for Going To Sleep1/8/2012 c1 Serioustwiligtfan
It was sweet, beautiful, emotional.
It was sweet, beautiful, emotional.
9/22/2010 c1 
2smokehighcuztheworldslow
HOLAYyyyyyyyy FRENCH CONNECTION UK
OR FUCK
DID HE JUST
DIE
OR LIK SLIP INTO TEMPORARY UNCONCIOUSNESS
HM
other than that well done, so deep and emotional I wanted Cry
Love the flashback
2smokehighcuztheworldslowHOLAYyyyyyyyy FRENCH CONNECTION UK
OR FUCK
DID HE JUST
DIE
OR LIK SLIP INTO TEMPORARY UNCONCIOUSNESS
HM
other than that well done, so deep and emotional I wanted Cry
Love the flashback
11/12/2009 c1 ijusdfsd
cool
cool
11/8/2009 c1 6SpecialK199
*long wistful sigh*
Oh this is just GORGEOUS. The descriptions, the dialogue, the way you've set the scene is just absolutely flawless ...
More? More of anything like this?
6SpecialK199*long wistful sigh*
Oh this is just GORGEOUS. The descriptions, the dialogue, the way you've set the scene is just absolutely flawless ...
More? More of anything like this?
11/6/2009 c1 7Sobriquett
I'm slightly teary at the end of that. I suppose a whole lot is the "mood music" I have playing - I've got a classical artist singing Who Wants to Live Forever? I've kind of left her on loop to read this. When Mr Brightside started a couple of paragraphs into the last flashback, I was like, nonono.
This was beautiful. Mildly heartbreaking, but you've left it open enough for the optimists like me to dream that he does survive and get home to his Bella. Who you don't name until the very, very end, which I was another little detail I liked.
That and Edward's voice. It was old-fashioned, but not to the point of tedium, and that can be a fine line - I believed him. And you had detail - dance cards, the clothes, the history. Which, by the way, I know nothing about. I am absolutely taking the American Civil War module next year, or perhaps I could get a book out of the library. I looked in my first week.
Emmett and the manservant at the end made me smile - if the story had been any less haunting, I probably would have giggled - and Edward's innocennce and naivete was just so endearing.
In short, I loved it.
~ Sobri (:
7SobriquettI'm slightly teary at the end of that. I suppose a whole lot is the "mood music" I have playing - I've got a classical artist singing Who Wants to Live Forever? I've kind of left her on loop to read this. When Mr Brightside started a couple of paragraphs into the last flashback, I was like, nonono.
This was beautiful. Mildly heartbreaking, but you've left it open enough for the optimists like me to dream that he does survive and get home to his Bella. Who you don't name until the very, very end, which I was another little detail I liked.
That and Edward's voice. It was old-fashioned, but not to the point of tedium, and that can be a fine line - I believed him. And you had detail - dance cards, the clothes, the history. Which, by the way, I know nothing about. I am absolutely taking the American Civil War module next year, or perhaps I could get a book out of the library. I looked in my first week.
Emmett and the manservant at the end made me smile - if the story had been any less haunting, I probably would have giggled - and Edward's innocennce and naivete was just so endearing.
In short, I loved it.
~ Sobri (:
10/19/2009 c1 pixiekat7
So sweet, so beautifully tender & loving. Praying that Edward indeed was taken to hospital & recovered...*wipes* away a tear*
So sweet, so beautifully tender & loving. Praying that Edward indeed was taken to hospital & recovered...*wipes* away a tear*
9/16/2009 c1 DropsOfLemon
This is an amazing one shot! I almost cried at the end, so I have to ask: was it actually Bella at the end or a hallucination or just someone on the battlefield calling his name?
This is an amazing one shot! I almost cried at the end, so I have to ask: was it actually Bella at the end or a hallucination or just someone on the battlefield calling his name?
