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6grayember13
This was so amazing and adorable and heart-wrenching! Thank you for a great read!
6grayember13This was so amazing and adorable and heart-wrenching! Thank you for a great read!
12/9/2012 c15 1SpangleyPony
Liked it. The epilogue was well thought out but for me they will always be brothers.
1SpangleyPonyLiked it. The epilogue was well thought out but for me they will always be brothers.
6/29/2012 c15 8Journey Hates
One pet peeve. Its bear not bare! So many people use the freakin wrong one! Bare is like the tree was bare, the early frost had caused it to loose it's once emerald leaves too soon. You needed to use bear. As in, I couldnt bear the wieght of the silence any longer, I spoke, "Please dont leave." That is my only problem with this story, the WHOLE thing. other than that great job!
8Journey HatesOne pet peeve. Its bear not bare! So many people use the freakin wrong one! Bare is like the tree was bare, the early frost had caused it to loose it's once emerald leaves too soon. You needed to use bear. As in, I couldnt bear the wieght of the silence any longer, I spoke, "Please dont leave." That is my only problem with this story, the WHOLE thing. other than that great job!
3/7/2012 c15 10DF-chan
For CRYING OUT LOAD! That was amazing! *sob*
So full of emotions, actions, feelings, people and ARGH!
I just can't help it, I feel so frustrated and happy in the same moment! How could you so perfectly make up this, THIS? It's just so right - right about feelings, people, time, situation and - and THE END! It isn't just the end, it is The End. I can't write anything more. Too little vocabulary to describe my emotions (english isn't my language) and yet such a strong urge to write something - so i'll wright: THIS IS FUCKING AWESOME.
10DF-chanFor CRYING OUT LOAD! That was amazing! *sob*
So full of emotions, actions, feelings, people and ARGH!
I just can't help it, I feel so frustrated and happy in the same moment! How could you so perfectly make up this, THIS? It's just so right - right about feelings, people, time, situation and - and THE END! It isn't just the end, it is The End. I can't write anything more. Too little vocabulary to describe my emotions (english isn't my language) and yet such a strong urge to write something - so i'll wright: THIS IS FUCKING AWESOME.
2/14/2012 c9 arwa
i love the emerald met sapphire thing. love it.
i love the emerald met sapphire thing. love it.
2/14/2012 c7 amber
a nice punch of emotion
a nice punch of emotion
1/27/2012 c3 4dragoness simplicity
Chapter 4
his eyes wide and his hands chained behind me. - him
great story ^_^
4dragoness simplicityChapter 4
his eyes wide and his hands chained behind me. - him
great story ^_^
1/27/2012 c2 dragoness simplicity
Chapter 2:
*He trusted Arthur wouldn't turn him in. - trusted that Arthur wouldn't
Chapter 2:
*He trusted Arthur wouldn't turn him in. - trusted that Arthur wouldn't
1/27/2012 c1 dragoness simplicity
Oooo. Very dramatic ending. Can't wait to read the next chapter ^_^
Found a few things, sorry. I can't help myself sometimes. :(
Chapter 1
*maybe I'll find a way to get little sissy too - to
*but this was man was heavy and slow. - this man was
*Ducking below the thief's blade for not the first time, Arthur - Ducking below the thief's blade, not for the first time, Arthur (commas and word misplacement)
*Arthur found the young warlock was stood frozen - warlock stood frozen
*"Let me guess? You had my back" said Arthur - my back," said (comma)
*Merlin had only seen Arthur kill another man on very few occasions - kill other men on very few occasions
*and still it shook him to the soul - shook him to the core (phrase)
*Come on Annie" she said - Annie," she (comma)
*but he wasn't too slow enough to stab his - too slow to stab
*through the chest as he almost fell on top of Arthur. - consider rephrasing. Eg. (full stop) HAs a result, however, he almost fell on top as Arthur.
*He had been stood frozen, watching in fear - He had been standing still, frozen, watching...
*Arthur had carried on the running - carried on running.
*dragging him back and pulling Merlin's grasp from the ginger girl away. - pulling Merlin's grasp away from the ginger girl.
