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6Lalaithe
A brief epilogue but a nice one just the same. You show that it isn't The End, but another step. I loved Jaheira's perspective in this, too.
This is a great tale you've crafted and you've managed to wrap it up in a lovely way. I'm looking forward to seeing what else you've got in store! :)
6LalaitheA brief epilogue but a nice one just the same. You show that it isn't The End, but another step. I loved Jaheira's perspective in this, too.
This is a great tale you've crafted and you've managed to wrap it up in a lovely way. I'm looking forward to seeing what else you've got in store! :)
4/24/2009 c35 Lalaithe
Wow! The final battle is over, and very well done, too. Good work with describing how Maera became just-this-close to godhood in her fight with Melissan. It's very sweet that she would give all that up without hesitation, but I suppose she knows wher her heart is. :)
I got the sense too that everyone was finally really fighting as a team, even Sarevok becomes part of the group. I liked the line about Gorion's gamble too, that make me chuckle.
Wow! The final battle is over, and very well done, too. Good work with describing how Maera became just-this-close to godhood in her fight with Melissan. It's very sweet that she would give all that up without hesitation, but I suppose she knows wher her heart is. :)
I got the sense too that everyone was finally really fighting as a team, even Sarevok becomes part of the group. I liked the line about Gorion's gamble too, that make me chuckle.
4/23/2009 c35 62Laume
excellent!
though i kinda wonder about imoen and balthazars part of the essence.
62Laumeexcellent!
though i kinda wonder about imoen and balthazars part of the essence.
4/23/2009 c35 Ez
Well I've read this story from start to finish, but it and it's characters came into its own at the end. Absolutely well done - you star!
Well I've read this story from start to finish, but it and it's characters came into its own at the end. Absolutely well done - you star!
4/12/2009 c34 Fyriel
Oh I loved this last chapter, it was realistic, touching, funny, and I liked the image of the marbled-sized fireball, hehe. Also your Imoen is always spot on, she's great in the game but I think even more so in your story!
Oh I loved this last chapter, it was realistic, touching, funny, and I liked the image of the marbled-sized fireball, hehe. Also your Imoen is always spot on, she's great in the game but I think even more so in your story!
4/11/2009 c34 6Lalaithe
I can feel the tension in this chapter. Everyone seems to be crawling up the walls a bit and I don't blame them. A lot of soul-searching is going on. I liked how you had the others give up their Bhaal essence before the battle, it makes more sense that way. Good observations about Melissan not really lying but twisting the truth instead to make herself more believable. I admire Maera's determination to live her life, which isn't an easy thing considering what's on her shoulders.
The end is upon us, eep!
6LalaitheI can feel the tension in this chapter. Everyone seems to be crawling up the walls a bit and I don't blame them. A lot of soul-searching is going on. I liked how you had the others give up their Bhaal essence before the battle, it makes more sense that way. Good observations about Melissan not really lying but twisting the truth instead to make herself more believable. I admire Maera's determination to live her life, which isn't an easy thing considering what's on her shoulders.
The end is upon us, eep!
4/8/2009 c33 Lalaithe
That dialogue between Maera and Jaheira was wonderful, just a great example of the relationship between the two women. I love seeing Jaheira's softer side, if only for a moment! All the conversations here are great, though. Imoen and Sarevok's exchange was quite revealing, and Maera's talks with Balthazar were likewise very well done. So many of the ToB characters seem one-dimensional but Balthazar has potential, especially with that mod which gives you the option of being allies rather than fighting as you've done here.
The end is drawing near. I'll be sorry to see this end but I'm looking forward to reading it! :)
That dialogue between Maera and Jaheira was wonderful, just a great example of the relationship between the two women. I love seeing Jaheira's softer side, if only for a moment! All the conversations here are great, though. Imoen and Sarevok's exchange was quite revealing, and Maera's talks with Balthazar were likewise very well done. So many of the ToB characters seem one-dimensional but Balthazar has potential, especially with that mod which gives you the option of being allies rather than fighting as you've done here.
The end is drawing near. I'll be sorry to see this end but I'm looking forward to reading it! :)
4/3/2009 c32 Lalaithe
Ooh, the pitter-patter of little feet! Other than Cespenar's :)
I figured they would have a child by reading one of your other stories, but it's good to see the moment of realisation dealt with here. It's realistically done and treated like a heavy, bewildering moment as it would be for two people in their situation. It's less of a "I'm pregnant, isn't it wonderful?" and more of a "Er, hells, now what?" type of reaction. I liked the bit about Maera 'borrowing' Kelsey's name, too, very sweet.
Some very good conversations in this chapter-I liked seeing Imoen's continuing to be a great support for Maera, and Sarevok's cool and rational analytical abilities.
Ooh, the pitter-patter of little feet! Other than Cespenar's :)
I figured they would have a child by reading one of your other stories, but it's good to see the moment of realisation dealt with here. It's realistically done and treated like a heavy, bewildering moment as it would be for two people in their situation. It's less of a "I'm pregnant, isn't it wonderful?" and more of a "Er, hells, now what?" type of reaction. I liked the bit about Maera 'borrowing' Kelsey's name, too, very sweet.
Some very good conversations in this chapter-I liked seeing Imoen's continuing to be a great support for Maera, and Sarevok's cool and rational analytical abilities.
