for Teralose7/15/2007 c4 Awsomewriter123
The story's pretty good so far. You took a little while to introduce vermin, but i did the same thing with my redwall fic. Please add a battle scene soon!
The story's pretty good so far. You took a little while to introduce vermin, but i did the same thing with my redwall fic. Please add a battle scene soon!
7/15/2007 c4 warriorofredwall
Hi, wow! Great chapter! In second for the moment!
warriorofredwall.
contest manganer.
Hi, wow! Great chapter! In second for the moment!
warriorofredwall.
contest manganer.
7/15/2007 c4 
6Dirk O'Reilly
This chapter was very good! I really like the whole culture thing you created with the vermin and the Dark Forest. Are the vermins' names in Russian? And could you maybe tell me how to pronounce them, because I don't know that alphabet.
A few spelling/grammar mistakes, so maybe read through the chapter before you post.
But great job!
6Dirk O'ReillyThis chapter was very good! I really like the whole culture thing you created with the vermin and the Dark Forest. Are the vermins' names in Russian? And could you maybe tell me how to pronounce them, because I don't know that alphabet.
A few spelling/grammar mistakes, so maybe read through the chapter before you post.
But great job!
7/15/2007 c4 5Archer of Freedom
I don't get the vermin names. I can't read them! Unless I copy it onto Word...
Great chapter! can't wait for more!
:)
~Archer
5Archer of FreedomI don't get the vermin names. I can't read them! Unless I copy it onto Word...
Great chapter! can't wait for more!
:)
~Archer
7/14/2007 c4 7Sabrepaw AKA CrazyPirateMouse
Wow. That must be heart wrenching not to tell the one you love your back. I like Boar's little ball. ^^
7Sabrepaw AKA CrazyPirateMouseWow. That must be heart wrenching not to tell the one you love your back. I like Boar's little ball. ^^
7/13/2007 c3 Sabrepaw AKA CrazyPirateMouse
I like this story alot! *Raises hand* I KNOW GONFF'S HERITAGE! I DO, I DO! *Giggles* And I'm working on when he meets his parents this very moment. :D
I like this story alot! *Raises hand* I KNOW GONFF'S HERITAGE! I DO, I DO! *Giggles* And I'm working on when he meets his parents this very moment. :D
6/9/2007 c3 Emzy
write more, write more, i want to know the end Plz
write more, write more, i want to know the end Plz
6/7/2007 c3 warriorofredwall
Very good, mate! Currently in third! I really hope Martin remembers Rose soon. There meant to be together.
warriorofredwall.
Very good, mate! Currently in third! I really hope Martin remembers Rose soon. There meant to be together.
warriorofredwall.
6/7/2007 c3 6Dirk O'Reilly
Hmm, I hate to leave bad reviews but...
Martin *did* remember about Rose and everything, he just chose not to talk about it. The Noonvalers also seem really OOC. I think only about...sixteen went to war with Martin the first time (that number may be wrong, but it popped into my head). Urran barely let Martin talk to the Noonvalers the first time, so it's highly unlikely he'd let them all go to war. Also, keep in mind, the Noonvalers have no real training.
So, yea...I hope I haven't offended you.
6Dirk O'ReillyHmm, I hate to leave bad reviews but...
Martin *did* remember about Rose and everything, he just chose not to talk about it. The Noonvalers also seem really OOC. I think only about...sixteen went to war with Martin the first time (that number may be wrong, but it popped into my head). Urran barely let Martin talk to the Noonvalers the first time, so it's highly unlikely he'd let them all go to war. Also, keep in mind, the Noonvalers have no real training.
So, yea...I hope I haven't offended you.
6/7/2007 c3 5Archer of Freedom
Geez, you have a knack for leaving me hanging, storiewriter. You have one or two mistakes, though. a few missing words and a grammar problemo, me thinks. BUT, I am not going to tell you where they are, so you will have to read your chapter again, and if you don't find anything, you have to read it over. and over and over and over and over and over and...I think you get the idea. :D
Still an awesome story!~Archer
5Archer of FreedomGeez, you have a knack for leaving me hanging, storiewriter. You have one or two mistakes, though. a few missing words and a grammar problemo, me thinks. BUT, I am not going to tell you where they are, so you will have to read your chapter again, and if you don't find anything, you have to read it over. and over and over and over and over and over and...I think you get the idea. :D
Still an awesome story!~Archer
6/1/2007 c2 6Dirk O'Reilly
This is turning out to be very interesting. There were some spelling/grammar errors, so you should probably read through your chapters once before you post them, or another time if you already read through them.
Martin seemed a little too out-going, but you did Gonff extremely well, along with Rose. It would help if you were more consitent with calling Rose either Rose or Teralose when not writing dialogue.
Overall, this is pretty good.
6Dirk O'ReillyThis is turning out to be very interesting. There were some spelling/grammar errors, so you should probably read through your chapters once before you post them, or another time if you already read through them.
Martin seemed a little too out-going, but you did Gonff extremely well, along with Rose. It would help if you were more consitent with calling Rose either Rose or Teralose when not writing dialogue.
Overall, this is pretty good.
5/31/2007 c2 warriorofredwall
Very good chapter, mate! Moved into second!
warriorofredwall.
Very good chapter, mate! Moved into second!
warriorofredwall.