for Romance in the Rain4/8/2012 c1 
34Authority Man 37
This story is so cute! I love Sakura X Syaoran pairing! You did an amazing job with this plot between them. Great job! :D
34Authority Man 37This story is so cute! I love Sakura X Syaoran pairing! You did an amazing job with this plot between them. Great job! :D
7/1/2010 c1 11rosepetals98
It's a very nice story, with good timing and it's very interesting. I can see the fairy tale aura around it. What I would've done is put more description on the kiss... But that's just me, so you don't really need it that much. I also think you could've maybe added some adverbs and things like that, but I can see that this is a story that just popped up, right? Very good, overall.
11rosepetals98It's a very nice story, with good timing and it's very interesting. I can see the fairy tale aura around it. What I would've done is put more description on the kiss... But that's just me, so you don't really need it that much. I also think you could've maybe added some adverbs and things like that, but I can see that this is a story that just popped up, right? Very good, overall.
11/27/2009 c1 25SailorWednesdayMercury
Awesome story, please give me more reviews on A Clow Kingdoms Series: A Buried Romance 1 Vol 3!
25SailorWednesdayMercuryAwesome story, please give me more reviews on A Clow Kingdoms Series: A Buried Romance 1 Vol 3!
11/13/2009 c1 27Ino Y. Uchiha
I liked the story...
Though...I couldn't imagine what they look like...(Inner Ami: What's happening to you, Ami?)
27Ino Y. UchihaI liked the story...
Though...I couldn't imagine what they look like...(Inner Ami: What's happening to you, Ami?)
6/9/2009 c1 13Irrevocable Truth
Hm.. well, what I noticed was that you TELL a lot and SHOW less.
Some descriptions are unnecessary as well. For example, you repeated 'crummy' a lot of times. Also, do all their raincoats have to be a full color and design all-throughout? And if they are, then why repeat it over and over again? You could just have stated it simpler (I'm sorry, is that a word?) and more concisely.
The stranger is kinda obvious, but that isn't a problem at all. Although you could've developed their dialogues a bit more.
Punctuation mistakes here and there, but not a lot of them, so that can be overlooked, I guess.
Anyway, just some opinion and suggestions ^_^
The plot was cute, though (even though it was very cliche). It was short and sweet. Good job with this.
Sincerely,
animefanatic15
13Irrevocable TruthHm.. well, what I noticed was that you TELL a lot and SHOW less.
Some descriptions are unnecessary as well. For example, you repeated 'crummy' a lot of times. Also, do all their raincoats have to be a full color and design all-throughout? And if they are, then why repeat it over and over again? You could just have stated it simpler (I'm sorry, is that a word?) and more concisely.
The stranger is kinda obvious, but that isn't a problem at all. Although you could've developed their dialogues a bit more.
Punctuation mistakes here and there, but not a lot of them, so that can be overlooked, I guess.
Anyway, just some opinion and suggestions ^_^
The plot was cute, though (even though it was very cliche). It was short and sweet. Good job with this.
Sincerely,
animefanatic15
10/8/2007 c1 3Alyssum
Well, it's not bad, but it is kinda choppy, with some grammatical and punctuality mistakes, but the plot is very sweet. You could have developed it a bit more. You do repeat a lot of things a lot, such as "smiles", "- says" Instead of says, it would be said, and you might want to consider putting in the name of the speaker in a different way, as well as putting in more detail. ex: Tomoyo put her arms around Eriol's neck, saying (and said, if you like) "I love you." And if you're one of the sappy types (no offense), you can say something like- Eriol touched the tip of Tomoyo's nose with his own, and replied, "-"
Whatever.
Generally, I'm not a romantic, but I'm known to read/write it every now and then...Except for here. All three of my stories are SS.
Speaking of my stories, do you remember me? I used to be kaze-tenshi, author of Childhood Revenge. It's discountinued now...*sob* But! it's being rewritten. Called To Love is to Suffer. Plot is slowed down, blah blah blah, check it out sometime!
Better stop before I take up the page.
Signed
Star
3AlyssumWell, it's not bad, but it is kinda choppy, with some grammatical and punctuality mistakes, but the plot is very sweet. You could have developed it a bit more. You do repeat a lot of things a lot, such as "smiles", "- says" Instead of says, it would be said, and you might want to consider putting in the name of the speaker in a different way, as well as putting in more detail. ex: Tomoyo put her arms around Eriol's neck, saying (and said, if you like) "I love you." And if you're one of the sappy types (no offense), you can say something like- Eriol touched the tip of Tomoyo's nose with his own, and replied, "-"
Whatever.
Generally, I'm not a romantic, but I'm known to read/write it every now and then...Except for here. All three of my stories are SS.
Speaking of my stories, do you remember me? I used to be kaze-tenshi, author of Childhood Revenge. It's discountinued now...*sob* But! it's being rewritten. Called To Love is to Suffer. Plot is slowed down, blah blah blah, check it out sometime!
Better stop before I take up the page.
Signed
Star
8/2/2007 c1 Too scared to reveal PenName
that was weird... would it hurt to not repeat the words again and again? well, despite that and some grammatical errors, it was sweet in the end. You can consider this as a constructive criticism, kay?
that was weird... would it hurt to not repeat the words again and again? well, despite that and some grammatical errors, it was sweet in the end. You can consider this as a constructive criticism, kay?
5/17/2007 c1 14Simpleguiltypleasures
“Yes my dear, my step daughter and my cute little descendant are back together.” Eriol smiled
? Michael - the word step daughter - sakura?
Dear, How did saku become eriol's step daughter? but anyway, i like the story, in 2 wks time it'll be rainy season here in my place, I wish I had those boots, raincoat and umbrella too (",)
14Simpleguiltypleasures“Yes my dear, my step daughter and my cute little descendant are back together.” Eriol smiled
? Michael - the word step daughter - sakura?
Dear, How did saku become eriol's step daughter? but anyway, i like the story, in 2 wks time it'll be rainy season here in my place, I wish I had those boots, raincoat and umbrella too (",)