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14japaneserockergirl
Phew, so glad that it was Flynn! I was starting to get annoyed by Leblanc and his cronies or whatever. As far as constructive criticism goes, the aciton scene was pretty great! The description could use a little embellishing, though, and the chapter seemed to mostly move by dialogue. Although, it did help to flesh out the characters more. Just need to find that balance, I guess.
Keep writing and update soon!
japaneserockergirl
14japaneserockergirlPhew, so glad that it was Flynn! I was starting to get annoyed by Leblanc and his cronies or whatever. As far as constructive criticism goes, the aciton scene was pretty great! The description could use a little embellishing, though, and the chapter seemed to mostly move by dialogue. Although, it did help to flesh out the characters more. Just need to find that balance, I guess.
Keep writing and update soon!
japaneserockergirl
10/9/2012 c10 Guest
Hah! Uh oh! XD
This is awesome!
Keep up the great work! :D
Hah! Uh oh! XD
This is awesome!
Keep up the great work! :D
10/1/2012 c9 Kyu-Momo
Uh oh... an "OH SHEEZles" moment! and OOHH what an evil cliff hanger!
Anyway, this is great! Thanks for updating! :D
Uh oh... an "OH SHEEZles" moment! and OOHH what an evil cliff hanger!
Anyway, this is great! Thanks for updating! :D
10/1/2012 c9 Tales of Brothers
Great storyline so far!
But say, are you gonna follow the main plot from the game? Just wondering...
But please, don't tell me you'll pair Yuri with Estelle there...I despise that girl, even though I must admit your version's better than the original.
Great storyline so far!
But say, are you gonna follow the main plot from the game? Just wondering...
But please, don't tell me you'll pair Yuri with Estelle there...I despise that girl, even though I must admit your version's better than the original.
9/3/2012 c8 6Felling
Run Karol run ! o: I can't wait for the next chapter ahah ! Tension ! xD Just wondering, how many chapters do you estimate ? (:
6FellingRun Karol run ! o: I can't wait for the next chapter ahah ! Tension ! xD Just wondering, how many chapters do you estimate ? (:
9/3/2012 c8 7orangepotato
I was happy to see another update for this story!
I enjoyed reading Estelle's point of view with everything. Still looking for Flynn and all, but of course, they have to wait until nightfall. Of course, things are going to get interesting next chapter for sure considering what's going on. They probably won't find Flynn, but they'll certainly find trouble!
And Karol's POV was a nice change. You did a very good job with him. I thought he was very in character. Poor kid, getting kicked out. I can't wait to see how he reacts with Estelle and Yuri when they meet up, but right now he's facing his own problems. Namely: Leblanc.
I think Karol has it right. Oh. No.
Great job with the chapter! I can't wait to see what's going to happen next!
And I'm glad your life is settling down. Hope University is going well for you and that it continues to be easy!
Update again soon!
Orangepotato
7orangepotatoI was happy to see another update for this story!
I enjoyed reading Estelle's point of view with everything. Still looking for Flynn and all, but of course, they have to wait until nightfall. Of course, things are going to get interesting next chapter for sure considering what's going on. They probably won't find Flynn, but they'll certainly find trouble!
And Karol's POV was a nice change. You did a very good job with him. I thought he was very in character. Poor kid, getting kicked out. I can't wait to see how he reacts with Estelle and Yuri when they meet up, but right now he's facing his own problems. Namely: Leblanc.
I think Karol has it right. Oh. No.
Great job with the chapter! I can't wait to see what's going to happen next!
And I'm glad your life is settling down. Hope University is going well for you and that it continues to be easy!
Update again soon!
Orangepotato
9/3/2012 c8 14japaneserockergirl
I was very surprised to find that I had alerted this fic, and yet hadn't reviewed it! That's really not like me...
Anyway, this is an awesome story so far, and picturing Yuri in a fedora is pretty nice. XD I'm glad that this wasn't a dead fic, since it has so much potential. As far as constructive criticism goes, I feel that you should be more descriptive in the setting department. Other than that, this was an awesome read.
