for Fish Bird4/27 c22 Shiroxcat
Oh no, why did I have to read so fast all available chapters, so I don't have anything to read now ;( I saw your story some time ago, but try to resist to read it, because I saw the date of last update. After one of your post on your lj ( where you posted someone's review ) I just couldn't resist anymore and I was really in need to read something good! Of course you or rather your story didn't disappoint me! I like how you perfect portrayed Sasuke and Naruto relationship progress, from 'hate' and awkard interaction you was able to change it into deep devotion toward each other. And all of this you wrote really naturally, so I'm really impressed and jealous! I also like how you amazingly described all these frightening scenes and monsters, so I nearly got a chills while reading it. I wasn't prepared in this story for so scary things! But I've to admit that it's positive surprise, maybe you should add to genre horror or supernatural? Or you want to keep a mysterious aura and make a surprise for readers? I'm glad that you in the end decided to write that plot twist with Kiba, I sensed already, when they found him that something is wrong with him, but I was afraid that you won't write anything twisted with him. Y'know pression from readers could be difficult to handle. I hope you know what I mean. It was also enjoyable to get to know all clues slowly, not just reading everything in one chapter. At first it was a bit frustrating to not knowing what's going on and being worried that I could miss something, like with that chakra restriction or from where that 'things' came, but in the end it turned out to be enjoyable. I imagine that it was difficult to not write too much secrets at once and part by part acquaint reader with plot? I'm also happy that you was able to keep everyone in character, even Sakura ( many people unconciously change her, when her role includes to be the one who stands between Sasuke and Naruto relationship ). I enjoyed all moments with Sasuke and Naruto, including their great conversations ( even when they're arguing like a mad dogs ) or sex scenes. Only things with bothered me was that you used word 'kitsune' for describing Naruto. It's not like I have something against of using this word, but I just have a bad association with it in fanfics. In many childish fanfics, where for example Naruto is a fox, Sasuke a wolf, authors tend to describe Naruto as 'kitsune', so I just don't have a good memories with that word XD wouldn't be a blond/blonde better for describing Naruto? Second thing, which bothered me was the fact that Naruto in front of Sakura was betraying her with Sasuke ( like letting kiss him ). Even if he explained to Sakura what it's between him and Sasuke, I still can't imagine that he would do that to her. Of course I can be just oversensitive about it ( after all my exboyfriend do that to me ), so don't take it personally.
As for next chapter, I wonder what exactly these 'things' ( sorry I don't have an idea how to call them ) want from Naruto, is it bijuu or the fact that he is precious to Sasuke? It's a bit confusing for me. I have bad premonition that Sasuke and Naruto will die together, after Naruto's promise to Sakura :(
I hope that you didn't lose interest in writing this story, because it's really well-written and I see that you over thought plot, so please don't abandon it :) and congratulations for yout 500th fav! And I love your icon with Nicolas Cage XD
Oh no, why did I have to read so fast all available chapters, so I don't have anything to read now ;( I saw your story some time ago, but try to resist to read it, because I saw the date of last update. After one of your post on your lj ( where you posted someone's review ) I just couldn't resist anymore and I was really in need to read something good! Of course you or rather your story didn't disappoint me! I like how you perfect portrayed Sasuke and Naruto relationship progress, from 'hate' and awkard interaction you was able to change it into deep devotion toward each other. And all of this you wrote really naturally, so I'm really impressed and jealous! I also like how you amazingly described all these frightening scenes and monsters, so I nearly got a chills while reading it. I wasn't prepared in this story for so scary things! But I've to admit that it's positive surprise, maybe you should add to genre horror or supernatural? Or you want to keep a mysterious aura and make a surprise for readers? I'm glad that you in the end decided to write that plot twist with Kiba, I sensed already, when they found him that something is wrong with him, but I was afraid that you won't write anything twisted with him. Y'know pression from readers could be difficult to handle. I hope you know what I mean. It was also enjoyable to get to know all clues slowly, not just reading everything in one chapter. At first it was a bit frustrating to not knowing what's going on and being worried that I could miss something, like with that chakra restriction or from where that 'things' came, but in the end it turned out to be enjoyable. I imagine that it was difficult to not write too much secrets at once and part by part acquaint reader with plot? I'm also happy that you was able to keep everyone in character, even Sakura ( many people unconciously change her, when her role includes to be the one who stands between Sasuke and Naruto relationship ). I enjoyed all moments with Sasuke and Naruto, including their great conversations ( even when they're arguing like a mad dogs ) or sex scenes. Only things with bothered me was that you used word 'kitsune' for describing Naruto. It's not like I have something against of using this word, but I just have a bad association with it in fanfics. In many childish fanfics, where for example Naruto is a fox, Sasuke a wolf, authors tend to describe Naruto as 'kitsune', so I just don't have a good memories with that word XD wouldn't be a blond/blonde better for describing Naruto? Second thing, which bothered me was the fact that Naruto in front of Sakura was betraying her with Sasuke ( like letting kiss him ). Even if he explained to Sakura what it's between him and Sasuke, I still can't imagine that he would do that to her. Of course I can be just oversensitive about it ( after all my exboyfriend do that to me ), so don't take it personally.
