11/27/2012 c1 If only
Ahaha! Damn that is illegal in so many way. I loved every second of it!

First of all; it's Bulworth, it's simple fact that if and when sex ed. is taught- this will be what happens, exactly.
Second in command! Peanut and Johnny. This will be exactly what happens, you know it's true. Not to mention how I adore them almost as much as their combined combined assault charges... Burton's harassment suits may be a closer number. I'll just say I love them A LOT!
Third, last but certainly not least- I love absolutely everything about this! I mean if I could be your muse for a day damn I don't think I'd ever run out of 'interesting' situations I could put those boys in. The situation itself is amazing and ridiculous in so many ways- and it works perfectly, I can't imagine this not happening. And trust me I can repeat that all day, but since this should be a review and not some stalker fan-letter- I do have one critique.

Your structure of writing is all over the place, the writing itself is wonderful- but there are certain 'rules' to literature. Typically you should start a quote in a new paragraph, especially when someone new is talking. Like with Burton and Johnny arguing, you know who's who but having each line separate just makes the work flow easier and prevents any confusion from happening.
The only problem to this is that you don't add an overt amount of description- to be honest you don't need to, having less described adds to comedy of it all, makes it easier to imagine. Although it can get longwinded if you add too much, it can seem chopped or empty having several pages of writing with not a line going past the center of the page.
The reason I even put 'rules' between darts is that this is your fun. It's not like I'm in pain or unable to make sense of anything, what you have written is fantastic as it is. I was hanging on every word, hell, this review may in fact be longer than the story itself- for that much I'm sorry, if anything you could use this review as an example on 'how going on forever should be avoided'... Right. This isn't an essay and so long as you keep writing, I know that every story of yours will be amazing no matter how or in what way you write it.

Ah, Burton stripping Johnny Vincent... in front of the whole school. What else can describe a perfect day!

9/6/2011 c1 Angelusdeath
OMFG! THAT WAS THE BEST. I LOVE GARY. AND l LOVE THE JOHNNYXLARRY.

10/8/2010 c1 3Coloured Flames
That was totally random

11/20/2009 c1 Yolen Yui
Holy what teh hell? I DO NOT WANT TO KNOW WHO KEEPS GOING 'JIMMY!' ' But this is pretty funny

6/30/2009 c1 SimpleBend
LOL. Hilarious story. XD! LMAO!

3/17/2009 c1 22Scarred
lol! You should make one with the girls but all the guys were trying to spy on them. that would be funny.

2/19/2009 c1 34schizophrenic-clown
That was so fuckin' funny! I love Johnny! -swoons-

Oh, Gary...