for Seed of Dreams, Root of Evil5/6/2008 c4 
92LilyHellsing
You keep saying "Bushroot" over and over again. Why not describe him as "the green plant like man" or something like that? This chapter gives off a vibe of a play more than a story. Just helpful critisism so dont go all pissy at me.
Perhaps a rewrite?
92LilyHellsingYou keep saying "Bushroot" over and over again. Why not describe him as "the green plant like man" or something like that? This chapter gives off a vibe of a play more than a story. Just helpful critisism so dont go all pissy at me.
Perhaps a rewrite?
5/6/2008 c2 LilyHellsing
Um...Its been a while since Ive watched Darkwing Duck but I dont recall any influence of Japanese...So it seems really out of place, which brings the story down a little bit.
Um...Its been a while since Ive watched Darkwing Duck but I dont recall any influence of Japanese...So it seems really out of place, which brings the story down a little bit.
3/8/2008 c4 ThunderRiver411
Good story. I'm working on a crossover so if you have time check it out if you want.
Good story. I'm working on a crossover so if you have time check it out if you want.
2/5/2008 c4 49acosta perez jose ramiro
Very good one! Great job with Reggie's background.
Keep the good writing.
49acosta perez jose ramiroVery good one! Great job with Reggie's background.
Keep the good writing.
12/23/2006 c1 49acosta perez jose ramiro
Nice start. Moliarty isn't a very commonly used character, and is cool to see him in a story.
Keep the good writing, and Merry X-Mas.
49acosta perez jose ramiroNice start. Moliarty isn't a very commonly used character, and is cool to see him in a story.
Keep the good writing, and Merry X-Mas.