for One More Prank11/15/2010 c1 cross-over-lover232
please open your self up to privte messageing, if you would like i would beta read your stories and help fix grammer and spelling errors.
and in your gundamwing/harry potter one with him as a her?snape did FAVERism not treason, treason is where you kill the head of your goverment or sell goverment secreats what you were talking about was how he handled his houses aganst others complately differnt
please open your self up to privte messageing, if you would like i would beta read your stories and help fix grammer and spelling errors.
and in your gundamwing/harry potter one with him as a her?snape did FAVERism not treason, treason is where you kill the head of your goverment or sell goverment secreats what you were talking about was how he handled his houses aganst others complately differnt
6/5/2009 c1 loretta537
this sounds like a good story, i really like the fact that in this one the dursleys like hary and dont abuse him
this sounds like a good story, i really like the fact that in this one the dursleys like hary and dont abuse him
3/11/2009 c1 
9NLaddict
it seems like an interesting story. its pretty good, but its a bit difficult to read. everything is bunched together. I like that the Dursleys are nice.
9NLaddictit seems like an interesting story. its pretty good, but its a bit difficult to read. everything is bunched together. I like that the Dursleys are nice.
3/10/2009 c1 2fairytopian
Hm... a critique if you will accept it. First, spelling and grammar are key when you want some one to understand your story. Second, if your going to write a AU, make sure you define some sort of idea of what your going to write about, so we can all understand what is going on. And lastly, make sure you at least get the original cannon straight unless you clairify what you are changing so we understand why they have changed. At first i thought you were talking about Neville and Draco, until i saw the 4 privet dr. You do realise Harry has jet black hair, right? While i think the idea of Pettigrew showing up at the dursley's, getting caught, and the hateful people caring for the boy, you have to give more of a reason than you have given. Phew. Now that i am done critiquing, i think it has an interesting start,and im intrigued as to how sirius will come into play as far as raising Harry, and what will happen to Albus Dumbledore now that Harry will grow up knowing about the wizarding world, and grow to be less controlable.
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2fairytopianHm... a critique if you will accept it. First, spelling and grammar are key when you want some one to understand your story. Second, if your going to write a AU, make sure you define some sort of idea of what your going to write about, so we can all understand what is going on. And lastly, make sure you at least get the original cannon straight unless you clairify what you are changing so we understand why they have changed. At first i thought you were talking about Neville and Draco, until i saw the 4 privet dr. You do realise Harry has jet black hair, right? While i think the idea of Pettigrew showing up at the dursley's, getting caught, and the hateful people caring for the boy, you have to give more of a reason than you have given. Phew. Now that i am done critiquing, i think it has an interesting start,and im intrigued as to how sirius will come into play as far as raising Harry, and what will happen to Albus Dumbledore now that Harry will grow up knowing about the wizarding world, and grow to be less controlable.
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