for The Dark Planeteers4/25 c4 Neon Pulsion
Great Fanfic for a classic 90s cartoon with a bit of anime influence in the form of the armor of the awesome, Dark Planeteers. I also like the star-crossed, romance sub-plot between Lira and Ma-Ti which is good character, development. Speaking of Character development I haven't read the whole story yet, but if it helps, can you give Maya more depth in future chapters. The obvious Downside with Captain Planet was that the villains were two-dimensional (with the exception of Hoggish Greedily who had some back story revealed later in the series) like their names and had no other motivation other than money and being evil in general and being evil in general. The Dark Planeteers could also use some more back story of the tragic variety that explains how they came to be misanthropic, Dark Planeteers working for Maya. It could involve Their families/friends taken from them by corrupt politicians, lawyers, corporate executive, anyone in a legit position of power that leaves them legally untouchable, fueling said misanthropy. And I imagine Maya as a well-intentioned extremist who has a good reason to take over earth, to protect it from the ravages of human carelessness and greed by wiping out a lot of people and keeping their population in check. And remember in contrast to Pollution in this series "Dark is not Evil," but rather questionable, and the Dark Planeteers as seen so far are not trying to destroy nature but, rather tweak it.
Great Fanfic for a classic 90s cartoon with a bit of anime influence in the form of the armor of the awesome, Dark Planeteers. I also like the star-crossed, romance sub-plot between Lira and Ma-Ti which is good character, development. Speaking of Character development I haven't read the whole story yet, but if it helps, can you give Maya more depth in future chapters. The obvious Downside with Captain Planet was that the villains were two-dimensional (with the exception of Hoggish Greedily who had some back story revealed later in the series) like their names and had no other motivation other than money and being evil in general and being evil in general. The Dark Planeteers could also use some more back story of the tragic variety that explains how they came to be misanthropic, Dark Planeteers working for Maya. It could involve Their families/friends taken from them by corrupt politicians, lawyers, corporate executive, anyone in a legit position of power that leaves them legally untouchable, fueling said misanthropy. And I imagine Maya as a well-intentioned extremist who has a good reason to take over earth, to protect it from the ravages of human carelessness and greed by wiping out a lot of people and keeping their population in check. And remember in contrast to Pollution in this series "Dark is not Evil," but rather questionable, and the Dark Planeteers as seen so far are not trying to destroy nature but, rather tweak it.
3/14/2012 c26 Samurai Planet
Please continue awesome story. You should give the dark planeteers awesome outfits like the Power Ranger Samurai outfits and when their in that form they use a black box to go super samurai and summon dark planet and use the black box to make her Samurai Planet. Plus they get swords as well and can combine their items with it. Oh and Samurai Planet is the same except she wears the Ranger samurai outfit (the color of your choice) and a white coat with no sleeves that go all the way to the back of the knees same for dark planeteers and gets a black sword.
Please continue awesome story. You should give the dark planeteers awesome outfits like the Power Ranger Samurai outfits and when their in that form they use a black box to go super samurai and summon dark planet and use the black box to make her Samurai Planet. Plus they get swords as well and can combine their items with it. Oh and Samurai Planet is the same except she wears the Ranger samurai outfit (the color of your choice) and a white coat with no sleeves that go all the way to the back of the knees same for dark planeteers and gets a black sword.
12/2/2011 c26 KenyaVitale
OMG The Planeteers totally went kick ** on the Dark Planeteers, didnt see them having stronger powers thats something i would excpect cap to have. Overall this is a great story, hope u continue! :)
OMG The Planeteers totally went kick ** on the Dark Planeteers, didnt see them having stronger powers thats something i would excpect cap to have. Overall this is a great story, hope u continue! :)
12/1/2011 c25 
1Denny Hamato
hey I love this story. I hope you make the next chapters very soon. can't wait to read what happens next.
1Denny Hamatohey I love this story. I hope you make the next chapters very soon. can't wait to read what happens next.
11/20/2011 c25 EspioSwiftSilver76
I liked this Chapter it wasnt bad at all. You kinda threw me there with the whole dark servants and dark planeteers kicking the planeteers around like rag dolls. But all in all good story, i hope you update soon. :)
I liked this Chapter it wasnt bad at all. You kinda threw me there with the whole dark servants and dark planeteers kicking the planeteers around like rag dolls. But all in all good story, i hope you update soon. :)
11/20/2011 c25 KenyaVitale
Awesome! Cant wait for the second part to this. Update soon please!
Awesome! Cant wait for the second part to this. Update soon please!
