for Coffee Break12/24/2012 c1 Robin
this is so badass and so very in character. Bravo
this is so badass and so very in character. Bravo
3/27/2012 c1 
6MKproot
This is one of those awesome fan fictions that captures the characters so well that I almost feel like this happened in a movie or something. :D
6MKprootThis is one of those awesome fan fictions that captures the characters so well that I almost feel like this happened in a movie or something. :D
3/27/2012 c1 Dioltas
I stumbled upon this randomly after a little exploring, and I must say that I am very impressed. You did a wonderful job and it felt so natural to read it; you don't often come across a crossover that actually works. Lucy was written nicely, as were Jack and John.
Well done!
I stumbled upon this randomly after a little exploring, and I must say that I am very impressed. You did a wonderful job and it felt so natural to read it; you don't often come across a crossover that actually works. Lucy was written nicely, as were Jack and John.
Well done!
7/8/2011 c1 7MegaBauer
This story was very good and it proves you can have a good 24/Die Hard crossover without one terrorist, explosion, gunshot or kidnapping.
7MegaBauerThis story was very good and it proves you can have a good 24/Die Hard crossover without one terrorist, explosion, gunshot or kidnapping.
11/25/2010 c1 1DieHardBrendan
Real interesting short story about the brief meeting between John McClane and Jack Bauer.
They both men of action and their sharp intincts are unparallel.
1DieHardBrendanReal interesting short story about the brief meeting between John McClane and Jack Bauer.
They both men of action and their sharp intincts are unparallel.
11/23/2010 c1 Kris Sakai
If I didn't know better I'd say you threw in the coffee comment just for me. I really liked the way McClane really acted like a dad. Great dialogue as well, as always.
If I didn't know better I'd say you threw in the coffee comment just for me. I really liked the way McClane really acted like a dad. Great dialogue as well, as always.
7/14/2010 c1 Kazama93
Hi there :)
I really like this short, but interesting fanfiction story of yours. The way you describe Jack Bauer and John McClane is really fitting. A nice little story!
Hi there :)
I really like this short, but interesting fanfiction story of yours. The way you describe Jack Bauer and John McClane is really fitting. A nice little story!
5/12/2010 c1 4Gyreflight
When I saw the categories in the crossover, this is *exactly* what I was hoping to read. You caught both character’s voices and personalities dead on, and it’s an appealing conceit to have those two in particular happen to brush past each other. The implicit parallels and contrasts are fascinating, and the idea of having the ‘hook’ of John’s relationship with his daughter catching Jack’s attention, and of that then attracting John’s is a very neat touch.
They are both of them men of action, but above that, they are men of observation, whose lives rely on interpreting correctly everything that goes on around them – and reacting appropriately. You did a lovely job of picking up on the little details that go with that mindset, which is why it reads so believably. A great deal can remain unspoken and still be understood by such people, which is probably why the brief interaction works as well as it does.
Oh, and I really liked Jack’s "Nobody I know has died or been kidnapped. The president's still alive. No nukes are missing, all biological weapons are accounted for, and the terrorist alert level is decreased. So—yes, this has been a good day." It made me grin.
Thanks for the read.
~Gyre
4GyreflightWhen I saw the categories in the crossover, this is *exactly* what I was hoping to read. You caught both character’s voices and personalities dead on, and it’s an appealing conceit to have those two in particular happen to brush past each other. The implicit parallels and contrasts are fascinating, and the idea of having the ‘hook’ of John’s relationship with his daughter catching Jack’s attention, and of that then attracting John’s is a very neat touch.
They are both of them men of action, but above that, they are men of observation, whose lives rely on interpreting correctly everything that goes on around them – and reacting appropriately. You did a lovely job of picking up on the little details that go with that mindset, which is why it reads so believably. A great deal can remain unspoken and still be understood by such people, which is probably why the brief interaction works as well as it does.
