for Back in the Mix9/8/2008 c3 NickelbackiGroupie
Better than the first, in delivery, a little smoother. I'd say perfect. Think you might have been more nervous before, now it feels comfy like you've settled down. :) oh and btw whats that rubbish about you not doing anymore :D I wish I could shut you up :) You know you couldnt keep away if we put you in a safe house WITH Alex rider :) lol lol
Better than the first, in delivery, a little smoother. I'd say perfect. Think you might have been more nervous before, now it feels comfy like you've settled down. :) oh and btw whats that rubbish about you not doing anymore :D I wish I could shut you up :) You know you couldnt keep away if we put you in a safe house WITH Alex rider :) lol lol
9/8/2008 c2 NickelbackiGroupie
Well done as always meine stella. :) Its very good, I see what you mean, it is a little ooc, but I like it. It's still alex but approached through a slighty different style. I think... it's a bit more raw. Horowitz describes a bit more and sometimes you just want to skip it all and read the action. This is different cos I wasnt impatient at all. I hope Sabina has him still, he needs some goodness in his life, poor beautiful lad! :D I like the way you've captured Alex's inborn cockiness with the hot chocolate, that was good. Pretty shocked that crawley is dead! And err Hassen isnt, I mean if I remember correctly he was pretty dead, when Lexybaby last saw him Lol! Didn't he fall out a helicopter and get mashed by an engine or was he shot in the heart/stomach/head? Also loving how you've got inside a lads mind. From experience let me just say, that is/was so dan :) heh heh well done sista!
Well done as always meine stella. :) Its very good, I see what you mean, it is a little ooc, but I like it. It's still alex but approached through a slighty different style. I think... it's a bit more raw. Horowitz describes a bit more and sometimes you just want to skip it all and read the action. This is different cos I wasnt impatient at all. I hope Sabina has him still, he needs some goodness in his life, poor beautiful lad! :D I like the way you've captured Alex's inborn cockiness with the hot chocolate, that was good. Pretty shocked that crawley is dead! And err Hassen isnt, I mean if I remember correctly he was pretty dead, when Lexybaby last saw him Lol! Didn't he fall out a helicopter and get mashed by an engine or was he shot in the heart/stomach/head? Also loving how you've got inside a lads mind. From experience let me just say, that is/was so dan :) heh heh well done sista!
9/7/2008 c3 
1sperare92
i absolutely love love love your story!
please keep writing and son!
im a ddicted, i need more!
i love your writing style, it flows nicely and its really easy to follow!
pleas update soon i absolutely can't wait to find out if that was yassen or not who abducted alex at the end of chapter four!
I NEED to know!
pleasee update soon it's amazing!
1sperare92i absolutely love love love your story!
please keep writing and son!
im a ddicted, i need more!
i love your writing style, it flows nicely and its really easy to follow!
pleas update soon i absolutely can't wait to find out if that was yassen or not who abducted alex at the end of chapter four!
I NEED to know!
pleasee update soon it's amazing!
9/7/2008 c4 41WeAreTomorrow
wow so many new questions- i'm gonna be up all night trying to figure it out. you have EVIL cliff hangers
41WeAreTomorrowwow so many new questions- i'm gonna be up all night trying to figure it out. you have EVIL cliff hangers
9/6/2008 c4 2sheluby94dreamer
I don't know about that... but I do now that there is a sister website to fanfiction for original stuff...
Im kind of curious on who took Alex. Was it Yassen?
2sheluby94dreamerI don't know about that... but I do now that there is a sister website to fanfiction for original stuff...
Im kind of curious on who took Alex. Was it Yassen?
9/6/2008 c4 14Optomistic Emo Kleptomaniac
NO...wiat for it...NO...DAMN YOU who is it ah im gunn go crazy...erm it could be k-unit o Yassen...argh...oh well...soon..soon*eye twitches&*
14Optomistic Emo KleptomaniacNO...wiat for it...NO...DAMN YOU who is it ah im gunn go crazy...erm it could be k-unit o Yassen...argh...oh well...soon..soon*eye twitches&*
9/5/2008 c4 Hell Changer
Wow, who's this man? Yassen? And I have a question for everyone! Is Snakehead the last book? I hear rumors about an eighth book, thus I'm not really sure...
Wow, who's this man? Yassen? And I have a question for everyone! Is Snakehead the last book? I hear rumors about an eighth book, thus I'm not really sure...
9/5/2008 c4 1sofiaX
wow... GREAT fight scene!loved the combination of dark and the torch light. Good description with room placement as well- your balence between confusion and known positioning was done well. You should be really happy with this story so keep your head up and keep on writing!
-sof
1sofiaXwow... GREAT fight scene!loved the combination of dark and the torch light. Good description with room placement as well- your balence between confusion and known positioning was done well. You should be really happy with this story so keep your head up and keep on writing!
-sof
9/5/2008 c4 16Jusmine
"People were staring at him. Must be a bit short of celebrities around here." Not exactly sure why, but I love those two little sentences! :D
"And there *was* definitely three parties at the cafe, Yassen, MI6 and some other group." That's the wrong word there. It should be "were" there.
""Alex!" Alex thought he *recognised* that voice. "Yes!" He hissed, still trying to wriggle away." Firstly, that's a typo. Secondly, there should be a new paragraph when Alex says "Yes!"
So who's the guy in front of him? I wanna know! Why aren't you happy with this chapter? I think it's my favorite so far. Loved the action at the end. :D Please update soon!
Btw, as far as I know, there is no "Original" section on fanfiction. It would kind of ruin the purpose of the name "fanfiction", no? You have to go to Fictionpress or something to read original stories. :D
16Jusmine"People were staring at him. Must be a bit short of celebrities around here." Not exactly sure why, but I love those two little sentences! :D
"And there *was* definitely three parties at the cafe, Yassen, MI6 and some other group." That's the wrong word there. It should be "were" there.
""Alex!" Alex thought he *recognised* that voice. "Yes!" He hissed, still trying to wriggle away." Firstly, that's a typo. Secondly, there should be a new paragraph when Alex says "Yes!"
So who's the guy in front of him? I wanna know! Why aren't you happy with this chapter? I think it's my favorite so far. Loved the action at the end. :D Please update soon!
Btw, as far as I know, there is no "Original" section on fanfiction. It would kind of ruin the purpose of the name "fanfiction", no? You have to go to Fictionpress or something to read original stories. :D
8/30/2008 c3 41WeAreTomorrow
MI6 are -insert censored words- ! they really don't know how to deal with Alex...
41WeAreTomorrowMI6 are -insert censored words- ! they really don't know how to deal with Alex...