for Tainted Perfection9/6/2011 c1 Angelusdeath
That is so fucking depressing! I am so going to get a tattoo that says 'some hearts are ment to ache, some love is ment to break' because it so true.
That is so fucking depressing! I am so going to get a tattoo that says 'some hearts are ment to ache, some love is ment to break' because it so true.
7/26/2011 c2 DeviousAdolescent317
This made me so emotional, I thought I was about to start my period. It's so well written! :')
This made me so emotional, I thought I was about to start my period. It's so well written! :')
1/8/2011 c1 Still Paige
... wait, okay. When I said "Scrunchy, this is... gah. I went through your stories and saw TWINCEST and do you know what I thought?
."
I meant to say, "...do you know what I thought?
YES."
But apparantly FFN thinks that yes isn't a word, because it deleted it. But now I am saying it again. Take that, stupid fanfiction site! (That I adore...)
... wait, okay. When I said "Scrunchy, this is... gah. I went through your stories and saw TWINCEST and do you know what I thought?
."
I meant to say, "...do you know what I thought?
YES."
But apparantly FFN thinks that yes isn't a word, because it deleted it. But now I am saying it again. Take that, stupid fanfiction site! (That I adore...)
1/8/2011 c2 
21echoing noise
This chapter made me want to string up every single effing person that did ANYTHING to Fred OR George my their vocal cords and leave them hanging from a power line.
And that girl? The one who weased him about Fred? Oh, they'll be lucky to find even a pinkie nail...
UGH. There was more Weasley death/sadness in the chapter, but I can live with it because all it is is a reflection of all the pain and suffering the twins have to deal with. I have to agree with George on this one: they're messed up.
Not for being together. For everything - everyone - else.
And you know what? Somehow, I think this story makes me okay with the HarryRon - I think it's a cruel parralell to all the pain and insanity of FredGeorge, and, well - you can't just hide pain, or pretend it's not there. Because there isn't really... a rug to sweep it under, is there?
One nitpick is that this sentence is missing a period:
So far I haven't broken, but there are cracks, fissures in my mind. They started out small: his abandoned cloak lying on a chair, collecting dust; a broken glass alone on the table; a half empty bottle of firewhiskey behind the sofa having fallen astray in the heat of the moment
...but besides that, ugh, I love this so much. I also am so glad that it's a twoshot. Normally, those really bother me, but with this it's absolutley perfect. Keep writing, most definitly.
21echoing noiseThis chapter made me want to string up every single effing person that did ANYTHING to Fred OR George my their vocal cords and leave them hanging from a power line.
And that girl? The one who weased him about Fred? Oh, they'll be lucky to find even a pinkie nail...
UGH. There was more Weasley death/sadness in the chapter, but I can live with it because all it is is a reflection of all the pain and suffering the twins have to deal with. I have to agree with George on this one: they're messed up.
Not for being together. For everything - everyone - else.
And you know what? Somehow, I think this story makes me okay with the HarryRon - I think it's a cruel parralell to all the pain and insanity of FredGeorge, and, well - you can't just hide pain, or pretend it's not there. Because there isn't really... a rug to sweep it under, is there?
One nitpick is that this sentence is missing a period:
So far I haven't broken, but there are cracks, fissures in my mind. They started out small: his abandoned cloak lying on a chair, collecting dust; a broken glass alone on the table; a half empty bottle of firewhiskey behind the sofa having fallen astray in the heat of the moment
...but besides that, ugh, I love this so much. I also am so glad that it's a twoshot. Normally, those really bother me, but with this it's absolutley perfect. Keep writing, most definitly.
1/8/2011 c1 echoing noise
Scrunchy, this is... gah. I went through your stories and saw TWINCEST and do you know what I thought?
.
I adore twincest. Maybe that's weird of me. But... gah. I do really, really like this pairing. I'm sorry. It's my guilty pleasure, really it is - I have a horrible habit of brining dead characters back to life, and Fred seems to always be tempting me...
Anyway, I have not yet read the next chapter because I was so eager to rant about the wonders of this one. But I hope you won't mind a little constructive critisism!
My first nitpick is that the sentence, "People do not often see what they don't think will be there, or what they don't want to see." I was reading along, thinking about how much it sounded like Forge was really talking to me, when, BAM, I got hit by this sentence!
So I read it again. "What is it?" I thought. "What is it about this sentence that bothers me?" But then I got it: you need an M dash! Of course, silly! :)
How I think it should be is "People do not often see what they don't think will be there - what the don't want to see."
And then, feeling self-righteous and overly helpful, I continued to read.
This line, here: "We were screwed, in all senses of the word." - I adored that. Wonderful, and twincest-alicious. YUM!
When you mentioned Hermione - oh my. Please be grateful that this is the thing called the internet, because if I could I would beat you with a broom. I am very protective of Hermione. :'( Why are you so mean to her? Did you not hear her screams from DH?
