for Perfect Symmetry11/14/2010 c1 
244McGonagall's Bola
Wow, these rather short sentences here and there really hit home. It is something many try, but few succeed in. These sentences gave the story something powerful, and you have reached your point with it. Well done.
244McGonagall's BolaWow, these rather short sentences here and there really hit home. It is something many try, but few succeed in. These sentences gave the story something powerful, and you have reached your point with it. Well done.
8/18/2009 c1 4Melpomene Lee
No one dies or gets injured? Is this really Lily writing? Whether it's you or your evil clone or whatever, I still loved it!
4Melpomene LeeNo one dies or gets injured? Is this really Lily writing? Whether it's you or your evil clone or whatever, I still loved it!
5/31/2009 c1 104DNAisUnique
Hi!
Yay, another second person fic!
'Except sometimes she broke the rules and sat on your desk, knees almost touching yours, a little closer than she needed to be. Usually with a challenge in her eyes, that you accepted you would usually lose. And the line that friends and partners drew invisibly between themselves, began to be a little less sure of itself.' So innocent, yet utterly intimate. *happy sigh*
'prismatic spectrum in all its light-refracting beauty' Ooh, so poetic. I like it!
:D - This is me grinning so hugely right now! Good dreams definitely come from this fic.
Excellent work. I know you enjoy writing angst, and you do it well, but you have a great knack for writing happy fic, too. Thanks.
Dana
104DNAisUniqueHi!
Yay, another second person fic!
'Except sometimes she broke the rules and sat on your desk, knees almost touching yours, a little closer than she needed to be. Usually with a challenge in her eyes, that you accepted you would usually lose. And the line that friends and partners drew invisibly between themselves, began to be a little less sure of itself.' So innocent, yet utterly intimate. *happy sigh*
'prismatic spectrum in all its light-refracting beauty' Ooh, so poetic. I like it!
:D - This is me grinning so hugely right now! Good dreams definitely come from this fic.
Excellent work. I know you enjoy writing angst, and you do it well, but you have a great knack for writing happy fic, too. Thanks.
Dana
5/28/2009 c1 13SMacked Hard
Aww, Lily, that was a great story. You are so good with words, it's fantastic what you write. I loved it!
13SMacked HardAww, Lily, that was a great story. You are so good with words, it's fantastic what you write. I loved it!
5/25/2009 c1 129Brinchen86
You have such a wonderful writing style! I totally love it. This is so beautifully written.
- And then the day you both knew you were right. As you stood in suit, shirt and shoes in every shade but dark; in a room full of harlequin colours of skin, dress and love. A carnival of wild, reckless hue; purple joy next to ruby dreams, indigo passion next to blue serenity. Your heart was higher than the sky; rising in pure elation around the moon and stars that are never white in the galaxy that is never black. And you saw her walking towards you in a dress that shone in every shade of opalescence. She stood beside you. Together. Matching words. Matching promises. You were two people; your name, her name. Two circles of eternity and you became one name shared.
Perfect symmetry.-
Perfect symmetry. Perfect oneshot. Great work!
129Brinchen86You have such a wonderful writing style! I totally love it. This is so beautifully written.
- And then the day you both knew you were right. As you stood in suit, shirt and shoes in every shade but dark; in a room full of harlequin colours of skin, dress and love. A carnival of wild, reckless hue; purple joy next to ruby dreams, indigo passion next to blue serenity. Your heart was higher than the sky; rising in pure elation around the moon and stars that are never white in the galaxy that is never black. And you saw her walking towards you in a dress that shone in every shade of opalescence. She stood beside you. Together. Matching words. Matching promises. You were two people; your name, her name. Two circles of eternity and you became one name shared.
Perfect symmetry.-
Perfect symmetry. Perfect oneshot. Great work!
3/5/2009 c1 1theredcat
you amazed me, the words echoed in my mind for a long time after reading, creating a vivid reflection.. pictures, distant sounds..aw.
1theredcatyou amazed me, the words echoed in my mind for a long time after reading, creating a vivid reflection.. pictures, distant sounds..aw.
2/8/2009 c1 57streco
the beauty of this story should be ridiculous. my favorite word, and my favorite concept, is that of color, and this captured it perfectly.
57strecothe beauty of this story should be ridiculous. my favorite word, and my favorite concept, is that of color, and this captured it perfectly.
12/18/2008 c1 40Tracey Claybon
Coherent, decently written, and {hardest of all} written in *second person* - it's not easy to do, and you did a spectacular job of it... Exceptional writing!
40Tracey ClaybonCoherent, decently written, and {hardest of all} written in *second person* - it's not easy to do, and you did a spectacular job of it... Exceptional writing!
12/18/2008 c1 Gilly
Beautiful!
Beautiful!