Oh, and I really liked Jack’s "Nobody I know has died or been kidnapped. The president's still alive. No nukes are missing, all biological weapons are accounted for, and the terrorist alert level is decreased. So—yes, this has been a good day." It made me grin.
Thanks for the read.
~Gyre
1/15/2010 c1 11bluedana
The word of the day is AWESOME. These are two of my favorite action characters, and you got both of their voices just right. Some lines were read-out-loud funny or poignant:
*“You better not have that damned lip gloss on. I don’t want glitter on my head, Lucy.”* And,
*“Day’s almost over,” Jack said. “Nobody I know has died or been kidnapped. The president’s still alive. No nukes are missing, all biological weapons are accounted for, and the terrorist alert level is decreased. So—yes, this has been a good day.”
“Geez, what do your bad days look like?” McClane sipped his coffee.
“You don’t want to know.”*
I could hear each of these characters say each of these things, which is so satisfying. The details you included made me feel like I was watching this, or sitting in the diner with them.
Awesome.
11bluedanaThe word of the day is AWESOME. These are two of my favorite action characters, and you got both of their voices just right. Some lines were read-out-loud funny or poignant:
*“You better not have that damned lip gloss on. I don’t want glitter on my head, Lucy.”* And,
*“Day’s almost over,” Jack said. “Nobody I know has died or been kidnapped. The president’s still alive. No nukes are missing, all biological weapons are accounted for, and the terrorist alert level is decreased. So—yes, this has been a good day.”
“Geez, what do your bad days look like?” McClane sipped his coffee.
“You don’t want to know.”*
I could hear each of these characters say each of these things, which is so satisfying. The details you included made me feel like I was watching this, or sitting in the diner with them.
Awesome.
12/15/2009 c1 80Partly
I know I read this before and can't believe I didn't let you know how completely awesome it is.
You capture the personality of both characters and have a wonderful talent for dialogue. Both Bauer and McClane say a whole hell of a lot without saying anything at all. I love the fact that both men were very aware of the other and knew, instinctively, that the other was a dangerous man.
80PartlyI know I read this before and can't believe I didn't let you know how completely awesome it is.
You capture the personality of both characters and have a wonderful talent for dialogue. Both Bauer and McClane say a whole hell of a lot without saying anything at all. I love the fact that both men were very aware of the other and knew, instinctively, that the other was a dangerous man.
7/21/2009 c1 8Blazemane
Wow. Very nice.
Interesting, of course, that you wrote this in January, and that by the end of this last season, some semblance of a peace *has* been formed between Jack and his daughter.
Anyways, I like the tense, abrupt style of your writing, and this:
"She didn’t die. I did."
is awesome. Great job.
8BlazemaneWow. Very nice.
Interesting, of course, that you wrote this in January, and that by the end of this last season, some semblance of a peace *has* been formed between Jack and his daughter.
Anyways, I like the tense, abrupt style of your writing, and this:
"She didn’t die. I did."
is awesome. Great job.
5/23/2009 c1 2Prisoner617
Hey, this was an awesome story! I loved the dialogue. It definitely held my interest the whole way through.
2Prisoner617Hey, this was an awesome story! I loved the dialogue. It definitely held my interest the whole way through.
2/3/2009 c1 6The Infiniator
Well done. What I like about this story is that it's just a brief encounter between two awesome characters. I like how you portrayed both characters. Jack's still a lost soul while McClane is at peace. The length worked to your advantage as well. It wasn't long, but not too short either. They didn't say much to each other, and yet they said a lot. Again, well done.
“What do you do, Jack?”
“I’m—in between jobs right now.”
- Awesome
6The InfiniatorWell done. What I like about this story is that it's just a brief encounter between two awesome characters. I like how you portrayed both characters. Jack's still a lost soul while McClane is at peace. The length worked to your advantage as well. It wasn't long, but not too short either. They didn't say much to each other, and yet they said a lot. Again, well done.
“What do you do, Jack?”
“I’m—in between jobs right now.”
- Awesome