...*shudder*
And then the shop - oh, I adored that, I really did. It's just so *them*, you know? It's spot on perfect. GREAT JOB.
Ginny and Arthur... murdered. Nonononononononoooooooo! Whatever will happen to Harry, I wonder?
Oh. OH. But then you've got HarryRon, don't you?
Please imagine my face contorted into an expression of deep disgust.
Moving on: I adore this, adore this, ADORE THIS. Thanks so much for writing - I'm off to the next chapter!
Scrunchy, this is... gah. I went through your stories and saw TWINCEST and do you know what I thought?
.
I adore twincest. Maybe that's weird of me. But... gah. I do really, really like this pairing. I'm sorry. It's my guilty pleasure, really it is - I have a horrible habit of brining dead characters back to life, and Fred seems to always be tempting me...
Anyway, I have not yet read the next chapter because I was so eager to rant about the wonders of this one. But I hope you won't mind a little constructive critisism!
My first nitpick is that the sentence, "People do not often see what they don't think will be there, or what they don't want to see." I was reading along, thinking about how much it sounded like Forge was really talking to me, when, BAM, I got hit by this sentence!
So I read it again. "What is it?" I thought. "What is it about this sentence that bothers me?" But then I got it: you need an M dash! Of course, silly! :)
How I think it should be is "People do not often see what they don't think will be there - what the don't want to see."
And then, feeling self-righteous and overly helpful, I continued to read.
This line, here: "We were screwed, in all senses of the word." - I adored that. Wonderful, and twincest-alicious. YUM!
When you mentioned Hermione - oh my. Please be grateful that this is the thing called the internet, because if I could I would beat you with a broom. I am very protective of Hermione. :'( Why are you so mean to her? Did you not hear her screams from DH?
...*shudder*
And then the shop - oh, I adored that, I really did. It's just so *them*, you know? It's spot on perfect. GREAT JOB.
Ginny and Arthur... murdered. Nonononononononoooooooo! Whatever will happen to Harry, I wonder?
Oh. OH. But then you've got HarryRon, don't you?
Please imagine my face contorted into an expression of deep disgust.
Moving on: I adore this, adore this, ADORE THIS. Thanks so much for writing - I'm off to the next chapter!
12/6/2010 c1 Rhocar
Wow, what a different slant, looking at two major taboos of normalcy.
The bond between twins, the lines blurred, is incest in this case as taboo, as in others, not including parental involvement.
Congratulations a well written piece, I could feel the angst, the heart can be the biggest traitor to a head that fights to be an decent citizen according to societal norms.
Wow, what a different slant, looking at two major taboos of normalcy.
The bond between twins, the lines blurred, is incest in this case as taboo, as in others, not including parental involvement.
Congratulations a well written piece, I could feel the angst, the heart can be the biggest traitor to a head that fights to be an decent citizen according to societal norms.
2/13/2010 c2 116Bad Mum
This is really well done. I like how you make it all one-sided from Fred to start with and George just going along with it, but then he gets sucked in too. The angst and their desperate dependence on each other is good without being overdone. Kudos. (This from someone who doesn;t believe in twincest...!)
116Bad MumThis is really well done. I like how you make it all one-sided from Fred to start with and George just going along with it, but then he gets sucked in too. The angst and their desperate dependence on each other is good without being overdone. Kudos. (This from someone who doesn;t believe in twincest...!)
7/14/2009 c2 HinoteMeize
mwahha...Damn... you killed me! Love your story!
mwahha...Damn... you killed me! Love your story!
2/8/2009 c2 1Tinuviel Simbelmyne
George knowing all the way was really intelligent.
Oh I can't bear to see them separated!
Euge
1Tinuviel SimbelmyneGeorge knowing all the way was really intelligent.
Oh I can't bear to see them separated!
Euge
2/8/2009 c1 Tinuviel Simbelmyne
Is it really so?
I mean, it'd be strange at first, but after all there's only one life and, can you deprive yourself of love?
In the end, love is love.
Euge
Is it really so?
I mean, it'd be strange at first, but after all there's only one life and, can you deprive yourself of love?
In the end, love is love.
Euge
8/9/2008 c2 BugGurl240
dude this is so depressing! why van't the world just let them be? and why did everybody die? both Fred and George's POV's were crazy. this was so deep... i don'tknow what elseto say! good story though.
dude this is so depressing! why van't the world just let them be? and why did everybody die? both Fred and George's POV's were crazy. this was so deep... i don'tknow what elseto say! good story though.
7/18/2008 c2 2DragonMistress333
This is the only incest fiction I've ever read that I actually liked. It's believable, and very beautifully done. Good job.
2DragonMistress333This is the only incest fiction I've ever read that I actually liked. It's believable, and very beautifully done. Good job.