for Another Glorious Day in the Corps3/14/2004 c3 Phoenix Spear
This damn story kicks **, Bro! On the first chap you named the sniper Richard A. Jackson but on chapter two you called him Johnson. Make Jackson/Johnson go out with Northway. I'm putting this fic on my favorites lists.
Peace
This damn story kicks **, Bro! On the first chap you named the sniper Richard A. Jackson but on chapter two you called him Johnson. Make Jackson/Johnson go out with Northway. I'm putting this fic on my favorites lists.
Peace
2/13/2004 c3 alt sorato dash too lazy 2 sign in
what is it?
please continue!
please!
what is it?
please continue!
please!
2/7/2003 c1 
1chuck1
This is a very good story well written story, with a nice plot that flows like the waves in the sea. please read my halo story called Marine Force Zulu
1chuck1This is a very good story well written story, with a nice plot that flows like the waves in the sea. please read my halo story called Marine Force Zulu
7/24/2002 c3 Slick
Great fic! i love halo! I'm betting that you like the movie "Aliens" a lot
Great fic! i love halo! I'm betting that you like the movie "Aliens" a lot
7/15/2002 c3 bass
this is a really great story please continue it as fast as you can! this is too much of a **ing cliff hanger!
this is a really great story please continue it as fast as you can! this is too much of a **ing cliff hanger!
4/10/2002 c3 Angel123292
MORE! MORE! MORE!
MORE! MORE! MORE!
3/24/2002 c1 Zap Brannegan
For a first try, the story was pretty good and was fairly entertaining. Since it's your first i'll go easy on you. Your style of writing is reminiscent of WW2 historical fiction told from the soldier's perspective. Your characterization of the battle-weary corporal was also good, and you should expand on that in later episodes.
A good use of foreshadowing was shown by having the private with "good potential" and the sniper, plus the cpl's hatred of spartans which will most likely be disproved later.
It was, all iin all a good story, you should keep writing in my opinion. I liked the "Aliens" reference in the title :)
P.S.- My history teacher is forcing my class to do this over spring break.
For a first try, the story was pretty good and was fairly entertaining. Since it's your first i'll go easy on you. Your style of writing is reminiscent of WW2 historical fiction told from the soldier's perspective. Your characterization of the battle-weary corporal was also good, and you should expand on that in later episodes.
A good use of foreshadowing was shown by having the private with "good potential" and the sniper, plus the cpl's hatred of spartans which will most likely be disproved later.
It was, all iin all a good story, you should keep writing in my opinion. I liked the "Aliens" reference in the title :)
P.S.- My history teacher is forcing my class to do this over spring break.
3/7/2002 c1 JackBurner
The author seems to have a very good way of speaking of these events at such an early age. This is very good.
The author seems to have a very good way of speaking of these events at such an early age. This is very good.
3/3/2002 c3 omega force
really great story I mean even the littlest thing you descirbe with great detail Good Job
really great story I mean even the littlest thing you descirbe with great detail Good Job
2/22/2002 c2 Silver Death
Please keep writing
Please keep writing
2/5/2002 c1 1Th' hbt MAn
First fic, huh? Well, I enjoyed it myself. I like the way you described the conditions they were under and McPherson's attitude towards... everything. There was a slight pause in the story as you were explaining about Stevens, but I got over it no prob.
Go write more man, while I've still got another chapter to tide me over.
1Th' hbt MAnFirst fic, huh? Well, I enjoyed it myself. I like the way you described the conditions they were under and McPherson's attitude towards... everything. There was a slight pause in the story as you were explaining about Stevens, but I got over it no prob.
Go write more man, while I've still got another chapter to tide me over.
1/29/2002 c2 Adam Cregeur
I can not say anything except WOW... I would LOVE it if you would continue this story, it grabbed my attention and held it to no end. Please continue the story it gets an A+ in my view!
I can not say anything except WOW... I would LOVE it if you would continue this story, it grabbed my attention and held it to no end. Please continue the story it gets an A+ in my view!
1/26/2002 c1 Guest
A good story, but you swapped the perspective while McPherson was remembering a mission that he did while with one of the SPARTAN II's... Does this quote seem familiar? "to successfully lead us..." Note the word "us." This probably should have been the word "them," unless of course you wanted it to be this way. Otherwise, good HALO story. Keep it up.
A good story, but you swapped the perspective while McPherson was remembering a mission that he did while with one of the SPARTAN II's... Does this quote seem familiar? "to successfully lead us..." Note the word "us." This probably should have been the word "them," unless of course you wanted it to be this way. Otherwise, good HALO story. Keep it up.
1/20/2002 c2 supersonic3
that was a amazing chapter. this story is just what I am looking. Its...wow. keep up the good work.
that was a amazing chapter. this story is just what I am looking. Its...wow. keep up the good work.