for Remember The Four6/22/2012 c26 MCH
Spent an enjoyable evening reading through all your chapter.
I have enjoyed every chapter and you have shown another side of Narnia and her inhabitants. Their highs their low their sacrifices their joys and their rewards and their love for the Kings, Queens, Narnia and the King of Kings Aslan.
Thanks.
Spent an enjoyable evening reading through all your chapter.
I have enjoyed every chapter and you have shown another side of Narnia and her inhabitants. Their highs their low their sacrifices their joys and their rewards and their love for the Kings, Queens, Narnia and the King of Kings Aslan.
Thanks.
1/10/2012 c1 
24WriterFreak101
This is pretty good. I always imagined that Mr. Tumnus would marry, and maybe have a kid, if he wasn't too old. Very nice. Though I think you could expand the paragraphs a little more.
24WriterFreak101This is pretty good. I always imagined that Mr. Tumnus would marry, and maybe have a kid, if he wasn't too old. Very nice. Though I think you could expand the paragraphs a little more.
10/27/2011 c16 1merchiewnnabe
I'd like to commend you on this work of yours! The perspectives from each chapter are frighteningly believable and so well written.
Allow me one little bit of constructive criticism though - when writing numbers, it's best to write the number in word form rather than numerical (such as 'two figures' instead of '2 figures'). The tone of your story is quite formal and the way you write is also formal in a sense, save for that aspect which I've mentioned.
I hope you keep up the good work - X
1merchiewnnabeI'd like to commend you on this work of yours! The perspectives from each chapter are frighteningly believable and so well written.
Allow me one little bit of constructive criticism though - when writing numbers, it's best to write the number in word form rather than numerical (such as 'two figures' instead of '2 figures'). The tone of your story is quite formal and the way you write is also formal in a sense, save for that aspect which I've mentioned.
I hope you keep up the good work - X
8/2/2011 c12 9Dryad Warrior Queen
I love this chapter. The Romanov's have always made me so sad, and you captured the emotion perfectly.
-Dryad Queen
9Dryad Warrior QueenI love this chapter. The Romanov's have always made me so sad, and you captured the emotion perfectly.
-Dryad Queen
3/23/2011 c22 5WiseQueen
An interesting point of view.
And it reminds me of a fact from the books that the movies have obscured (but you are not making that mistake here):
Aslan did NOT give Susan the title "The Gentle".
He didn't give her siblings their titles either. The titles were all given to the Four by their people as they grew to adulthood. (I see why the other way worked better in the movie, though.)
It was indeed, as you're saying here, Susan's people who could only see her gentleness. Which was there, of course, but it's interesting to see the emphasis on the other qualities that were hidden behind it.
5WiseQueenAn interesting point of view.
And it reminds me of a fact from the books that the movies have obscured (but you are not making that mistake here):
Aslan did NOT give Susan the title "The Gentle".
He didn't give her siblings their titles either. The titles were all given to the Four by their people as they grew to adulthood. (I see why the other way worked better in the movie, though.)
It was indeed, as you're saying here, Susan's people who could only see her gentleness. Which was there, of course, but it's interesting to see the emphasis on the other qualities that were hidden behind it.
3/19/2011 c26 doug5358
Very well written story. However, it is non-canon because there were no talking mice before their freeing of Aslan from the Stone Table.
Very well written story. However, it is non-canon because there were no talking mice before their freeing of Aslan from the Stone Table.
3/27/2010 c25 23Eavis
Love it! The only wrong thing was Destrier's name. (The horse)
Can't wait for more!
Eavis
23EavisLove it! The only wrong thing was Destrier's name. (The horse)
Can't wait for more!
Eavis
3/15/2010 c25 26rthstewart
How nice to see the friendship between Caspian and Cornelius, how it begins, and how clever the good doctor is. It was so nice how he gave Caspian the tapestry. I really enjoyed the Good Doctor's voice in this piece, formal, learned, reverent, clever. He's a terrific character here.
26rthstewartHow nice to see the friendship between Caspian and Cornelius, how it begins, and how clever the good doctor is. It was so nice how he gave Caspian the tapestry. I really enjoyed the Good Doctor's voice in this piece, formal, learned, reverent, clever. He's a terrific character here.
3/9/2010 c25 4Autumnia
It's nice to see how Cornelius came to serve as Caspian's tutor. With your other chapter of his closeness to the Queen, it ties in pretty well with the events in the book. I do love the idea of giving the Prince the tapestry and it makes a unique gift that blends Telmarine (his mother) and Narnian (the scenes in the tapestry) together.
4AutumniaIt's nice to see how Cornelius came to serve as Caspian's tutor. With your other chapter of his closeness to the Queen, it ties in pretty well with the events in the book. I do love the idea of giving the Prince the tapestry and it makes a unique gift that blends Telmarine (his mother) and Narnian (the scenes in the tapestry) together.