for Ancient Enemy: A Digimon Fan Novel3/3 c24 Rob
Great Chapter as always. I had really hoped that somehow Angel could be reconfigured. I guess wishful thinking :(. Delgado has to be one of the strongest God-like beings I ever read about. Is there really even a way to defeat he's just so strong.
Great Chapter as always. I had really hoped that somehow Angel could be reconfigured. I guess wishful thinking :(. Delgado has to be one of the strongest God-like beings I ever read about. Is there really even a way to defeat he's just so strong.
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4HeartlessNeoshadow
I got a kick out of Jin at the end there, and at the comments that Scarmon was making. It was especially beautiful to hear Angel refer to them as 'twins,' lol, even though one is humorous while the other is edgy. They still have enough in common. However, it does seem to me like the whole Crocmon scenario just came out of nowhere (unless there was something I forgot, or it's a reference to one of your other stories).
But besides that, I'm liking Delgado as an enemy a bit as well. It's always interesting when you have a villain who looks weak compared to everything else, yet they are also powerful unlike anything else the characters have currently encountered. It adds many layers of mystique to them that I always find appealing, and I'm sure he's also the type that will play mindgames with the Digidestined a lot hehe.
Oh, and I also like how you brought in the DNA Digivolutions! It makes sense since I'm sure this isn't too far from 02, but to see it incorporated brings in nostalgia! Even better that you gave it Scarmon's sense of humor, lol.
See you soon!
4HeartlessNeoshadowI got a kick out of Jin at the end there, and at the comments that Scarmon was making. It was especially beautiful to hear Angel refer to them as 'twins,' lol, even though one is humorous while the other is edgy. They still have enough in common. However, it does seem to me like the whole Crocmon scenario just came out of nowhere (unless there was something I forgot, or it's a reference to one of your other stories).
But besides that, I'm liking Delgado as an enemy a bit as well. It's always interesting when you have a villain who looks weak compared to everything else, yet they are also powerful unlike anything else the characters have currently encountered. It adds many layers of mystique to them that I always find appealing, and I'm sure he's also the type that will play mindgames with the Digidestined a lot hehe.
Oh, and I also like how you brought in the DNA Digivolutions! It makes sense since I'm sure this isn't too far from 02, but to see it incorporated brings in nostalgia! Even better that you gave it Scarmon's sense of humor, lol.
See you soon!
1/11 c7 HeartlessNeoshadow
Another instance where I say I wasn't planning on reviewing, but now I am. Yeah, you've got that way of bending my mind around, haha.
Anyway, you've got an interesting new Digidestined here of a different ethnicity. I'm looking forward to the variety he'll bring. On top of that, now that you're heading into a different arc (well, at the time you wrote this, you were), I'm looking forward to the 'spice' that'll be added. Oh, and I knew Delgado was not some regular guy, haha.
Anyway, cheers to what you're accomplishing with this! I'm not sure when I'll review again, but look out for me!
Another instance where I say I wasn't planning on reviewing, but now I am. Yeah, you've got that way of bending my mind around, haha.
Anyway, you've got an interesting new Digidestined here of a different ethnicity. I'm looking forward to the variety he'll bring. On top of that, now that you're heading into a different arc (well, at the time you wrote this, you were), I'm looking forward to the 'spice' that'll be added. Oh, and I knew Delgado was not some regular guy, haha.
Anyway, cheers to what you're accomplishing with this! I'm not sure when I'll review again, but look out for me!
12/26/2012 c6 HeartlessNeoshadow
Hi there again! Very entertaining chapter here with the two fights. It was especially cool to see the humans get their own brawl while the Digimon also got one (and treated their foe so nonchanlantly, LOL). You handled the fights pretty well, although there were a couple things about the latter that I thought could make it better: add more to the introduction of Vilemon and the conclusion of the fight. His appearance seemed more like a "I am randomly here" rather than a setup for something epic. However, like I said, the fight was still good. And the ending (as well as the ending of this chapter) just seemed a bit sudden. Again, none of this is anything big, so I wouldn't concern myself much about it.
And Delgado... The part of me that has already watched many anime shows and read many fanfictions is making what-it-hopes-to-be accurate guesses about why he REALLY likes to stay under the light, but I will not say anymore, lol. In the meantime, happy holidays!
Hi there again! Very entertaining chapter here with the two fights. It was especially cool to see the humans get their own brawl while the Digimon also got one (and treated their foe so nonchanlantly, LOL). You handled the fights pretty well, although there were a couple things about the latter that I thought could make it better: add more to the introduction of Vilemon and the conclusion of the fight. His appearance seemed more like a "I am randomly here" rather than a setup for something epic. However, like I said, the fight was still good. And the ending (as well as the ending of this chapter) just seemed a bit sudden. Again, none of this is anything big, so I wouldn't concern myself much about it.
And Delgado... The part of me that has already watched many anime shows and read many fanfictions is making what-it-hopes-to-be accurate guesses about why he REALLY likes to stay under the light, but I will not say anymore, lol. In the meantime, happy holidays!
12/22/2012 c4 MiharuOftheWhiteSea
Really didn't expect Amanda to behave this way... Otherwise, AWESOME!
Really didn't expect Amanda to behave this way... Otherwise, AWESOME!
12/17/2012 c5 HeartlessNeoshadow
I wasn't planning on leaving a review for this chapter since my comments would have been the same, but Scarmon's final comment about Grand Theft Auto made me have to do it. I'm lovin' that little guy.
