for Ordo5/14 c13 Zeowolf 472
Bring Krystal back stop killing her fox suffered long enough in those fucked up endings. Stop!
Bring Krystal back stop killing her fox suffered long enough in those fucked up endings. Stop!
4/17/2012 c15 LIGHTNINGDUDE
dude...you killed me with emotions at the end of this story...this is the best tragedy i've ever read of starfox...but could you probably mak a new story where krystal comes back somehow please man please it would make everything so muh better man
dude...you killed me with emotions at the end of this story...this is the best tragedy i've ever read of starfox...but could you probably mak a new story where krystal comes back somehow please man please it would make everything so muh better man
6/21/2011 c15 
1Sylux vixen
This is awesome! Only I didn't like the part when Krys died that made me cry. Any way I loved the story and can't wait for more.
1Sylux vixenThis is awesome! Only I didn't like the part when Krys died that made me cry. Any way I loved the story and can't wait for more.
5/10/2011 c1 Sylux vixen
Ok god damn it why did Krystal have to die why can't she come back in some dramatic way because all I see is a remake of starship troopers the part of Krystal dieing that is but why man I was cryin and not alot of writings make me do that
Ok god damn it why did Krystal have to die why can't she come back in some dramatic way because all I see is a remake of starship troopers the part of Krystal dieing that is but why man I was cryin and not alot of writings make me do that
12/15/2009 c15 10chaos Leader
You got your family into it? I've never really told my folks about this hobby... anyway, review time.
The whole inner-demon thing isn't really a new idea. Everyone's done something about it, or dabbled in it. Even I've touched on it a little in SF: Legacy (that's a few chapters down the road for now).
There were a variety of different ways you could have taken Fox loosing his mind:
-Just a voice
-A voice that presents illusions, tricking the protagonist into doing something
-A voice that takes over motor control
I think you progressed with it, getting steadily worse.
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Criticisms:
First off, I'm a little disappointed that almost every single review you have so far is a yes-man style one-liner.
Again, the context you gave us was almost nonexistent. Again, you relied very very heavily on assumptions that the reader knows all about the characters because they've been used before; both in the games and in fan-fiction.
You really don't know how intense psychotherapy works, do you?
I won't rip you detail for detail, but I highly encourage you and anyone else reading this review to do some research into whatever subject you include in your writing. If the readers can trust and believe you on the technical details of your story elements, they're more likely to trust you on the deeper, more complex issues you dig up in the story.
That's what I got,
chaos_Leader
10chaos LeaderYou got your family into it? I've never really told my folks about this hobby... anyway, review time.
The whole inner-demon thing isn't really a new idea. Everyone's done something about it, or dabbled in it. Even I've touched on it a little in SF: Legacy (that's a few chapters down the road for now).
There were a variety of different ways you could have taken Fox loosing his mind:
-Just a voice
-A voice that presents illusions, tricking the protagonist into doing something
-A voice that takes over motor control
I think you progressed with it, getting steadily worse.
-
Criticisms:
First off, I'm a little disappointed that almost every single review you have so far is a yes-man style one-liner.
Again, the context you gave us was almost nonexistent. Again, you relied very very heavily on assumptions that the reader knows all about the characters because they've been used before; both in the games and in fan-fiction.
You really don't know how intense psychotherapy works, do you?
I won't rip you detail for detail, but I highly encourage you and anyone else reading this review to do some research into whatever subject you include in your writing. If the readers can trust and believe you on the technical details of your story elements, they're more likely to trust you on the deeper, more complex issues you dig up in the story.
That's what I got,
chaos_Leader
9/11/2009 c15 6SPEAKERNiGHT
BRAVO! (LOL I got to the last chapter XD) You were right, this story is your crowning achievement. It's like your freaking pinnacle of awesomeness that is psycological dramas. Keep up the awesome work!
6SPEAKERNiGHTBRAVO! (LOL I got to the last chapter XD) You were right, this story is your crowning achievement. It's like your freaking pinnacle of awesomeness that is psycological dramas. Keep up the awesome work!
9/11/2009 c2 SPEAKERNiGHT
This is one really freaky chapter, from a good moment of lust to a freaking rape and nightmare followed by a freaky ass vision. GOD I love psycho dramas.
This is one really freaky chapter, from a good moment of lust to a freaking rape and nightmare followed by a freaky ass vision. GOD I love psycho dramas.
8/20/2009 c15 7Reona Fox
*cryingn'clapping*(literally) that was a damn great trilogy. i loved all of it! ever since i read wolf o'donnell: unforgiven to the first chapter of fox mccloud: ordo, i just knew that it was going to have a great ending. i greatly look forward to your future fanfics! please if you know whats best for you, you will continue to write the way you do! once again that was a great damn trilogy!
7Reona Fox*cryingn'clapping*(literally) that was a damn great trilogy. i loved all of it! ever since i read wolf o'donnell: unforgiven to the first chapter of fox mccloud: ordo, i just knew that it was going to have a great ending. i greatly look forward to your future fanfics! please if you know whats best for you, you will continue to write the way you do! once again that was a great damn trilogy!
8/19/2009 c15 Stardust Dragon
Happy ending. It was so cool. I loved reading your story it rocked. :)
~Stardust
Happy ending. It was so cool. I loved reading your story it rocked. :)
~Stardust
8/18/2009 c15 5TheBlackFox666
This is *Sniffle* Beta Reader Black Fox.
OMK...i don't know what to say...I almost cried lets leave it at that...Loved the story!
5TheBlackFox666This is *Sniffle* Beta Reader Black Fox.
OMK...i don't know what to say...I almost cried lets leave it at that...Loved the story!
8/18/2009 c15 KeepingtheBlade
Awesome ending! It's happy, yet there's this bitter sweetness from Krystal's death. I really loved this one, and it is definitely the best you've written so far :D
Awesome ending! It's happy, yet there's this bitter sweetness from Krystal's death. I really loved this one, and it is definitely the best you've written so far :D
8/18/2009 c14 KeepingtheBlade
Wow, excellent and epic! I really felt the emotion here, more so than any other chapter. It truly was the climax, and it was absolutely fantastic!
Wow, excellent and epic! I really felt the emotion here, more so than any other chapter. It truly was the climax, and it was absolutely fantastic!