for SG1 meets the Guyver12/12/2012 c1 
3AdventDestiny-BETA
I think it was a really good crossover story. The guyver and stargate franchises actually work well together. I'm personally trying to perfect the idea of western scifi series blended with japanese animes into a cohesive story. Personally I've thought of a couple of guyver/stargate crossovers myself, just never had the place or time to post these stories.
3AdventDestiny-BETAI think it was a really good crossover story. The guyver and stargate franchises actually work well together. I'm personally trying to perfect the idea of western scifi series blended with japanese animes into a cohesive story. Personally I've thought of a couple of guyver/stargate crossovers myself, just never had the place or time to post these stories.
9/25/2008 c1 2not for lack of trying
Ok, so i liked it. it wasn't the best story ever, but i think that's because you didn't intend it to be a very well thought out fic. it's givin me a few ideas. But i'm not much of a writer myself, so i hope you deside to continue this story on your own.
2not for lack of tryingOk, so i liked it. it wasn't the best story ever, but i think that's because you didn't intend it to be a very well thought out fic. it's givin me a few ideas. But i'm not much of a writer myself, so i hope you deside to continue this story on your own.
7/13/2008 c1 CC
While you are short on exposition and description, and have some trouble with your tenses, I wonder if that is largely due to your not intending for this to be an actual story. I've read that their authors consider finished. Even if someone does take up your challenge, I hope you consider expanding this and writing your own story. There are only two comments I would make other than to add the above: 1) be careful with your tenses and, 2) the mutual telling of histories is way too long, either more needs to be shown in flashback or be spread out a little more through the story. Another option would be for each history to occur in its own chapter - as [for instance, prequels] - and then a short sentence that trails off such as "Sho proceeded to tell the members of SG-1 the long and convoluted story of the Zoanoids, their part in the shaping of mankind, and how the Guyver had come to be."
With the help of a good editor and/or beta reader I think you have the makings of a good writer. Good luck and I hope to see your work here someday.
While you are short on exposition and description, and have some trouble with your tenses, I wonder if that is largely due to your not intending for this to be an actual story. I've read that their authors consider finished. Even if someone does take up your challenge, I hope you consider expanding this and writing your own story. There are only two comments I would make other than to add the above: 1) be careful with your tenses and, 2) the mutual telling of histories is way too long, either more needs to be shown in flashback or be spread out a little more through the story. Another option would be for each history to occur in its own chapter - as [for instance, prequels] - and then a short sentence that trails off such as "Sho proceeded to tell the members of SG-1 the long and convoluted story of the Zoanoids, their part in the shaping of mankind, and how the Guyver had come to be."
With the help of a good editor and/or beta reader I think you have the makings of a good writer. Good luck and I hope to see your work here someday.
6/21/2008 c1 david
dude that was **ing AWESOME! MORE!
dude that was **ing AWESOME! MORE!
3/25/2008 c1 1teh blumchenkinder
omgomgomg O_O
*hyperventilates*
*cough*
That is, "wow, what a neat crossover-idea! Also, you aren't as bad as you think. ^-^"
1teh blumchenkinderomgomgomg O_O
*hyperventilates*
*cough*
That is, "wow, what a neat crossover-idea! Also, you aren't as bad as you think. ^-^"
3/20/2008 c1 LordONeill
You’re a better writer then you give yourself credit for. I hope that, if no one takes the challenge and writes out their own story, you decide to continue on. Long live Colonel O’Neill.
You’re a better writer then you give yourself credit for. I hope that, if no one takes the challenge and writes out their own story, you decide to continue on. Long live Colonel O’Neill.