4/2/2009 c32 A Wee Bit Insane
Wohoo! Greatly written, I love the punchlines - each chapter is whole and would be great as a standalone, yet, these stories make a nice and interesting fixup. As I said before, seeing Faerun through the eyes od a good - aligned warrior is a novelty for me, but I like what I see. BTW, what the hell with the ToB pregnancies? Don't they have pennyroyal in Faerun? ;)
Wohoo! Greatly written, I love the punchlines - each chapter is whole and would be great as a standalone, yet, these stories make a nice and interesting fixup. As I said before, seeing Faerun through the eyes od a good - aligned warrior is a novelty for me, but I like what I see. BTW, what the hell with the ToB pregnancies? Don't they have pennyroyal in Faerun? ;)
3/30/2009 c31 Fyriel
O what happens next? Sorcerers are my favorite class, I'm so glad Kelsey gets to use his powers to their utmost...I really liked the way you described his outburst as well, magic can be so hard to write but the image of it was great with the melting and such, super cool! As usual can't wait to read more... ;D
O what happens next? Sorcerers are my favorite class, I'm so glad Kelsey gets to use his powers to their utmost...I really liked the way you described his outburst as well, magic can be so hard to write but the image of it was great with the melting and such, super cool! As usual can't wait to read more... ;D
3/19/2009 c31 Fyriel
Aww, I loved this chapter! Very cute, and you capture Kelsey so well with his fierce loyalty and sort of dorky sense of humor, haha...and I also love all of the forgotten realms references you have...
Can't wait to read more! ;D
Aww, I loved this chapter! Very cute, and you capture Kelsey so well with his fierce loyalty and sort of dorky sense of humor, haha...and I also love all of the forgotten realms references you have...
Can't wait to read more! ;D
3/19/2009 c31 Lalaithe
Sorry, but I just have to say-Aw! That scene between the kids was just so sweet! I'm glad Kelsey's brother is alright, but, aw... OK, I'm done! :)
Very interesting dialogue between Sarevok and Kelsey. Anchev is quite a man of mystery, isn't he? I'm glad Kelsey got the chance to tell him to get stuffed, too.
I loved the exchange between Maera and Minsc, it's good to see something of him beyond 'Buttkicking for goodness'. Minsc is one of those characters where I'm not sure where the line between madness and quirkyness is. I think he's got some hearty bran mixed in with the fruit loops!
And Abazigal bites the dust. That was quite a shot! Interesting too how you had him mention that he was the eldest; obviously the Spawn all can't be the same age. Looking forward to more!
Sorry, but I just have to say-Aw! That scene between the kids was just so sweet! I'm glad Kelsey's brother is alright, but, aw... OK, I'm done! :)
Very interesting dialogue between Sarevok and Kelsey. Anchev is quite a man of mystery, isn't he? I'm glad Kelsey got the chance to tell him to get stuffed, too.
I loved the exchange between Maera and Minsc, it's good to see something of him beyond 'Buttkicking for goodness'. Minsc is one of those characters where I'm not sure where the line between madness and quirkyness is. I think he's got some hearty bran mixed in with the fruit loops!
And Abazigal bites the dust. That was quite a shot! Interesting too how you had him mention that he was the eldest; obviously the Spawn all can't be the same age. Looking forward to more!
3/13/2009 c30 Lalaithe
Kind of a quiet chapter, but it has a 'calm before the storm' feel to it. You've made a good explanation for Imoen's magic levels-she does seem suspiciously powered-up after Spellhold! Maybe it's me, but I get the feeling Maera is struggling a bit now with uncertainty. Her reaction to the Sarevok conversation and her thoughts on Balthazar (great description, btw) seem to indicate that maybe she's not in control as she'd like to be? She's focused and good but challenges are coming from unexpected places, the end result yet to be seen.
Kind of a quiet chapter, but it has a 'calm before the storm' feel to it. You've made a good explanation for Imoen's magic levels-she does seem suspiciously powered-up after Spellhold! Maybe it's me, but I get the feeling Maera is struggling a bit now with uncertainty. Her reaction to the Sarevok conversation and her thoughts on Balthazar (great description, btw) seem to indicate that maybe she's not in control as she'd like to be? She's focused and good but challenges are coming from unexpected places, the end result yet to be seen.
3/9/2009 c29 Lalaithe
Such a lovely chapter. Kelsey and Maera's parting scene was really well done; bittersweet without being too syrupy. I like how you hint that Imoen is smarter than she acts a lot of the time, I think that's very true! It's good too that you've drawn out the Gorion/Alianna background a bit, letting us see how they got together and knew each other. The image of young Sarevok clinging to Gorion's robes and him completely ignoring the child was very evocative. And Maera and Gorion's scene was wonderful!
Such a lovely chapter. Kelsey and Maera's parting scene was really well done; bittersweet without being too syrupy. I like how you hint that Imoen is smarter than she acts a lot of the time, I think that's very true! It's good too that you've drawn out the Gorion/Alianna background a bit, letting us see how they got together and knew each other. The image of young Sarevok clinging to Gorion's robes and him completely ignoring the child was very evocative. And Maera and Gorion's scene was wonderful!
3/4/2009 c28 Lalaithe
Maera's rage might become a problem, I see. Although Sarevok isn't entirely wrong that she needs to distance herself emotionally, at least to a degree, if she wants to succeed in such a big campaign. But unlike him she will always have a heart!
As I said before your Melissan is well-done, she seems much more believable. She's tattered and exhausted as you'd expect from one fleeing a seige. The teeth missing was a good detail! I liked Jaheira in this chapter too, her rationality shines though.
And Kelsey's leaving! Poor Maera. I don't know much about this plot, but I hope he somehow manages to find a trace of his brother.
Maera's rage might become a problem, I see. Although Sarevok isn't entirely wrong that she needs to distance herself emotionally, at least to a degree, if she wants to succeed in such a big campaign. But unlike him she will always have a heart!
As I said before your Melissan is well-done, she seems much more believable. She's tattered and exhausted as you'd expect from one fleeing a seige. The teeth missing was a good detail! I liked Jaheira in this chapter too, her rationality shines though.
And Kelsey's leaving! Poor Maera. I don't know much about this plot, but I hope he somehow manages to find a trace of his brother.