for Assistance9/14/2008 c1 
6Wot Wot Wark
Very well-written! I'm pretty surprised this doesn't have many reviews. Any, what can I say that the other reviewers haven't? Everyone was very in-character! Even though it is indeed odd that Steiner is so innocent, it's very cute, and seems surprisingly IC. Agree about the commas, too (there seem to be a few missing). I loved the ending, too. Made me smile. :) Thanks for this fic, keep up the good work!
6Wot Wot WarkVery well-written! I'm pretty surprised this doesn't have many reviews. Any, what can I say that the other reviewers haven't? Everyone was very in-character! Even though it is indeed odd that Steiner is so innocent, it's very cute, and seems surprisingly IC. Agree about the commas, too (there seem to be a few missing). I loved the ending, too. Made me smile. :) Thanks for this fic, keep up the good work!
7/15/2007 c1 74Charlett
Daw, that was an adorable story... I logged on to find badfic and make fun of it, but I found a goodfic and showed it to her instead!
I'm so glad I found a nice story! Steiner-centric too! My baby Steiner needs some more love. Beatrix and I can only give him so much...
There were a few parts when I thought a comma would be needed. The dialogue didn't seem to flow as well without them. I once read that people tried to remove unneeded commas in Shakespear's plays and the actors didn't know when to pause. I only assume it applies here as well.
Also, Steiner seemed a little... TOO innocent. I mean, I like him acting all bashful like that, but that night in the 3rd disk when they met, they practically grabbed each other for a kissfest. I suppose one could write it off as hormones taking over, but I think you may want to look that over one more time.
Anyway, the story itself was very good and I enjoyed reading it. I'm glad it was long enough to be fun but short enough that I could finish it tonight (it's nearly midnight here).
Also, the story didn't seem... meaty enough... Maybe a teensy more description? I'm done critiquing now. =D
Much Love:
Christy
74CharlettDaw, that was an adorable story... I logged on to find badfic and make fun of it, but I found a goodfic and showed it to her instead!
I'm so glad I found a nice story! Steiner-centric too! My baby Steiner needs some more love. Beatrix and I can only give him so much...
There were a few parts when I thought a comma would be needed. The dialogue didn't seem to flow as well without them. I once read that people tried to remove unneeded commas in Shakespear's plays and the actors didn't know when to pause. I only assume it applies here as well.
Also, Steiner seemed a little... TOO innocent. I mean, I like him acting all bashful like that, but that night in the 3rd disk when they met, they practically grabbed each other for a kissfest. I suppose one could write it off as hormones taking over, but I think you may want to look that over one more time.
Anyway, the story itself was very good and I enjoyed reading it. I'm glad it was long enough to be fun but short enough that I could finish it tonight (it's nearly midnight here).
Also, the story didn't seem... meaty enough... Maybe a teensy more description? I'm done critiquing now. =D
Much Love:
Christy
7/15/2007 c1 25J.L. Dexter
Oh Lordy, poor Steiner! After all that hard work. :D But as stated, a very cute little ficlet indeed. And a new, interesting take on their relationship in this light.
I liked how you pulled in the characters, leaving them intact and not O.O.C. in the slightest bit; right down to Zidane's cocky attitude, Ruby's accent and light-heartedness to Steiner's prim and proper demeanor. Very well done.
Started out absolutely wonderful and wrapped up nicely with a good twist and glimmer of hope for the Captain and General. Excellent job and hope to see more like this. Great work and Keep it up!
25J.L. DexterOh Lordy, poor Steiner! After all that hard work. :D But as stated, a very cute little ficlet indeed. And a new, interesting take on their relationship in this light.
I liked how you pulled in the characters, leaving them intact and not O.O.C. in the slightest bit; right down to Zidane's cocky attitude, Ruby's accent and light-heartedness to Steiner's prim and proper demeanor. Very well done.
Started out absolutely wonderful and wrapped up nicely with a good twist and glimmer of hope for the Captain and General. Excellent job and hope to see more like this. Great work and Keep it up!