for Another Story7/13/2008 c4 
10CO Raven
Hm... This is concrit, not a flame. If you plan to give your OC an entirely new moveset, it might be wise to list it out as the number of moves will inevitably grow as time goes on. On another note, unison attacks requite just as much thought as other parts of the fight scenes. A kick in combination with spiking the opponent into the ground and Lightning either hurts the kicker too or has no additional logical damage depending on the time. All the standard unison attacks either have a twist to them such as Cross Thrust or are entirely different moves such as Prism Stars or have one move bolstering the other such as Photon Tempest. Its just something to think about for later. In any case, the battle scenes were good in the sense that they weren't short and had a decent amount of detail.
10CO RavenHm... This is concrit, not a flame. If you plan to give your OC an entirely new moveset, it might be wise to list it out as the number of moves will inevitably grow as time goes on. On another note, unison attacks requite just as much thought as other parts of the fight scenes. A kick in combination with spiking the opponent into the ground and Lightning either hurts the kicker too or has no additional logical damage depending on the time. All the standard unison attacks either have a twist to them such as Cross Thrust or are entirely different moves such as Prism Stars or have one move bolstering the other such as Photon Tempest. Its just something to think about for later. In any case, the battle scenes were good in the sense that they weren't short and had a decent amount of detail.