Keep writing and update soon!
japaneserockergirl
14japaneserockergirlI was very surprised to find that I had alerted this fic, and yet hadn't reviewed it! That's really not like me...
Anyway, this is an awesome story so far, and picturing Yuri in a fedora is pretty nice. XD I'm glad that this wasn't a dead fic, since it has so much potential. As far as constructive criticism goes, I feel that you should be more descriptive in the setting department. Other than that, this was an awesome read.
Keep writing and update soon!
japaneserockergirl
8/19/2012 c7 6Felling
Oh man, this is super duper amazing awesome. Like I expected completely different, but it's GENIUS. Like every part perfectly connects with it's video game part in a not so obvious way. I just love it, is what I'm trying to say. xD I can't wait for the next update ! :D
6FellingOh man, this is super duper amazing awesome. Like I expected completely different, but it's GENIUS. Like every part perfectly connects with it's video game part in a not so obvious way. I just love it, is what I'm trying to say. xD I can't wait for the next update ! :D
5/31/2012 c7 8Penguin Pop
This is amazing! One of the best ToV fanfics I've read in a very long time. I love the premise, and how you masterfully craft the story to integrate the game and characters into the time period. I can't wait for more, keep up the fantastic work! :)
8Penguin PopThis is amazing! One of the best ToV fanfics I've read in a very long time. I love the premise, and how you masterfully craft the story to integrate the game and characters into the time period. I can't wait for more, keep up the fantastic work! :)
4/30/2012 c7 7orangepotato
Holy cow! I was extremely pleased when I saw that this had updated! It really has been awhile, but life can do that to you. I'm just happy you came back to it, and I'd certainly love to read more if time permits. I love this story. It's so original and you do a wonderful job with the characters!
As for this chapter, I enjoyed it, even though it was short. There's nothing wrong with short chapters, that's for sure. I liked Yuri's meeting with Kaufman. Mixing up with gangs, huh? That'll come back to haunt him, that's for sure. :) And Estelle jumping across the roof, following Yuri's footsteps. A great way to end the chapter.
I'm looking forward to seeing what else you have planned.
Update as soon as possible and welcome back to this story! I'm very happy that you updated it!
Orangepotato
7orangepotatoHoly cow! I was extremely pleased when I saw that this had updated! It really has been awhile, but life can do that to you. I'm just happy you came back to it, and I'd certainly love to read more if time permits. I love this story. It's so original and you do a wonderful job with the characters!
As for this chapter, I enjoyed it, even though it was short. There's nothing wrong with short chapters, that's for sure. I liked Yuri's meeting with Kaufman. Mixing up with gangs, huh? That'll come back to haunt him, that's for sure. :) And Estelle jumping across the roof, following Yuri's footsteps. A great way to end the chapter.
I'm looking forward to seeing what else you have planned.
Update as soon as possible and welcome back to this story! I'm very happy that you updated it!
Orangepotato
4/28/2012 c7 1SomtinERanother
Oh my goooosh! You don't know how excited I was to see this update! :3 Great job too! I loved all of it! (Particularly the roof scene :D) Update again soon!
1SomtinERanotherOh my goooosh! You don't know how excited I was to see this update! :3 Great job too! I loved all of it! (Particularly the roof scene :D) Update again soon!
8/11/2011 c6 SomtinERanother
Wow... This story is just... Amazing! The plot has captured my attention greatly. I've actually been coming to like the 1930s recently and when I found this story I was just overjoyed.
I'm actually kinda sad to see you haven't updated since 2009... Is it on hiatus? Well... Whatever it's on I hope you'll continue because I see an amazing story with potential.
Wow... This story is just... Amazing! The plot has captured my attention greatly. I've actually been coming to like the 1930s recently and when I found this story I was just overjoyed.
I'm actually kinda sad to see you haven't updated since 2009... Is it on hiatus? Well... Whatever it's on I hope you'll continue because I see an amazing story with potential.