*She turned, the same fear in her eyes, - in her eyes. (full stop)
*before turning back, unsure, - unsure. (full stop)
*forward onto his face shook his head with a groan, - groan. (full stop)
*Getting on his feet, he swayed slightly, - slightly. (full stop)
*Another of the men sneered, - sneered (full stop)
*some practise on my archery" - archery." (full stop)
*straightening up and tensing, - tensing. (full stop)
*closer to the warlock, - warlock. (full stop)
*his eyes closed and on the ground, - ground. (full stop) OR connect this sentence with the next one (aka, remove the paragraph)
*"What you going to do, Merlin? That's your name isn't it?" - Didn't the girl call him Emrys? (I may have missed Arthur calling him Merlin though)
*his eyes closed and on the ground, - ground. (full stop)
I'm noticing a little pattern here. Let's just say that people should't end a sentance with a comma.
Oooo. Very dramatic ending. Can't wait to read the next chapter ^_^
Found a few things, sorry. I can't help myself sometimes. :(
Chapter 1
*maybe I'll find a way to get little sissy too - to
*but this was man was heavy and slow. - this man was
*Ducking below the thief's blade for not the first time, Arthur - Ducking below the thief's blade, not for the first time, Arthur (commas and word misplacement)
*Arthur found the young warlock was stood frozen - warlock stood frozen
*"Let me guess? You had my back" said Arthur - my back," said (comma)
*Merlin had only seen Arthur kill another man on very few occasions - kill other men on very few occasions
*and still it shook him to the soul - shook him to the core (phrase)
*Come on Annie" she said - Annie," she (comma)
*but he wasn't too slow enough to stab his - too slow to stab
*through the chest as he almost fell on top of Arthur. - consider rephrasing. Eg. (full stop) HAs a result, however, he almost fell on top as Arthur.
*He had been stood frozen, watching in fear - He had been standing still, frozen, watching...
*Arthur had carried on the running - carried on running.
*dragging him back and pulling Merlin's grasp from the ginger girl away. - pulling Merlin's grasp away from the ginger girl.
*She turned, the same fear in her eyes, - in her eyes. (full stop)
*before turning back, unsure, - unsure. (full stop)
*forward onto his face shook his head with a groan, - groan. (full stop)
*Getting on his feet, he swayed slightly, - slightly. (full stop)
*Another of the men sneered, - sneered (full stop)
*some practise on my archery" - archery." (full stop)
*straightening up and tensing, - tensing. (full stop)
*closer to the warlock, - warlock. (full stop)
*his eyes closed and on the ground, - ground. (full stop) OR connect this sentence with the next one (aka, remove the paragraph)
*"What you going to do, Merlin? That's your name isn't it?" - Didn't the girl call him Emrys? (I may have missed Arthur calling him Merlin though)
*his eyes closed and on the ground, - ground. (full stop)
I'm noticing a little pattern here. Let's just say that people should't end a sentance with a comma.
1/24/2012 c15 13Munku-JGSPTV
Great fic! I loved the slow development and the tension! The shocking drama of Arthur throwing Merlin into the dungeons and nearly being executed had me hooked. And nice reference to the stag at the end in Merlin's magic. I thought that the additional chapter should have been posted as a separate one-shot, cause it felt more like a completely different story that could act as a potential
sequel. Oh well. Thanks for posting!
13Munku-JGSPTVGreat fic! I loved the slow development and the tension! The shocking drama of Arthur throwing Merlin into the dungeons and nearly being executed had me hooked. And nice reference to the stag at the end in Merlin's magic. I thought that the additional chapter should have been posted as a separate one-shot, cause it felt more like a completely different story that could act as a potential
sequel. Oh well. Thanks for posting!
2/27/2011 c10 16DragonflyonBreak
I'm very annoyed at the turn this took. If you were going to end up having them kiss and make out I wish that you would warn those of us who disagree with that. I had been enjoying this and was going to give a very nice review but under the circumstances...
Very. Angry.
DragonflyonBreak
16DragonflyonBreakI'm very annoyed at the turn this took. If you were going to end up having them kiss and make out I wish that you would warn those of us who disagree with that. I had been enjoying this and was going to give a very nice review but under the circumstances...
Very. Angry.
DragonflyonBreak
9/1/2010 c15 Cumorah
"Ditto" HAHAHAhahahahahaha just that one word has me laughing hysterically! I have no idea why...so funny! Gr8 job with this story by the way luv it!
"Ditto" HAHAHAhahahahahaha just that one word has me laughing hysterically! I have no idea why...so funny! Gr8 job with this story by the way luv it!