him whenever he gets close to other families now, huh? The realization of his housemates being his real family sure will come in handy; probably bring them all closer together, too.
I loved the ending Thanksgiving picture. It's no wonder Kitty wanted it on their mantel, it's so...them. So cute! It makes the picture feel more alive and not posed, which, in their case, would have made it feel fake.
All-in-all, I loved your story. It was a surprisingly fun read. Thanks.
Time R.
Beautiful. The whole story was just...beautiful.
I kept thinking this would end with random out-of-characterness and scenes that were just stupid, as I find it difficult to find good stories about Lance, but I was pleasantly surprised when I finished reading the whole thing and got a happily contented feeling.
Well, sort of; there still leaves room for a sequel, which actually gives it a feel of an ongoing life. Leaves more for the imagination, y'know? If everything came to a happily-ever-after close, the story wouldn't give off the same vibe as it does now, with him being content to be with his fellow 'abandons.' An interesting twist that was written well enough to be believed. I like it. Good job.
...
A heartbreaking thought of never getting to play with his little brother or to have that warm feeling of a real family that loves him... that must be harsh for him whenever he gets close to other families now, huh? The realization of his housemates being his real family sure will come in handy; probably bring them all closer together, too.
I loved the ending Thanksgiving picture. It's no wonder Kitty wanted it on their mantel, it's so...them. So cute! It makes the picture feel more alive and not posed, which, in their case, would have made it feel fake.
All-in-all, I loved your story. It was a surprisingly fun read. Thanks.
Time R.
7/8/2011 c12 
8Ace-of-Cyberspace13
Awww! Poor Lance! Poor Sophie! Poor Maggie! Poor everyone! Another awesome chapter!
-Ace
8Ace-of-Cyberspace13Awww! Poor Lance! Poor Sophie! Poor Maggie! Poor everyone! Another awesome chapter!
-Ace
7/8/2011 c12 ishidoro
Great history so far, I think your characterization of Lance is the best one i've seen in this site. And you did an awesome job with his background... Can't wait for the next chapter!
Great history so far, I think your characterization of Lance is the best one i've seen in this site. And you did an awesome job with his background... Can't wait for the next chapter!
7/5/2011 c11 2mae.raine
this story is so sad D: I'm trying not to hate Lance's parents because I understand why they would be overwhelemd by it but STILL. Poor Lance. Awww.. Kitty, you have to hug him to make him feel better!
Update soon please :'D
2mae.rainethis story is so sad D: I'm trying not to hate Lance's parents because I understand why they would be overwhelemd by it but STILL. Poor Lance. Awww.. Kitty, you have to hug him to make him feel better!
Update soon please :'D
7/2/2011 c11 catspaw
So great to see an update. Your fic is one of my favourites for evo. Seeing the new xmen movie gave me a hankering for some evo fics and I figured I'd reread this one again only to find out that it had been updated! This has made my day. Poor Lance though. I love him going to Kitty for comfort though. Looking forward to the next update
So great to see an update. Your fic is one of my favourites for evo. Seeing the new xmen movie gave me a hankering for some evo fics and I figured I'd reread this one again only to find out that it had been updated! This has made my day. Poor Lance though. I love him going to Kitty for comfort though. Looking forward to the next update
7/1/2011 c11 8Ace-of-Cyberspace13
Wow. This is sooo awesome! I don't know why I didn't read this sooner! I really don't! So, now I'm sitting in the dark, alone in my house, listening to the Grey's Anatomy: The Music Event OST, and reading one of the best stories, likr, ever! (Well, technically, I'm reviewing it, but whatever.) So awesome! I can't wait to read more!
-Ace
8Ace-of-Cyberspace13Wow. This is sooo awesome! I don't know why I didn't read this sooner! I really don't! So, now I'm sitting in the dark, alone in my house, listening to the Grey's Anatomy: The Music Event OST, and reading one of the best stories, likr, ever! (Well, technically, I'm reviewing it, but whatever.) So awesome! I can't wait to read more!
-Ace
6/28/2011 c10 Daxo
well dude for a 4 year absent to only a few weeks now you are improving =P
na just kidding
i like this story but im sensing a ending near?
actually its ok if you do it it fits but if you are going to make this longer by any means
well see you later
well dude for a 4 year absent to only a few weeks now you are improving =P
na just kidding
i like this story but im sensing a ending near?
actually its ok if you do it it fits but if you are going to make this longer by any means
well see you later
6/21/2011 c9 Riderazzo
It is nice to see this story is still going. This was a cute chapter. I wonder how Lance's Dad and step mom will react to finding out Lance is a mutant. Can't wait for the next chapter ^_^
It is nice to see this story is still going. This was a cute chapter. I wonder how Lance's Dad and step mom will react to finding out Lance is a mutant. Can't wait for the next chapter ^_^
6/19/2011 c9 su-chan
yeah! finally after years when i check by coincidence i find the updating of one of my favorites story! great that the story will be ended it's really great so please end it!
yeah! finally after years when i check by coincidence i find the updating of one of my favorites story! great that the story will be ended it's really great so please end it!
6/18/2011 c9 Kit Kadaver
Ya! I'm so happy you're finishing this story! I've loved it since the first chapter was uploaded. I can't wait to find out what happens!
Ya! I'm so happy you're finishing this story! I've loved it since the first chapter was uploaded. I can't wait to find out what happens!
6/18/2011 c9 3Dracarot
I am willing to volunteer my Betaing services. I was for a time a beta for the story "Videl the Saiyan warrior" before real life killed the time I could actually edit that. I am out of college for the rest of the summer so I have the time and the will to apply myself to the beta work if you so desire.
3DracarotI am willing to volunteer my Betaing services. I was for a time a beta for the story "Videl the Saiyan warrior" before real life killed the time I could actually edit that. I am out of college for the rest of the summer so I have the time and the will to apply myself to the beta work if you so desire.
9/30/2009 c8 Val
aww you should finish this its a very cute story!
aww you should finish this its a very cute story!
9/18/2009 c8 3Vi-Violence
um, hi, i checked your profile so the fact that you haven't updated in about a year is more resonable than it would usally be, but i'm a little concerned that you lost the password for the email this account is conected to or something like that, think you could put something up just so we know your alive? oh, and awsome fic, its looking really good, i hope you get around to finnishing it
3Vi-Violenceum, hi, i checked your profile so the fact that you haven't updated in about a year is more resonable than it would usally be, but i'm a little concerned that you lost the password for the email this account is conected to or something like that, think you could put something up just so we know your alive? oh, and awsome fic, its looking really good, i hope you get around to finnishing it