2/19/2010 c4 7Tsukihime26
Yay! *gives you cookie* I've been waiting for this to be updated! =) Oh, and I hope you mean Beat/Gum lemons

5/30/2008 c2 Fuyutsuki Rikao
i'm not much of a CornxGum but i feel so bad for Corn! i love your story though! the first chapter was a bit short .o but still! the 2nd one made up for it! update soon!

4/14/2008 c1 JetSetRadioFuture
oh wow my story on the gg's seems like nothing now compared to yours. your's is really good. write more!

3/11/2008 c1 5nohmaskofoblivion
Let me just say that I never played JGR either but from what I understand the story isn’t really connected with JSRF (or at least it doesn’t seem to be) so I don’t sweat it and neither should you.

Also, let me say that I hate to be the first person to give anything resembling a bad review.

That said, I wasn’t impressed at all by this first chapter. It was murderously short and didn’t really tell me anything worth knowing about the characters or the world around them and what information was actually given seemed to just be thrown at me. You need to learn to be a little more descriptive when writing the narration and you need to work on drawing the readers in and on cutting down on grammatical errors and anything else that might take your reader out of the story. An example taking your reader out of the story is your using the word ‘whilst’ to start a paragraph… I didn’t see the words ‘ye, thee, thou, thine’ or ‘yonder’ anywhere in this story so there’s no reason to use whilst, it just makes the narrator too goofy… that’s what the characters are for.

I’m not trying to be mean or anything, I just wanted to be honest with you. Here’s hoping you make some improvements before you update. I'm a beta-reader, if you ever need some help you can contact me.

3/10/2008 c1 15Jet Set Yoyo
Nicely written. =3 I expect great things from you. Hope to see more for this soon.