for A Party for Sam4/28/2012 c2 Frodos Sister
I certainly made lots of mistakes in this story.
I certainly made lots of mistakes in this story.
2/18/2006 c2 Ribbons22
the concept is wonderful! Sam deserves a surprise party. You have alot of potential, but I agree with Frodo Baggins 88- you could use some help on the technical side. Still, a good story!
the concept is wonderful! Sam deserves a surprise party. You have alot of potential, but I agree with Frodo Baggins 88- you could use some help on the technical side. Still, a good story!
9/19/2004 c1 
30FrodoBaggins88
Hello,
First of all, I would like to say that I like the idea of your story. It's one I've never seen before.
Take a careful look at this sentence though:
"Merry carefully picked up the cake while Frodo and Sam picked up the wrapped food." Wasn't Sam supposed to be off with Rose?
Once again, I like the idea, but may I offer to be your beta? You've got good ideas, but there are some things that have room for improvement in the story. Things can be fleshed out more. I read your other one on Sam's thoughts. I would really like to help you further the abilities in writing you already help if you would allow me to be your beta.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Good job. Keep writing.
Frodo Baggins 88
30FrodoBaggins88Hello,
First of all, I would like to say that I like the idea of your story. It's one I've never seen before.
Take a careful look at this sentence though:
"Merry carefully picked up the cake while Frodo and Sam picked up the wrapped food." Wasn't Sam supposed to be off with Rose?
Once again, I like the idea, but may I offer to be your beta? You've got good ideas, but there are some things that have room for improvement in the story. Things can be fleshed out more. I read your other one on Sam's thoughts. I would really like to help you further the abilities in writing you already help if you would allow me to be your beta.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Good job. Keep writing.
Frodo Baggins 88
7/24/2004 c2 4final-fantasy-20
Very Cute, I really liked, hope there will be more. Keep up the good work.
4final-fantasy-20Very Cute, I really liked, hope there will be more. Keep up the good work.
7/14/2004 c2 18Psycho Tangerine
Wow, you really need a beta-reader. Maybe you should have your genius of a sister help you with that. Oh, and you should've had a food fight with Frodo running home in tears because his plans got all ruined.
Oh, I almost forgot...you suck! (hehehehehehehehe)
18Psycho TangerineWow, you really need a beta-reader. Maybe you should have your genius of a sister help you with that. Oh, and you should've had a food fight with Frodo running home in tears because his plans got all ruined.
Oh, I almost forgot...you suck! (hehehehehehehehe)