for A Great Ordeal7/5/2012 c1 Guest
This was very nicely done.
This was very nicely done.
12/24/2008 c1 
77KrisEleven
Interesting. I like how you write, and the descriptions of the blackouts were effective and well written. I don't feel you managed to grasp their characters in the little bit of 'dialogue' at the beginning, but overall it was good.
KrisEleven~
77KrisElevenInteresting. I like how you write, and the descriptions of the blackouts were effective and well written. I don't feel you managed to grasp their characters in the little bit of 'dialogue' at the beginning, but overall it was good.
KrisEleven~
7/19/2005 c1 1Cesy
First paragraph, "test of the wills," do you mean "test of wills" or "test of the will"?
Also in that paragraph, you wrote "closed to heavy, iron door". Did you mean "closed the"?
Second-to-last paragraph, you have extra speech marks.
Otherwise, it's a very good fic, accurate to canon and very readable.
1CesyFirst paragraph, "test of the wills," do you mean "test of wills" or "test of the will"?
Also in that paragraph, you wrote "closed to heavy, iron door". Did you mean "closed the"?
Second-to-last paragraph, you have extra speech marks.
Otherwise, it's a very good fic, accurate to canon and very readable.
7/18/2005 c1 21Anaroriel
This was really interesting and I enjoyed reading it. I don't have much to say, because it was very good and easy to follow and read, and the plot and characters all remained in canon.
21AnarorielThis was really interesting and I enjoyed reading it. I don't have much to say, because it was very good and easy to follow and read, and the plot and characters all remained in canon.
12/22/2004 c1 Silverfall or Lyrai
Extremely good. I haven't actually read other Chamber ficlets like this before, and I absolutely loved it. It showed Joren in every sense, from the spoiled brat to the fallen villain.
Just awesome.
~Gwyn
Extremely good. I haven't actually read other Chamber ficlets like this before, and I absolutely loved it. It showed Joren in every sense, from the spoiled brat to the fallen villain.
Just awesome.
~Gwyn
12/12/2004 c1 9soccerchick-08
This was very good, I didn't see any errors really but I wouldn't expect anything less from someone from the Dove. I would have liked to see maybe his fears, but still it was very good. See you around the Dove...
9soccerchick-08This was very good, I didn't see any errors really but I wouldn't expect anything less from someone from the Dove. I would have liked to see maybe his fears, but still it was very good. See you around the Dove...
11/29/2004 c1 26Treanz-Alyce
I liked that. I was never a huge Joren fan to begin with, so i guess this wasn't too tragic for me ;)Good work
- Katrina
26Treanz-AlyceI liked that. I was never a huge Joren fan to begin with, so i guess this wasn't too tragic for me ;)Good work
- Katrina
11/29/2004 c1 Addictedtoflamingpleaseignore
Okay. Ew. Thanks for the visual. NOT! Just ignore this, I can't seem to keep from flaming even the best stories...and I can't seem to not review them...it's a vicious cycle. lol
Okay. Ew. Thanks for the visual. NOT! Just ignore this, I can't seem to keep from flaming even the best stories...and I can't seem to not review them...it's a vicious cycle. lol
11/29/2004 c1 2olivia stevens
Very nice, etc. I like it - really I do, but I'm too lazy to write a critique right now... :)
2olivia stevensVery nice, etc. I like it - really I do, but I'm too lazy to write a critique right now... :)
11/28/2004 c1 3Robinwyn
that was a very good story! there hasn't been many stories about joren's death i dont think. you kept it short and to the point and yet descriptive. keep up the great writing!
3Robinwynthat was a very good story! there hasn't been many stories about joren's death i dont think. you kept it short and to the point and yet descriptive. keep up the great writing!
11/28/2004 c1 9Knight-whosays-ni
Good. So... who's the woman? PLEASE don't tell me it was kel! that's just scary...
9Knight-whosays-niGood. So... who's the woman? PLEASE don't tell me it was kel! that's just scary...