for space ninjas6/16 c3 LtSolarFlare
necron eh? freaking hate them thanks to the 6th edition update but luckily tau got the new riptide
"SUCK PLASMA WALKING SCRAP HEAPS!"
necron eh? freaking hate them thanks to the 6th edition update but luckily tau got the new riptide
"SUCK PLASMA WALKING SCRAP HEAPS!"
6/16 c1 LtSolarFlare
being an imperium player in the table top game i have major issues with this first of all the moment that the marines learned there is a demon in naruto they would have blown his head off and purged his body with holy fire second the "military speak" as i like to call it could be better . such as " hey that planet over there land on it" it space you could make somthing up like "this is echo 3 bravo to fleet. we have an unidentified planet in sector charle echo 4 prepare to land and procede with caution. now thats my rant on what i thought was bad now what i thought was good. i like the way you tell your story very intresting i also like how you made a custom chapter with this story and maybe this chpter is more accepting of other possabletize than others and i love how youhave presented this story not too fast but not a long drawn out story. all in all i think you did a great job for somthing that was probbably just an idea and i cant wait to read more.
being an imperium player in the table top game i have major issues with this first of all the moment that the marines learned there is a demon in naruto they would have blown his head off and purged his body with holy fire second the "military speak" as i like to call it could be better . such as " hey that planet over there land on it" it space you could make somthing up like "this is echo 3 bravo to fleet. we have an unidentified planet in sector charle echo 4 prepare to land and procede with caution. now thats my rant on what i thought was bad now what i thought was good. i like the way you tell your story very intresting i also like how you made a custom chapter with this story and maybe this chpter is more accepting of other possabletize than others and i love how youhave presented this story not too fast but not a long drawn out story. all in all i think you did a great job for somthing that was probbably just an idea and i cant wait to read more.
4/4 c2 Guest
Naruto is **ing Japanese you idiot!
Naruto is **ing Japanese you idiot!
4/4 c2 Guest
Poilets.
Poilets.
11/26/2012 c1 
8Neo H.B.B. Sam
Oh man, I just watched this get read on "The Boreale Cast", and my God is this hilarious. I don't know if you're still around, but you gotta see how they read your story. I know you've improved a lot, but dear God, so many issues. First off "As the ships landed several drop pods were launched" is awfully lulzy to picture and the fact that the Space Marines didn't use exterminatus on this planet the moment they heard Naruto had a **ing demon inside him is extremely heretical. But yeah, this is a pretty lulzy story, and I'll favorite this ** anyway for a good laugh.
8Neo H.B.B. SamOh man, I just watched this get read on "The Boreale Cast", and my God is this hilarious. I don't know if you're still around, but you gotta see how they read your story. I know you've improved a lot, but dear God, so many issues. First off "As the ships landed several drop pods were launched" is awfully lulzy to picture and the fact that the Space Marines didn't use exterminatus on this planet the moment they heard Naruto had a **ing demon inside him is extremely heretical. But yeah, this is a pretty lulzy story, and I'll favorite this ** anyway for a good laugh.
11/10/2012 c8 FlameWarStarter
this is totally canon
this is totally canon
10/26/2012 c8 ranger M
update damn it! that is all
update damn it! that is all
10/8/2012 c8 3WorldStrider
LOL just saw your first chapter on Youtube. Very funny. Here's the link if you want to watch.
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watch?v5eL_X5kR-4E (If the link doesn't work its The Boreale Cast - Episode 7)
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Regardless I read your story and have seen a definite improvement in your writing and well done. I would suggest rewriting the first few chapters though. LOL. 'As the ships landed several drop pods were launched'. I would definitely like to see an animation of that.
P.S. Don't take the video to hard. It had me laughing my head off and I read your story.
3WorldStriderLOL just saw your first chapter on Youtube. Very funny. Here's the link if you want to watch.
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watch?v5eL_X5kR-4E (If the link doesn't work its The Boreale Cast - Episode 7)
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Regardless I read your story and have seen a definite improvement in your writing and well done. I would suggest rewriting the first few chapters though. LOL. 'As the ships landed several drop pods were launched'. I would definitely like to see an animation of that.
P.S. Don't take the video to hard. It had me laughing my head off and I read your story.
10/6/2012 c1 5Silly Madman
What the feth is this garbage? I barely understood half of it! There are such things known as correct grammar and proofreading. Overall, bad. Terrible. Terribad.
5Silly MadmanWhat the feth is this garbage? I barely understood half of it! There are such things known as correct grammar and proofreading. Overall, bad. Terrible. Terribad.
8/9/2012 c8 Eliphas
I think that you should have the Marines help Naruto gain full control over the Nine-Tails like Killer B, so over a few chapters have The Chapalin and Libreaian enter Naruto's mind and have them meet his parents and also fight the Nine-Tails plus it is a great story can't wait to read the next chapter
I think that you should have the Marines help Naruto gain full control over the Nine-Tails like Killer B, so over a few chapters have The Chapalin and Libreaian enter Naruto's mind and have them meet his parents and also fight the Nine-Tails plus it is a great story can't wait to read the next chapter
8/1/2012 c8 2E E Merica
I like your story, and by order of the Emperors Most Holy Inquisition, you will update.
2E E MericaI like your story, and by order of the Emperors Most Holy Inquisition, you will update.
7/23/2011 c5 1Thorfaxdragonkin
You forgot the most bad ** class terminator. They are the best of the best of the marines. They can kick the ever living ** out of the other classes.
1ThorfaxdragonkinYou forgot the most bad ** class terminator. They are the best of the best of the marines. They can kick the ever living ** out of the other classes.