for Ending Before We Begin1/8 c10 Guest
dude this is stupid no offence just my personal opinion
dude this is stupid no offence just my personal opinion
12/4/2012 c20 jperez6509
I know its been ages since you wrote but on am major league bummed that its incomplete please I am beginning to get a complex with all the stories I really enjoy not ending. Great plot and I love the baal twist.
I know its been ages since you wrote but on am major league bummed that its incomplete please I am beginning to get a complex with all the stories I really enjoy not ending. Great plot and I love the baal twist.
11/25/2012 c1 Serfius
I know I really probably shouldn't get into this fic, seeing as how it's been a couple years since the last update, but I can't help myself. It's shaping up to be really interesting, and I hope you decide to continue.
I know I really probably shouldn't get into this fic, seeing as how it's been a couple years since the last update, but I can't help myself. It's shaping up to be really interesting, and I hope you decide to continue.
7/13/2012 c20 
1bellachaos
I know this story hasn't been updated in years but PLEASE PLEASE complete it. I've really enjoyed it so far and would love to see how it ends.
1bellachaosI know this story hasn't been updated in years but PLEASE PLEASE complete it. I've really enjoyed it so far and would love to see how it ends.
5/30/2012 c20 stark40763
Well, after reading this, I gotta say that this was certainly an interesting twist to the SG Universe!
Well, after reading this, I gotta say that this was certainly an interesting twist to the SG Universe!
4/9/2012 c20 riverlover
I really enjoyed your story. It was excellently written and I think the characters were properly developed. I hope that one day you will decide to finish it but thank you for sharing what you have written so far.
I really enjoyed your story. It was excellently written and I think the characters were properly developed. I hope that one day you will decide to finish it but thank you for sharing what you have written so far.
3/21/2011 c20 1Saissa
This is a great story - I hope you have NOT abandoned it for good. Its been 9 months since the last update.
I mean you are the pivotal point Here. Jackson has found the constellations and therefore now knows how to open the stargate. At the same time the entry of RA into the SGC will also happen - combine those and you just need to briefly use one chapter to summarize the movie using a different leader since O'neill is no longer on a suicide mission and maybe get jackson and carter together so Share doesnt really come into the story either.
1SaissaThis is a great story - I hope you have NOT abandoned it for good. Its been 9 months since the last update.
I mean you are the pivotal point Here. Jackson has found the constellations and therefore now knows how to open the stargate. At the same time the entry of RA into the SGC will also happen - combine those and you just need to briefly use one chapter to summarize the movie using a different leader since O'neill is no longer on a suicide mission and maybe get jackson and carter together so Share doesnt really come into the story either.
2/20/2011 c20 89Marcus S. Lazarus
Hoo boy...
There’s something rather amusing about the idea that you wrote this story BEFORE the 2009 “Star Trek” movie, really; the central plot elements of both storylines- villain going back in time and rewriting the history of his main enemy as part of his attempts to improve his own life- are so similar it’s really rather uncanny.
That said, your story stands on its own as an original plot very well for all the unusual similarities, I assure you. The idea of Ba’al’s clone attempting his own personal ‘rewrite’ of history alone is rather interesting, and his reasoning for bringing together three-quarters of the ‘original’ SG-1 is clearly explained as being motivated by more rational reasons than a simple thirst for revenge, neatly combining Ba’al’s ego with his ability to conceive more rational plans than some of his contemporaries.
His plan to use Sam as Hathor’s new host while he took Daniel’s body might have been rather abruptly cut short, but anything featuring one of the particularly old Goa’ulds being literally crushed underfoot like the worms they’ve always treated humanity as is always amusing, and the additional twist of his attempt to use Jack to gain control of the Ancient weapons platform was EXCELLENT (Particularly with your idea regarding Ba’al’s ‘bargaining chip’; definitely reflects his usual Machiavellian ‘need’ for cunning plans).
Too bad that Ba’al couldn’t have done SG-1 more of a ‘favour’ and eliminated a couple of people who’d cause trouble for them later- although at least Maybourne may have lost a bit of credibility with anyone due to his ‘witch hunt’ after Sam and Daniel returned to the SGC-, but the fact that they already possess the Time Jumper, the ZPM, AND knowledge of the Antarctic weapons platform because of Ba’al at least puts them significantly ahead of the game when they start the Stargate Program here compared to how they were originally.