10/18/2011 c24 EspioSwiftSilver76
Nice Chapter, it reminds me of a real TV show when they do flashbacks and things like that. As you progress toward to story more i would like to see maybe some more romance between the characters and perhaps some more clues about where the Gemina staff might be. Just take the suggestions, do what you want to do cause you always seem to surprise me when you do it.
Nice Chapter, it reminds me of a real TV show when they do flashbacks and things like that. As you progress toward to story more i would like to see maybe some more romance between the characters and perhaps some more clues about where the Gemina staff might be. Just take the suggestions, do what you want to do cause you always seem to surprise me when you do it.
7/15/2010 c20 EspioSwiftSilver76
Interesting Chapter,I totally did not see the Wheeler and Linka expresing there fellings for each routine coming, its good though i'll give that.
Update soon and keep making more Chapters that are interesting and keep me HOOKED!
Thank you!
Interesting Chapter,I totally did not see the Wheeler and Linka expresing there fellings for each routine coming, its good though i'll give that.
Update soon and keep making more Chapters that are interesting and keep me HOOKED!
Thank you!
2/1/2010 c1 EspioSwiftSilver76
The Future Planeteers seem way more extreme than the normal Planeteers since they seem to street fight most of the baddies instead of using there rings. Good Chapter, anyway try to think of some more it's a good story. :)
The Future Planeteers seem way more extreme than the normal Planeteers since they seem to street fight most of the baddies instead of using there rings. Good Chapter, anyway try to think of some more it's a good story. :)
8/31/2009 c17 Megawing
How about a chapter where one of the Planeteers and one of the dark Planeteers have to work togeter cough Linka and Nala cough
How about a chapter where one of the Planeteers and one of the dark Planeteers have to work togeter cough Linka and Nala cough
8/2/2009 c1 Ugh
STop spamming the story, Taz. There's too much Linka/Wheeler stuff already. It's only Linka/Wheeler, the Planateers are forgotten and their mission too. I'm glad this doesn't have LInka/Wheeler. It's a refreshing change.
This story is nice it deals with the environment & human behavior...
STop spamming the story, Taz. There's too much Linka/Wheeler stuff already. It's only Linka/Wheeler, the Planateers are forgotten and their mission too. I'm glad this doesn't have LInka/Wheeler. It's a refreshing change.
This story is nice it deals with the environment & human behavior...
7/26/2009 c16 taz0718twoaol.com
OK HERES WHAT I THINK SHOULD HAPPEN ON ALL THE NEXT CHAPTERS ON THE NEXT ONE U SHOULD START WITH WHEELER AND LINKA WHEELER FOUND THE GUTS HE NEEDS AND GOES TO LINKA ABD ASK HER OUT ON A DATE HE TAKES HER TO A NICE INDA RESTRANT WITH A CANDLE LIGHT TABLE THEN HE TAKES HER DANCING THEN TO NEW YORK TO CONEY PARK FOR SOME MORE FUN AND FROM THERE WHEELER TOOK HER TO THE TUNNEL OF LOVE WHERE WHEELER TOLD LINKA HOW HE FINLLAY FEELS ABOUT HER ABOUT HIM BEING IN LOVE WITH HER FROM THE FIRST SINCE THE TIME THEY FIRST MET AND HE TELLS HER HE LOVES HER AND LINKA TELLS HIM THE SAME THING AND THEY GAVE EACH OTHER THERE FIRST KISS IN THE TUNNEL AND FROM THERE ONE THEY WAIT BACK TO THE HOPE AND WHEELER WALK LINA BACK TO HER HUT BUT AND WHEELER GAVE LINKA A GOODNIGHT KISS BUT BEFORE HE PULLED AWAYLINKA ASK HIM IN AND THEY MADE LOVE FOR THE FIRST TIME AND WHEN THEY WOKE THEY TURN AND GAVE EACH OTHER A SMILE OF LOVE AND WHEN THEY GOT DREES GI AND TOPZA WALK IN AND THEY SAW THEM TOGETHER HOLDING HANDS AND KISSING AND WHEN LINKA AND WHEELER SAW THEM THEY STOOD THERE STILL HOLDER EACH OTHER NOT CAREING ANY MORE AND TOLD THEM AND ALL THERE FRIENDS THAT THEY ARE NOW AND FOR EVER AND COUPLE BOYFRIEND AND GIRLFRIEND AND THEY ALL VERY HAPPY FOR THEM AND ALSO GAIA TO BUT THE DARK PLANETEERS SAW THIS WELL I THINK U CAN TAKE FROM THERE AND WHEELER ALSO MADE A CALL TO A GOOD FRIEND OF HIS TO COME GIVE THEM ALL THE HELP HE CAN GIVE TO FIGHT THIS NEW GROUP OF BAD GUYS NAMELY SUPERMAN WELL U CAN PICK FROM THERE I JUST GAVE U A NICE BIG KICK IN THE BUTT FOR LOL SO TILL THEN THE POWER IS YOURS