9/16/2009 c1 1youngandmature
At the end when he hears her is she actually there, like physical form- next to the stretcher or in the darkness? And if he heard her why didn't he fight a bit longer? Very well written though. The language is almost perfectly fitting for this timeframe.
1youngandmatureAt the end when he hears her is she actually there, like physical form- next to the stretcher or in the darkness? And if he heard her why didn't he fight a bit longer? Very well written though. The language is almost perfectly fitting for this timeframe.
9/12/2009 c1 TwiTragic13
Brilliant but so sad can u plz tell me if you intended for him to die or not
Brilliant but so sad can u plz tell me if you intended for him to die or not
9/5/2009 c1 letmesign
Hey, Babette! Sorry it took me so long to read this. It was truly beautiful. I love the way you wove the past flashbacks with the present pain. Very unique and different, and it flowed really well. I can't help but feel a sense of sadness at the end, wondering if he lives or if he truly fell into "that" sleep. But the story was so lovely and incredibly well done in the language you used and the feelings of the characters. I really liked it. Thanks for putting it out there!
Hey, Babette! Sorry it took me so long to read this. It was truly beautiful. I love the way you wove the past flashbacks with the present pain. Very unique and different, and it flowed really well. I can't help but feel a sense of sadness at the end, wondering if he lives or if he truly fell into "that" sleep. But the story was so lovely and incredibly well done in the language you used and the feelings of the characters. I really liked it. Thanks for putting it out there!
8/17/2009 c1 rosygloss
So lovely, Ann. I cried and cried while reading it-the best litmus test I know for a good story. Your writing is lovely, and the ending so poignant. So glad you're writing!
So lovely, Ann. I cried and cried while reading it-the best litmus test I know for a good story. Your writing is lovely, and the ending so poignant. So glad you're writing!
8/13/2009 c1 Just Another Phase
OMG! I couldn't help myself and had to read this... now I'm kicking myself, but OMG it was SO good so not really hard, obviously! GAH! I'm so torn and holy HALE we're in for some angst... although a Civil War story should be the first indicator, but whatever! I'm going to hold out for a HEA... I know he's not dead, but who said Edward at the end... was it Bella or was he hallucinating?
I loved that you didn't say their names until the end. The way you went into and outside of his mind while he was laying there was brilliant! You did it seamlessly... you definitely have some writing chops! The flow was perfect. I can hardly contain myself about this story. It still floors me to find stories that are so well done in FF. YAY! This was truly beautiful! It's going to be so hard when they have to part and he goes off to war. I still don't totally understand his need to go to battle, but I'm going to shrug that off as a guy thing that I will never understand... poor Bella... Hopefully it won't be a "Cold Mountain" thing where he finally finds his way home only to die or something equally devastating... It's E and B, and they always have happy endings...right?
Thank you!
OMG! I couldn't help myself and had to read this... now I'm kicking myself, but OMG it was SO good so not really hard, obviously! GAH! I'm so torn and holy HALE we're in for some angst... although a Civil War story should be the first indicator, but whatever! I'm going to hold out for a HEA... I know he's not dead, but who said Edward at the end... was it Bella or was he hallucinating?
I loved that you didn't say their names until the end. The way you went into and outside of his mind while he was laying there was brilliant! You did it seamlessly... you definitely have some writing chops! The flow was perfect. I can hardly contain myself about this story. It still floors me to find stories that are so well done in FF. YAY! This was truly beautiful! It's going to be so hard when they have to part and he goes off to war. I still don't totally understand his need to go to battle, but I'm going to shrug that off as a guy thing that I will never understand... poor Bella... Hopefully it won't be a "Cold Mountain" thing where he finally finds his way home only to die or something equally devastating... It's E and B, and they always have happy endings...right?
Thank you!
7/19/2009 c1 Scorpio11
Beautifully done, but I hope that wasn't truly the end. A continuation would be wonderful.
Beautifully done, but I hope that wasn't truly the end. A continuation would be wonderful.