As for next chapter, I wonder what exactly these 'things' ( sorry I don't have an idea how to call them ) want from Naruto, is it bijuu or the fact that he is precious to Sasuke? It's a bit confusing for me. I have bad premonition that Sasuke and Naruto will die together, after Naruto's promise to Sakura :(
I hope that you didn't lose interest in writing this story, because it's really well-written and I see that you over thought plot, so please don't abandon it :) and congratulations for yout 500th fav! And I love your icon with Nicolas Cage XD
3/25 c22 Narusasu lover
Love love your story please come back
Love love your story please come back
3/11 c22 
1justanotherwriterchic
You're writing is incredible and I'm so hooked on this story. I hate the tragedy of everything that's going on but I love it too and I can't unhook myself from the roller coaster of emotion that is SasuNaru. I just want to know what happens next so please continue :)
1justanotherwriterchicYou're writing is incredible and I'm so hooked on this story. I hate the tragedy of everything that's going on but I love it too and I can't unhook myself from the roller coaster of emotion that is SasuNaru. I just want to know what happens next so please continue :)
11/21/2012 c15 Failing Mentality
Hm, maybe the statue was pointing at an escape direction? My attempt at trying to find humor in this morbid situation and infinitely sad state of events (Naruto, let him admit it, and you admit it yourself, too!) is severely lacking.
The plot and everything is much, much deeper and thicker than I thought. I like!
Hm, maybe the statue was pointing at an escape direction? My attempt at trying to find humor in this morbid situation and infinitely sad state of events (Naruto, let him admit it, and you admit it yourself, too!) is severely lacking.
The plot and everything is much, much deeper and thicker than I thought. I like!
11/21/2012 c13 Failing Mentality
Now I'm scared. I'm scared of what mess Sasuke made and how it will affect Naruto.
Did Naruto really hit it right on the head: that Sasuke made a deal with the black things/pygmies? Sasuke didn't summon those things, did he?
-praying for a happy ending-
Now I'm scared. I'm scared of what mess Sasuke made and how it will affect Naruto.
Did Naruto really hit it right on the head: that Sasuke made a deal with the black things/pygmies? Sasuke didn't summon those things, did he?
-praying for a happy ending-
11/21/2012 c12 Failing Mentality
What! Oh my god. I was afraid that Naruto would pull a Kiba, but thankfully he has a little more sense? Obviously it is Naruto's first time being wooed, whether as a man or a woman. Lulz
(I recall that my reviews were more substantive, so I edited my terse exclamatories to a full two sentences. _;;; )
I want to know what Sasuke thinks AT NIGHT! I swear, he only gets really mushy at nighttime when Naruto is asleep. I want to know that side of Sasuke so I can finally, finally FINALLY-!
Wait, as much as I want to know, I also want Naruto to know, too. Argh...!
