for Richard, the Third3/16 c8 
3Ishmael of the Clouds
I have read this at least six times, and each time it just blows me away with how well it is written and how uniquely the character of Richard is encapsulated. *slow clap*
3Ishmael of the CloudsI have read this at least six times, and each time it just blows me away with how well it is written and how uniquely the character of Richard is encapsulated. *slow clap*
8/7/2012 c8 3Ordgar
This is a fantastic story and a well thought out adaptation of this classic tale and the fascinating history behind it. This would be a bestselling novel in my opinion. I wonder if you've read 'The Sunne In Splendour' by Sharon Kay Penman? It's a fantastic novelisation of the life of the real Richard III that I finished reading barely an hourly before I wrote this review and I was almost in tears several times whilst I read the last chapters about his reign. Anyway, a brilliant story, one of my favourite fanfictions, well done!
3OrdgarThis is a fantastic story and a well thought out adaptation of this classic tale and the fascinating history behind it. This would be a bestselling novel in my opinion. I wonder if you've read 'The Sunne In Splendour' by Sharon Kay Penman? It's a fantastic novelisation of the life of the real Richard III that I finished reading barely an hourly before I wrote this review and I was almost in tears several times whilst I read the last chapters about his reign. Anyway, a brilliant story, one of my favourite fanfictions, well done!
9/5/2011 c8 5Bess Woodville
OMG! That was sooo amazing, I like this and your portrayal of Richard and edward!
5Bess WoodvilleOMG! That was sooo amazing, I like this and your portrayal of Richard and edward!
8/24/2010 c8 tzitzitlini
I'm an old and dedicated Ricardian and I just loved the story. I share with you both the admiration for the historical Richard and the sneaky liking for the Shakespearean character.
Thanks for the story - this IS literature and not fan fiction.
I'm an old and dedicated Ricardian and I just loved the story. I share with you both the admiration for the historical Richard and the sneaky liking for the Shakespearean character.
Thanks for the story - this IS literature and not fan fiction.
2/5/2010 c8 31ScroogeMcDuck
I read through this story in one night; it was simply /amazing/. Astounding. Magnificent...You're smart enough to get where I'm going with this. XD
Breathtaking work here truly, what with all the historial references, your potrayls of Richard's minions (I was a particular fan of Catesby and Dr. Ingram) and of course, Richard himself. Your blend of historical and fictional (Shakespeare) never ceased to astound me. I must hasten to add that I really enjoyed your potrayl of Clarence also; very different to how I'd imagine it but that's what made it all so interesting.
Once again, stellar work. I'd definitley purchase this. ^^
31ScroogeMcDuckI read through this story in one night; it was simply /amazing/. Astounding. Magnificent...You're smart enough to get where I'm going with this. XD
Breathtaking work here truly, what with all the historial references, your potrayls of Richard's minions (I was a particular fan of Catesby and Dr. Ingram) and of course, Richard himself. Your blend of historical and fictional (Shakespeare) never ceased to astound me. I must hasten to add that I really enjoyed your potrayl of Clarence also; very different to how I'd imagine it but that's what made it all so interesting.
Once again, stellar work. I'd definitley purchase this. ^^
4/19/2009 c8 1mel barrow
hi, i dont know who u r but if i worked for a publishing company i sure would want to find out. this is book matiral stuff. it plays out like a cross between a soap opra and shakespears orginal. i applaud u. it's brilent.
1mel barrowhi, i dont know who u r but if i worked for a publishing company i sure would want to find out. this is book matiral stuff. it plays out like a cross between a soap opra and shakespears orginal. i applaud u. it's brilent.
8/29/2007 c8 Ringkichardthethrid
Bravo. This is easily the best thing I have ever read on this site.
Bravo. This is easily the best thing I have ever read on this site.
10/25/2006 c8 3RogueFemme
He's not the historical Richard, nor Shakespeare's Richard, but a little of both in a new personality. That's not easy to do, but you've managed it admirably. I like the little references to history and to the play, and the story was just different enough from WS's to keep the reader wondering what comes next. I especially enjoyed your characterization of Richard's 'minions'.
It's nice to see so many other Ricardians on
3RogueFemmeHe's not the historical Richard, nor Shakespeare's Richard, but a little of both in a new personality. That's not easy to do, but you've managed it admirably. I like the little references to history and to the play, and the story was just different enough from WS's to keep the reader wondering what comes next. I especially enjoyed your characterization of Richard's 'minions'.
It's nice to see so many other Ricardians on
7/29/2006 c5 5Little White Bird
I really loved this.
Richard I fanfiction is my favourite thing ever, and there's not nearly enough of it around. All the psychological stuff - of Richard and of the others - really rings true, and all the little references to the play and to history made me squirm with delight.
You said you wanted constructive criticism. Until about half way through I really thought you were going to get away with making Primavera that much of a Mary Sue, but I'm afraid I don't think you did. She gets irritating by the end. I know we're seeing her through Richard's eyes, but she needs a few proper flaws - if you don't want R to be able to see them, there are ways of making the reader do so despite his blindness.
The main problem is with Richard himself though. What does Primavera say in that wonderful speech when they get together: "while at the same time being the most fascinatingly evil and reprehensible creature on the face of the earth..." Um... no. He's a bit sarcastic, and when he was younger he was understandably quite bitter and angry. He has a few blind spots, like not thinking about what motivates other people, but he is mostly aware of them and doing his best to counter them. Basically the man's a saint: honest, conscientious, generous, altruistic.
It reads as though you fell in love with him as you were writing him and couldn't bear to make him evil in any way, then suddenly remembered what you were supposed to be doing in chapter 7, and put those words in Primavera's mouth, where they sound a bit silly.
