12/19/2012 c18 18Gunlord500
Hmm...ok. All in all, I like this ending, and I think you wrap up the various plot threads well. It's nice to see the flu under control, and I'm very happy to see Geoffrey making a recovery-you're right, he doesn't seem like a whipping boy anymore :D. So I'm pleased with the story overall, though I question the thing with the stuffed animal...I understand your reasoning for going with that, but the thing is, Geoffrey as a character is obviously much different than you, and wouldn't be comforted or react to certain things the way you would. Like you said, you keep a stuffed horse as well, but you're female-keeping stuffed animals isn't that strange, even for an adult woman. For a man, however, it's a little odd. Thus, even though you didn't intend it, Geoffrey having a stuffed horse will strike many of your male readers (including myself) as somewhat weird. Again, as you said, it's not meant as a diss because you'd be dissing yourself, but again, you're a girl, so you doing that is less off-putting than Geoffrey doing that.

In any case, though, I liked reading this. Thanks for giving me the opportunity :D

10/23/2012 c16 Gunlord500
Hmm...okay.

I suppose I'm not one to talk, but even I found the little...er...scene with Elincia and Ike to be maybe a bit...hmm...off-putting. It wouldn't be such a big deal for a fic with a higher age rating, but this story is only K...I would strongly suggest raising it to a T. I don't think you've gone into M-rated territory yet, but still, a T should be enough for that sort of content. Not trying to be prudish or anything, but I just wanna keep you from drawing the ire of FFn's moderators, since they can be a bit harsh at times (in those rare instances they come by XD;;)

Aside from that...it's been a while since I played FE9/10. Did Geoffrey's unhappy past as a child ever come up in his support conversations, or is it something you made up yourself? :O In general, that encapsulates my feelings towards this fic-while adeptly written, overall, I think it's getting a bit too ** Geoffrey for me to really be comfortable with it...I mean, between this fic, with the blindness and everything, and the whole 'embittered' thing from the other piece, there's only so much of Geoffrey being abused/humiliated/driven to the brink I can take ;-;

9/15/2012 c1 36ShiverIntheLight
Poor Ike... :'( I feel so bad for him now. The romance was just there and then it disappeared. How could Elincia do that to him? Good thing he didn't commit suicide...that would be so... No I won't think of it.
All the emotions and thoughts of Ike were very heart-wrenching. It was as though I was hearing him out in person with this.
Amazing job with this! :D

8/10/2012 c15 18Gunlord500
I liked this chapter-it had enough good stuff in it for me to overlook the Ike/Elincia thing, since as I said I'm gettin a bit bored of it. I think you do a very good job of the 'medical mystery' element (though I'm not sure a medieval setting would know what "viruses" are), and the description of the effects of a plague are very well done. The vomiting was also well-portrayed, but also yucky XD

That said, however, Elincia's interpretation of Geoffrey's words is...very strange. For other characters, sure, I could see such a "misunderstanding" happening, but Elincia tends on the understanding side, and I find it difficult to see her getting angry over something like this. She may have asked Geoffrey to clarify what he said, but getting angry over it...that seems out of character to me.

Still, this is generally well-written overall, as I've come to expect from you. Keep it up :D

4/26/2012 c14 3moonie44foreternity
I absolutely loved Chapter 14 Part I The Flu!

Can't wait to read more!

3/3/2012 c12 Gunlord500
Alright, the last two chapters! Let's see what I can do...

Interesting note about the Rosemary :D

Everyone's dialogue in this chapter was good, but I liked how Elincia and Ike were concerned about their relationship being found out-that makes sense, from their perspective.

Nice save by Ike there with the waterfall =D

Liked this chapter too. On to the end~~~

1/2/2012 c11 18Gunlord500
Alright EQ, like last time, I've left you waitin long enough, so here's my next review. :D

Like the bit about Brain Fever. That's a bit of "historical" detail, so to speak, that really improves a fic, IMO. ^^

The description of Ike's father's death and the introspection it provoked is very well done. Kudos :D

Very intruiging ruminations from Ranulf about Rhys and the nature of faith as well.

"By the Goddess' left boob?" XD Funny, but sounds like something Kieran might say rather than Ike or Ranulf.

So I guess they're off to Melior now? :O Well, I'll be looking forward to the next chapter, then. Nice work ^^