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19Dementra
In the summary, you've mentioned that you'd be reposting this fanfic. I can't wait to see what the revised version would be like. Hopefully, it would be much better than this version.
I do like the way you've included Kagome into xxxHolic, but I personally don't really like how fast Kimihiro had taken to Kagome. The friendship part is just fine, since Kimihiro seemed to easily get emotionally involved in others, whether in a bad or good way.
But Kimihiro had been pining over HImawari for quite some time. I don't think he'd develop a puppy love and get jealous over Kagome in such a short period of time, while still really interested in Himawari.
I personally think that Kimihiro's feelings for Kagome (if that's the pairing you're aiming for) should gradually grow over several "cases", instead of a sudden jump in just two (the female liar and the ghost stories cases). It could happen since Himawari wouldn't always be present in the cases whereas Kagome most likely would.
And I also don't really think the "strings of fate" is a neccessary addition to the story. Your fanfic seems just fine to me, even if read without the strings.
Anyways, keep up the good work. I hope I'd be able to read the rest of this fanfic soon.
Dementra
19DementraIn the summary, you've mentioned that you'd be reposting this fanfic. I can't wait to see what the revised version would be like. Hopefully, it would be much better than this version.
I do like the way you've included Kagome into xxxHolic, but I personally don't really like how fast Kimihiro had taken to Kagome. The friendship part is just fine, since Kimihiro seemed to easily get emotionally involved in others, whether in a bad or good way.
But Kimihiro had been pining over HImawari for quite some time. I don't think he'd develop a puppy love and get jealous over Kagome in such a short period of time, while still really interested in Himawari.
I personally think that Kimihiro's feelings for Kagome (if that's the pairing you're aiming for) should gradually grow over several "cases", instead of a sudden jump in just two (the female liar and the ghost stories cases). It could happen since Himawari wouldn't always be present in the cases whereas Kagome most likely would.
And I also don't really think the "strings of fate" is a neccessary addition to the story. Your fanfic seems just fine to me, even if read without the strings.
Anyways, keep up the good work. I hope I'd be able to read the rest of this fanfic soon.
Dementra
4/18 c5 Guest
Please update! I WANNA SEE WHERE THIS GOES! PLEASE! UPDATE SOON! Thankies! .V
Please update! I WANNA SEE WHERE THIS GOES! PLEASE! UPDATE SOON! Thankies! .V
2/20 c6 Ara
Since you are updating your other stories, do you think you could update this one too? Please?
Since you are updating your other stories, do you think you could update this one too? Please?
2/10 c6 Mia
I love the story! Please update again when you can!
I love the story! Please update again when you can!
7/4/2012 c1 Guest
Please more chapters and please finish story this is great update more soon please
Please more chapters and please finish story this is great update more soon please
9/26/2011 c6
10TsukiyoTenshi
LOVE THIS SO FAR! And since Kagome's been added into the mix, it'll be fun to see how things will turn out! I LOVE XXXHolic and InuYasha! The fact that the two have been combined in a sort of fashion to create a really cool story just makes this even better! Not only that, but I LOVE Yuko's character! She's so mysterious one moment and the next she's a literal lunatic!
UPDATE WHENEVER!
10TsukiyoTenshiLOVE THIS SO FAR! And since Kagome's been added into the mix, it'll be fun to see how things will turn out! I LOVE XXXHolic and InuYasha! The fact that the two have been combined in a sort of fashion to create a really cool story just makes this even better! Not only that, but I LOVE Yuko's character! She's so mysterious one moment and the next she's a literal lunatic!
UPDATE WHENEVER!
