for The Legend of Zelda:Then and now6/8/2000 c1 StarDragon
I've read it again and again and again under EACH of your aliases. It has no point even when you stuck all of THIS stuff in it. It has nothing but grammar mistakes mixed in with that terrible play format I so despise. It has problems with tenses, action, and characters. BAND-AIDS? Link Jr.? POKEMON? Where did all of these things come from? Why do you insist on making this Juliet person we don't know crap about a heroine? She's always saving the day. Why don't you just take all of the crossover stuff out and leave Juliet in to do everything in "the big dress"? She's always doing what is important; marrying Link; killing Dark Link; getting hurt all of the time so that you hope we say, "Poor Juliet!", for gosh sakes!... This is a VERY BAD FIC. I'm going to be blunt with it here and now. Rewrite it or something. It's bad. It's terrible. It's an eyesore! It doesn't need a beta-reader. It just needs to be thoroughly wiped up and re-written- WITHOUT Pokèmon of any sort, mundane curse words, band-aids, Link Jr., and preferably that Lady Juliet person! *looks back at review, then at the reviews in a whole* We reviewers are here to save the public. I say to the public: RUN AWAY, RUN AWAY, RUN AWAY! (Thank you, Monty Python.) This is the worst fic I've ever read.
I've read it again and again and again under EACH of your aliases. It has no point even when you stuck all of THIS stuff in it. It has nothing but grammar mistakes mixed in with that terrible play format I so despise. It has problems with tenses, action, and characters. BAND-AIDS? Link Jr.? POKEMON? Where did all of these things come from? Why do you insist on making this Juliet person we don't know crap about a heroine? She's always saving the day. Why don't you just take all of the crossover stuff out and leave Juliet in to do everything in "the big dress"? She's always doing what is important; marrying Link; killing Dark Link; getting hurt all of the time so that you hope we say, "Poor Juliet!", for gosh sakes!... This is a VERY BAD FIC. I'm going to be blunt with it here and now. Rewrite it or something. It's bad. It's terrible. It's an eyesore! It doesn't need a beta-reader. It just needs to be thoroughly wiped up and re-written- WITHOUT Pokèmon of any sort, mundane curse words, band-aids, Link Jr., and preferably that Lady Juliet person! *looks back at review, then at the reviews in a whole* We reviewers are here to save the public. I say to the public: RUN AWAY, RUN AWAY, RUN AWAY! (Thank you, Monty Python.) This is the worst fic I've ever read.
5/20/2000 c1 Christi
SMRPG and Zelda? O_o Hey, Geno's a doll, not a man. Two words: punctuation check.
SMRPG and Zelda? O_o Hey, Geno's a doll, not a man. Two words: punctuation check.
5/8/2000 c1 
76Alex Foster
I'm a little unsure what you were trying to say here Barret, was that intended to be a crossover or a drama? The story didn't make much sense to me. Most of the story was just told not shown. When I began reading the story I saw the beginning of something good, but you seemed to have gotten lost somewhere along the way. Go back and add a little more dialogue and action, and in less you want to have this be a crossover loss the pokémon. I'm sorry if this review hurts, but the story does need work.
76Alex FosterI'm a little unsure what you were trying to say here Barret, was that intended to be a crossover or a drama? The story didn't make much sense to me. Most of the story was just told not shown. When I began reading the story I saw the beginning of something good, but you seemed to have gotten lost somewhere along the way. Go back and add a little more dialogue and action, and in less you want to have this be a crossover loss the pokémon. I'm sorry if this review hurts, but the story does need work.