for Digimon: Divergeance Factor7/17/2005 c1 Justice Gundam
Well, what to say... welcome back to the world of Digimon fanfiction, Steeldramon! Your story sounds very promising, and I can see how your writing style has matured and improved over the years. I will keep my eyes on this story, and see how it turns out. I'm sure I won't be disappointed.
Oh, BTW, I'd like to second Dark Qiviut on one thing: I'd like to see no Yamato-bashing in this story. Pardon me for saying this, but you did that in some of your previous fics, and I was... less than happy about it. (Hey, just because I don't like Sorato, doesn't mean I don't like Yamato's character...)
All in all, a nice start! Go for it!
Well, what to say... welcome back to the world of Digimon fanfiction, Steeldramon! Your story sounds very promising, and I can see how your writing style has matured and improved over the years. I will keep my eyes on this story, and see how it turns out. I'm sure I won't be disappointed.
Oh, BTW, I'd like to second Dark Qiviut on one thing: I'd like to see no Yamato-bashing in this story. Pardon me for saying this, but you did that in some of your previous fics, and I was... less than happy about it. (Hey, just because I don't like Sorato, doesn't mean I don't like Yamato's character...)
All in all, a nice start! Go for it!
7/17/2005 c1 Blackwargreymon101
huh, good story, hope you make another chapter. I want to know what happens next... and I want to know BAD!
huh, good story, hope you make another chapter. I want to know what happens next... and I want to know BAD!
7/16/2005 c1 
17ghikiJ
Interesting, I'm looking forward on reading this story. Great prologue and good writing style. Update soon.
17ghikiJInteresting, I'm looking forward on reading this story. Great prologue and good writing style. Update soon.
7/16/2005 c1 6mickiept
yes, you're back! even though I've never reviewed you before you are one of my favorite authors.
You got this from Lord Archive, didn't you?
Yay! Taiora!
Well, what are you waiting for? Update!
Oh, and I agree with Dark Quivit, a few flashbacks wouldn't hurt.
6mickieptyes, you're back! even though I've never reviewed you before you are one of my favorite authors.
You got this from Lord Archive, didn't you?
Yay! Taiora!
Well, what are you waiting for? Update!
Oh, and I agree with Dark Quivit, a few flashbacks wouldn't hurt.
7/15/2005 c1 41Dark Qiviut
Ooh, talk about freaky, and talk about a cliffhanger. I wonder what's going to happen next. The cloud reminds me of Azulongmon, but *shrugs* we'll just have to see about that.
From what i saw, the idea does look a bit cliched, but it's quite well-written. I just only hope that Matt doesn't get bashed.
However, I do have something here that I believe should be takewn into account. Try not to narrate us events, tell us through flashbacks. this is what I mean here... (sixth and fifth-to-last paragraphs)
[ He glanced upward at the storm clouds approaching, smiling sadly to himself. The weather in the Digital World was merely another symptom of a new problem since the remaining portals were sealed by Azulongmon. After the incidents with MaloMyotismon and Armangemon, Taichi and the others were called to the Digital World once more by the Digital God. He told Taichi that someday a Digimon will come that WarGreymon will be needed to defeat. The power to digivolve to Mega, a gift that he recieved to battle BlackWarGreymon, would never leave him eventually but he still had a choice to make. For him to keep the power and battle the unknown evil would mean sacrificing any chance of a future with any of the DigiDestined women. Taichi glanced towards Sora and Matt as he weighted his odds, seeing them with a look of guilt as they separated their hands from each other. He would never deny his friends and teammates the happiness they deserved. That would be selfish, a trait he never wanted or even considered. The conclusion he reached was also the beginning of his personal banishment into the Digital World:
"I'll keep this power." ]
You should tell us through a flashback or two. That way, we can feel what was going on specifically.
Other than that, very good job. I like you to continue it. TAIORA & SORATO FOREVER!
41Dark QiviutOoh, talk about freaky, and talk about a cliffhanger. I wonder what's going to happen next. The cloud reminds me of Azulongmon, but *shrugs* we'll just have to see about that.
From what i saw, the idea does look a bit cliched, but it's quite well-written. I just only hope that Matt doesn't get bashed.
However, I do have something here that I believe should be takewn into account. Try not to narrate us events, tell us through flashbacks. this is what I mean here... (sixth and fifth-to-last paragraphs)
[ He glanced upward at the storm clouds approaching, smiling sadly to himself. The weather in the Digital World was merely another symptom of a new problem since the remaining portals were sealed by Azulongmon. After the incidents with MaloMyotismon and Armangemon, Taichi and the others were called to the Digital World once more by the Digital God. He told Taichi that someday a Digimon will come that WarGreymon will be needed to defeat. The power to digivolve to Mega, a gift that he recieved to battle BlackWarGreymon, would never leave him eventually but he still had a choice to make. For him to keep the power and battle the unknown evil would mean sacrificing any chance of a future with any of the DigiDestined women. Taichi glanced towards Sora and Matt as he weighted his odds, seeing them with a look of guilt as they separated their hands from each other. He would never deny his friends and teammates the happiness they deserved. That would be selfish, a trait he never wanted or even considered. The conclusion he reached was also the beginning of his personal banishment into the Digital World:
"I'll keep this power." ]
You should tell us through a flashback or two. That way, we can feel what was going on specifically.
Other than that, very good job. I like you to continue it. TAIORA & SORATO FOREVER!