I really did enjoy it though - it would be well worth editing. I've gone on for too long. If you want more feedback, contact me.
5Little White BirdI really loved this.
Richard I fanfiction is my favourite thing ever, and there's not nearly enough of it around. All the psychological stuff - of Richard and of the others - really rings true, and all the little references to the play and to history made me squirm with delight.
You said you wanted constructive criticism. Until about half way through I really thought you were going to get away with making Primavera that much of a Mary Sue, but I'm afraid I don't think you did. She gets irritating by the end. I know we're seeing her through Richard's eyes, but she needs a few proper flaws - if you don't want R to be able to see them, there are ways of making the reader do so despite his blindness.
The main problem is with Richard himself though. What does Primavera say in that wonderful speech when they get together: "while at the same time being the most fascinatingly evil and reprehensible creature on the face of the earth..." Um... no. He's a bit sarcastic, and when he was younger he was understandably quite bitter and angry. He has a few blind spots, like not thinking about what motivates other people, but he is mostly aware of them and doing his best to counter them. Basically the man's a saint: honest, conscientious, generous, altruistic.
It reads as though you fell in love with him as you were writing him and couldn't bear to make him evil in any way, then suddenly remembered what you were supposed to be doing in chapter 7, and put those words in Primavera's mouth, where they sound a bit silly.
I really did enjoy it though - it would be well worth editing. I've gone on for too long. If you want more feedback, contact me.
7/13/2006 c8 Thornwitch
Wow! What an absolutely fabulous story! and BTW, your'e one of the only authors on here who usually makes me want to go dive into the non-fiction section of the Public Library to do research! I totally enjoyed the characters, the not-so subtle digs at certain faith-based organizations and their philosophy, and of course, the lovely way you wove global climate change into your tale.
I feel kind of sheepish that I haven't read or reviewed it earlier, but life has been...interesting lately.
So agin, yay! great novella. It saved me from losing my marbles (more)during some very mind-numbing days in my alternate life as an express wearing, cubicle-dwelling corporate cog.
Wow! What an absolutely fabulous story! and BTW, your'e one of the only authors on here who usually makes me want to go dive into the non-fiction section of the Public Library to do research! I totally enjoyed the characters, the not-so subtle digs at certain faith-based organizations and their philosophy, and of course, the lovely way you wove global climate change into your tale.
I feel kind of sheepish that I haven't read or reviewed it earlier, but life has been...interesting lately.
So agin, yay! great novella. It saved me from losing my marbles (more)during some very mind-numbing days in my alternate life as an express wearing, cubicle-dwelling corporate cog.
5/18/2006 c8 8Rosy the Cat
*blink-blink*
Huh. Well, that last bit contradicts some of the stuff on Richard I that made it into one of my favorite history books. Note to self: do some more research over the summer.
Kick-** job over all, Gevaisa. You rock.
- Rosy
8Rosy the Cat*blink-blink*
Huh. Well, that last bit contradicts some of the stuff on Richard I that made it into one of my favorite history books. Note to self: do some more research over the summer.
Kick-** job over all, Gevaisa. You rock.
- Rosy
5/18/2006 c5 Rosy the Cat
D'oh!
Can you believe it took me this long to notice the British history reference for the company name, Gevaisa? A.L.-Bion, or Albion, the original name for the island of Britain as recorded by Greek sailors. Yeesh; some history nut I am!
Anyway, the story is certainly interesting, certian issues we both know about nonwithstanding. Great job so far, mi amiga!
- Rosy
D'oh!
Can you believe it took me this long to notice the British history reference for the company name, Gevaisa? A.L.-Bion, or Albion, the original name for the island of Britain as recorded by Greek sailors. Yeesh; some history nut I am!
Anyway, the story is certainly interesting, certian issues we both know about nonwithstanding. Great job so far, mi amiga!
- Rosy
5/18/2006 c2 Rosy the Cat
*blink-blink*
Wow. This is certainly interesting, Gevaisa. I'm wondering, where did you get the idea for Richard's family faith? I mean, what current religion was the basis for it, like X religion to the extreme? Just curious.
- Rosy
*blink-blink*
Wow. This is certainly interesting, Gevaisa. I'm wondering, where did you get the idea for Richard's family faith? I mean, what current religion was the basis for it, like X religion to the extreme? Just curious.
- Rosy
5/18/2006 c8 Amokitty
I was so disappointed to know that we've reached the end. The relationship between Richard and Primavera always made for interesting reading, but now that things have changed for the better between them, we won't get to see how they adjust to these new changes. I'm so glad that they owned up to one another about their feelings. Those two have such a witty chemistry between them. They have GOT to be fun to write!
I kept thinking that there would be a takeover battle between Richmond and Richard. But this story doesn't follow historical events precisely, and that's one of the many reasons this story makes for such a fascinating read. I was bemused that Bosworth(a company, NOT a location), played a part in Richard's defeat. At least he wasn't betrayed by those dearest to him.
Unlike his historical counterpart, this isn't the end of OUR Richard! ;) We know it's only his beginning. Thank you for such an exceptional story.
I was so disappointed to know that we've reached the end. The relationship between Richard and Primavera always made for interesting reading, but now that things have changed for the better between them, we won't get to see how they adjust to these new changes. I'm so glad that they owned up to one another about their feelings. Those two have such a witty chemistry between them. They have GOT to be fun to write!
I kept thinking that there would be a takeover battle between Richmond and Richard. But this story doesn't follow historical events precisely, and that's one of the many reasons this story makes for such a fascinating read. I was bemused that Bosworth(a company, NOT a location), played a part in Richard's defeat. At least he wasn't betrayed by those dearest to him.
Unlike his historical counterpart, this isn't the end of OUR Richard! ;) We know it's only his beginning. Thank you for such an exceptional story.