OK HERES WHAT I THINK SHOULD HAPPEN ON ALL THE NEXT CHAPTERS ON THE NEXT ONE U SHOULD START WITH WHEELER AND LINKA WHEELER FOUND THE GUTS HE NEEDS AND GOES TO LINKA ABD ASK HER OUT ON A DATE HE TAKES HER TO A NICE INDA RESTRANT WITH A CANDLE LIGHT TABLE THEN HE TAKES HER DANCING THEN TO NEW YORK TO CONEY PARK FOR SOME MORE FUN AND FROM THERE WHEELER TOOK HER TO THE TUNNEL OF LOVE WHERE WHEELER TOLD LINKA HOW HE FINLLAY FEELS ABOUT HER ABOUT HIM BEING IN LOVE WITH HER FROM THE FIRST SINCE THE TIME THEY FIRST MET AND HE TELLS HER HE LOVES HER AND LINKA TELLS HIM THE SAME THING AND THEY GAVE EACH OTHER THERE FIRST KISS IN THE TUNNEL AND FROM THERE ONE THEY WAIT BACK TO THE HOPE AND WHEELER WALK LINA BACK TO HER HUT BUT AND WHEELER GAVE LINKA A GOODNIGHT KISS BUT BEFORE HE PULLED AWAYLINKA ASK HIM IN AND THEY MADE LOVE FOR THE FIRST TIME AND WHEN THEY WOKE THEY TURN AND GAVE EACH OTHER A SMILE OF LOVE AND WHEN THEY GOT DREES GI AND TOPZA WALK IN AND THEY SAW THEM TOGETHER HOLDING HANDS AND KISSING AND WHEN LINKA AND WHEELER SAW THEM THEY STOOD THERE STILL HOLDER EACH OTHER NOT CAREING ANY MORE AND TOLD THEM AND ALL THERE FRIENDS THAT THEY ARE NOW AND FOR EVER AND COUPLE BOYFRIEND AND GIRLFRIEND AND THEY ALL VERY HAPPY FOR THEM AND ALSO GAIA TO BUT THE DARK PLANETEERS SAW THIS WELL I THINK U CAN TAKE FROM THERE AND WHEELER ALSO MADE A CALL TO A GOOD FRIEND OF HIS TO COME GIVE THEM ALL THE HELP HE CAN GIVE TO FIGHT THIS NEW GROUP OF BAD GUYS NAMELY SUPERMAN WELL U CAN PICK FROM THERE I JUST GAVE U A NICE BIG KICK IN THE BUTT FOR LOL SO TILL THEN THE POWER IS YOURS
7/25/2009 c16 Ifab1ndiya
Hehe I liked this chapter. I like how "good always triumphs over evil". It's true. Maybe you can have another clue for the Gemina staff now. And maybe bring in the Eco Villians. That was hilariuos! These suggestions are for your writers block.
Hehe I liked this chapter. I like how "good always triumphs over evil". It's true. Maybe you can have another clue for the Gemina staff now. And maybe bring in the Eco Villians. That was hilariuos! These suggestions are for your writers block.
5/8/2009 c14 Ifab1ndiya
Interesting story concept with the 3 new planateers and future Gaia. One thing though there when used possesively like for Kwami's ring or Ma-Ti's monkey is 'their'. You also put 'no' instead of 'know' once or twice. Other than that good story.
The concept of dark planateers is thick but believable. The dark planateers are very angry & hateful bunch. It makes sense they would be brain washed by Maya though they don't realize they're doing exactly what they hate so much by joining Maya to destroy earth. It's realistic.
Although the dark planateers seem like Mary-Sues sometimes by just appearing anywhere and always having all teh weapons but Maya might help with that. And the planateers kicking their kiesters each time balance them out so they're not mary-sues.
Interesting story concept with the 3 new planateers and future Gaia. One thing though there when used possesively like for Kwami's ring or Ma-Ti's monkey is 'their'. You also put 'no' instead of 'know' once or twice. Other than that good story.
The concept of dark planateers is thick but believable. The dark planateers are very angry & hateful bunch. It makes sense they would be brain washed by Maya though they don't realize they're doing exactly what they hate so much by joining Maya to destroy earth. It's realistic.
Although the dark planateers seem like Mary-Sues sometimes by just appearing anywhere and always having all teh weapons but Maya might help with that. And the planateers kicking their kiesters each time balance them out so they're not mary-sues.