What! Oh my god. I was afraid that Naruto would pull a Kiba, but thankfully he has a little more sense? Obviously it is Naruto's first time being wooed, whether as a man or a woman. Lulz
(I recall that my reviews were more substantive, so I edited my terse exclamatories to a full two sentences. _;;; )
I want to know what Sasuke thinks AT NIGHT! I swear, he only gets really mushy at nighttime when Naruto is asleep. I want to know that side of Sasuke so I can finally, finally FINALLY-!
Wait, as much as I want to know, I also want Naruto to know, too. Argh...!
11/21/2012 c8 Failing Mentality
LOLLERZ! I love how everything shifts so smoothly! I don't mean slow, for events do happen abruptly sometimes in here, but the flow is wonderful.
I'm surprised that Shikamaru is so RESPONSIBLE! He is taking on everybody's duties. But oh, dear, what will his deer think about his sudden exclamation? xP
I am reminded of when I first read this. -sighs dreamily-
LOLLERZ! I love how everything shifts so smoothly! I don't mean slow, for events do happen abruptly sometimes in here, but the flow is wonderful.
I'm surprised that Shikamaru is so RESPONSIBLE! He is taking on everybody's duties. But oh, dear, what will his deer think about his sudden exclamation? xP
I am reminded of when I first read this. -sighs dreamily-
11/21/2012 c7 Failing Mentality
WHAT! How come I never got updates for this anymore! Why is this not in my alerts now?!
I can't believe I didn't even know that this was still being written. (Why IS it gone from my alerts list?! -hits head- )
You don't know how happy I am to find this again.
-cries-
WHAT! How come I never got updates for this anymore! Why is this not in my alerts now?!
I can't believe I didn't even know that this was still being written. (Why IS it gone from my alerts list?! -hits head- )
You don't know how happy I am to find this again.
-cries-
10/26/2012 c1 32GwennielOfNargothrond
Amazing story! Very good, and how you spun it from a romance into a full-blown adventure was great. (yeah, this is like a review for the whole story so far).
I love how you writer Sakura. Most SasuNaru fics either pair her with someone else, have her killed/broken up with or just being a complete b!tch. You wrote her well and now later on she really feels important to the story - and to Naruto! The bond is there and how it is something beyond attraction - a deeper understanding - is so sweet, even though we all know that this story mostly deals with the relationship between Naruto and Sasuke.
Speaking of relationships, how come Kiba and Shikamaru are so close friends? I don't mind it, but to me it seems strange that Shikamaru is so important, yet Choji doesn't get to do anything until chapters and chapters later. In the same way I wondered about where Akamaru was for the first 10 chapters, but with Choji... well, it felt as if you were undermining his character.
Other than that, keep writing! :D Because you're great at it.
32GwennielOfNargothrondAmazing story! Very good, and how you spun it from a romance into a full-blown adventure was great. (yeah, this is like a review for the whole story so far).
I love how you writer Sakura. Most SasuNaru fics either pair her with someone else, have her killed/broken up with or just being a complete b!tch. You wrote her well and now later on she really feels important to the story - and to Naruto! The bond is there and how it is something beyond attraction - a deeper understanding - is so sweet, even though we all know that this story mostly deals with the relationship between Naruto and Sasuke.
Speaking of relationships, how come Kiba and Shikamaru are so close friends? I don't mind it, but to me it seems strange that Shikamaru is so important, yet Choji doesn't get to do anything until chapters and chapters later. In the same way I wondered about where Akamaru was for the first 10 chapters, but with Choji... well, it felt as if you were undermining his character.
Other than that, keep writing! :D Because you're great at it.
9/11/2012 c22 jhimenie.towers
Ok, At the beginning of the story I just Loved the whole thing, now, I'm not so sure. Too much going on, too much angst (It makes me wanna cry with frustration) and what the hell it's going on with sasu and naru? Why can just be happy for God's sake? Heh.
You're a very good writer. Take your time and make a happy ending pleaseee :-)
Ok, At the beginning of the story I just Loved the whole thing, now, I'm not so sure. Too much going on, too much angst (It makes me wanna cry with frustration) and what the hell it's going on with sasu and naru? Why can just be happy for God's sake? Heh.
You're a very good writer. Take your time and make a happy ending pleaseee :-)