2/18/2012 c4 2jaqui101
i like it very much just like twilight

hope u finish the story

keep up the good job

2/25/2009 c1 19Raidersrule76
I REALLY need to get used to the new site layout...grumble grumble.

So not only do you decide to take an existing work of fiction, plug in new characters, switch events around and just generally create an unoriginal, uncreative mess of a Word document, but you decide to base it on, of all things, a book that's nowhere near being good in the first place?

Why couldn't you plagiarize The Great Gatsby? Or Huckleberry Finn? You know, a GOOD book?

But, hey, going back to the issue of plagiarism. Yeah, that's essentially what this is. I mean, it's about as creative as drawing a circle on a piece of paper and claiming to have invented the wheel. This isn't "amazing." You're taking something that already exists and deciding, cheerfully smiling the entire time, to do the single most uncreative thing every and actually rewrite an existing book.

And, well, honestly, if you're going to do that, you could do a better job of actually writing it. You do exactly what Stephanie Meyer does: throw flowery words around and write badly-characterized characters. This does not a story make.

Usually I try to be helpful in reviews, especially negative ones. But I was too astounded by the fact that you A) are plagiarizing, B) plagiarizing TWILIGHT, of all things, and C) are completely unaware of the poor job you're doing, to keep my tongue in check.

Peace be with you.

-RR76

2/16/2009 c4 6katara12171
I love this story. It's something new and interesting, i love it.

2/16/2009 c4 21Rianna Lauren
Ali wrote this chapter...?

that's so nice of you two... thanks for everything you guys did for us, too...

i'm so sad for ali :(

thanks for dedicating this chapter, (claire almost cried), it really really means a lot...

-Rynna (and Claire)

12/25/2008 c1 prettydamnsick
*dies of happiness and joy, and that burrito i had yesterday C: *

HOLY MOTHER OF PICKLES.

this story is AWFUL-Y WONDERFUL :D

Ye! :3

Aww! Your also my bestfriend! :D

Your story is amazing.

I shall now write my new chapter, and dedicate it to youu C:

I'll get on it right away!

Roger! I'm out! :D

*grabs my keyboard and glass of juice*

I'll make the chapter the best ever.

12/21/2008 c3 xPoisened-black-Rosesx
that was really good, i dont usually write reviews but i had to cheack out the people who reviewed my stories, I really liked it, its really cute, and i LOVE twilight.

alot of dialogue us used but thats okey, and you make good use of enjambment..

keep up the good work and dont give up!

and check out some of my fics aswell.

heard you liked my angsty one-shot, funny, no-one seems to like those,=[]

anyway

keep it up

xPbRx

11/18/2008 c3 21Rianna Lauren
YAY! YOU UPDATED THIS STORY! I LOVE LOVE LOVE IT SO MUCH!

Rob and Star fluffs FINALLY...YAY!

Update soon! :)

Rynna

11/16/2008 c2 Effervescent Dreamer
You BETTER continue this story! I love Twilight and am hooked onto this fic. Can't wait for more!

Starry