Admittedly, Sam having already guessed that the symbols are coordinates for points in three-dimensional space slightly ‘undermines’ the scale of Daniel’s own achievement in translating the Stargate (And makes Daniel’s subsequent difficulty in ‘translating’ the symbols make even less sense; why would he take so long to figure it out when Ba’al already gave them most of the essential details about how the Stargate works?), but the central plot is still interesting enough for that not to be a MAJOR issue, I assure you.
Hope you haven’t abandoned this story; not only do I hope that Jack can be persuaded to come back at least long enough to help them find the Ancient weapons platform, but I DEFINITELY have to wonder how things are going to go when they meet Teal’c in this reality...
89Marcus S. LazarusHoo boy...
There’s something rather amusing about the idea that you wrote this story BEFORE the 2009 “Star Trek” movie, really; the central plot elements of both storylines- villain going back in time and rewriting the history of his main enemy as part of his attempts to improve his own life- are so similar it’s really rather uncanny.
That said, your story stands on its own as an original plot very well for all the unusual similarities, I assure you. The idea of Ba’al’s clone attempting his own personal ‘rewrite’ of history alone is rather interesting, and his reasoning for bringing together three-quarters of the ‘original’ SG-1 is clearly explained as being motivated by more rational reasons than a simple thirst for revenge, neatly combining Ba’al’s ego with his ability to conceive more rational plans than some of his contemporaries.
His plan to use Sam as Hathor’s new host while he took Daniel’s body might have been rather abruptly cut short, but anything featuring one of the particularly old Goa’ulds being literally crushed underfoot like the worms they’ve always treated humanity as is always amusing, and the additional twist of his attempt to use Jack to gain control of the Ancient weapons platform was EXCELLENT (Particularly with your idea regarding Ba’al’s ‘bargaining chip’; definitely reflects his usual Machiavellian ‘need’ for cunning plans).
Too bad that Ba’al couldn’t have done SG-1 more of a ‘favour’ and eliminated a couple of people who’d cause trouble for them later- although at least Maybourne may have lost a bit of credibility with anyone due to his ‘witch hunt’ after Sam and Daniel returned to the SGC-, but the fact that they already possess the Time Jumper, the ZPM, AND knowledge of the Antarctic weapons platform because of Ba’al at least puts them significantly ahead of the game when they start the Stargate Program here compared to how they were originally.
Admittedly, Sam having already guessed that the symbols are coordinates for points in three-dimensional space slightly ‘undermines’ the scale of Daniel’s own achievement in translating the Stargate (And makes Daniel’s subsequent difficulty in ‘translating’ the symbols make even less sense; why would he take so long to figure it out when Ba’al already gave them most of the essential details about how the Stargate works?), but the central plot is still interesting enough for that not to be a MAJOR issue, I assure you.
Hope you haven’t abandoned this story; not only do I hope that Jack can be persuaded to come back at least long enough to help them find the Ancient weapons platform, but I DEFINITELY have to wonder how things are going to go when they meet Teal’c in this reality...
12/23/2010 c20 3mamoswineFTW
Love the story premise, and the Sam/Daniel interaction. Please update soon, I think the story's great. Wouldn't mind seeing a one shot where Ba'al and Hathor take over Daniel and Sam, just to see what it could be like!
3mamoswineFTWLove the story premise, and the Sam/Daniel interaction. Please update soon, I think the story's great. Wouldn't mind seeing a one shot where Ba'al and Hathor take over Daniel and Sam, just to see what it could be like!
8/20/2010 c20 2Dreamer22
I love the scene with Daniel and Charlie! So adorable! terrific job I love this story and I can't wait for more! please update soon!
2Dreamer22I love the scene with Daniel and Charlie! So adorable! terrific job I love this story and I can't wait for more! please update soon!
7/3/2010 c20 3WhiteElfElder
I wonder what Jack is thinking about Daniel being gone for so long, and about Daniel spending the time with his kid? Well, Daniel has unlocked the puzzle, will it be a rescue mission that Jack joins to rescue Daniel and Sam after things go FUBAR because he wasn't on the first mission through?
3WhiteElfElderI wonder what Jack is thinking about Daniel being gone for so long, and about Daniel spending the time with his kid? Well, Daniel has unlocked the puzzle, will it be a rescue mission that Jack joins to rescue Daniel and Sam after things go FUBAR because he wasn't on the first mission through?
6/7/2010 c20 john777
Good, keep writing
Good, keep writing