Anyway, I'll be back again soon!
I wasn't planning on leaving a review for this chapter since my comments would have been the same, but Scarmon's final comment about Grand Theft Auto made me have to do it. I'm lovin' that little guy.
Anyway, I'll be back again soon!
12/15/2012 c4 HeartlessNeoshadow
Mexico... I'm liking the international theme here!
And hooray for Jin getting his legs back! Also, Amanda... a bit pervy, much? Lol, I had to point that much out. And at this point, I'll have to say that Scarmon is the one that's becoming my favorite character so far. He seems to be the one with all the jokes, so I look forward to more of him.
Again, see you in a chapter or two!
Mexico... I'm liking the international theme here!
And hooray for Jin getting his legs back! Also, Amanda... a bit pervy, much? Lol, I had to point that much out. And at this point, I'll have to say that Scarmon is the one that's becoming my favorite character so far. He seems to be the one with all the jokes, so I look forward to more of him.
Again, see you in a chapter or two!
12/13/2012 c3 HeartlessNeoshadow
Again, another chapter that I really loved! I especially liked how Jin was when it came to describing how he got the Cadillac and brought it over to Michael and Mimi. That part actually had me laughing out loud! There was also the comments Scarmon would make about Jin's 'luck with the ladies'. Oh man...
Again, though, it does seem like some of the parts that have some action to them could use a bit more description, but I'm not sure if this is a fair critique at this point since I'm sure this chapter was written many, many years ago. Still, though, I will get back to this again soon. Amanda is looking to be a very interesting character in this love square/triangle/whatever-you-wanna-call-it you got going. Great job!
Again, another chapter that I really loved! I especially liked how Jin was when it came to describing how he got the Cadillac and brought it over to Michael and Mimi. That part actually had me laughing out loud! There was also the comments Scarmon would make about Jin's 'luck with the ladies'. Oh man...
Again, though, it does seem like some of the parts that have some action to them could use a bit more description, but I'm not sure if this is a fair critique at this point since I'm sure this chapter was written many, many years ago. Still, though, I will get back to this again soon. Amanda is looking to be a very interesting character in this love square/triangle/whatever-you-wanna-call-it you got going. Great job!
12/13/2012 c2 HeartlessNeoshadow
Another great chapter! Now that I think about it, your villain (at this point) is reminding me a lot of a villain from one of the movies. I can't recall what his name was though...
Anyway, some more details describing the destruction of the prison would have been nice, but what you still have is great. Interesting that you brought back Vademon, one of the characters that I'm sure most people completely forgot about (I know I did until I read this chapter, lol).
Anyway, let's see if I can make it to the next chapter real soon. Keep it up!
Another great chapter! Now that I think about it, your villain (at this point) is reminding me a lot of a villain from one of the movies. I can't recall what his name was though...
Anyway, some more details describing the destruction of the prison would have been nice, but what you still have is great. Interesting that you brought back Vademon, one of the characters that I'm sure most people completely forgot about (I know I did until I read this chapter, lol).
Anyway, let's see if I can make it to the next chapter real soon. Keep it up!
12/11/2012 c1 HeartlessNeoshadow
God... I have only just started reading this, but this is beautiful! Everything is just perfect (although I felt you could have described in more detail what happened to Abner's body). Jin is a very alluring character (it's very new to hear about a Digidestined who is a convicted criminal), his Digimon is entertaining, Mimi is in-character, and the love triangle is pretty funny. Plus, you've got that 'New York' feel down! I'm loving it! It all feels realistic, too, so you can expect another review from me soon!
Wow... I'm sorry, but I'm just amazed at how immersive this is. Seriously, though, as I try to catch up, do keep up the great work!
God... I have only just started reading this, but this is beautiful! Everything is just perfect (although I felt you could have described in more detail what happened to Abner's body). Jin is a very alluring character (it's very new to hear about a Digidestined who is a convicted criminal), his Digimon is entertaining, Mimi is in-character, and the love triangle is pretty funny. Plus, you've got that 'New York' feel down! I'm loving it! It all feels realistic, too, so you can expect another review from me soon!
Wow... I'm sorry, but I'm just amazed at how immersive this is. Seriously, though, as I try to catch up, do keep up the great work!
11/30/2012 c23 Roby
Yes! Angel rejoins the story. When you begun this story I never really thought you would incorporate the Original digi destined. So how the Doomsday Festival Arc plays out will be interesting.
Yes! Angel rejoins the story. When you begun this story I never really thought you would incorporate the Original digi destined. So how the Doomsday Festival Arc plays out will be interesting.
11/24/2012 c22 Roby
Wow great to have you back. I find myself sad and hoping Angel and Muchomon somehow make it back. I guess I've read this story from the beginning so I have a lot invested emotionally. I'm glad Michael knows the truth about Delgaldo but he's just so powerful I find myself wondering can they even really defeat him. He's more powerful than any villain on the show including the D-Reaper could have ever hoped to be. This was a great chapter. I loved that the rest of the original DD's have entered the story. I'm hoping Jin returns to normal soon. Poor kid can't catch a break.
Wow great to have you back. I find myself sad and hoping Angel and Muchomon somehow make it back. I guess I've read this story from the beginning so I have a lot invested emotionally. I'm glad Michael knows the truth about Delgaldo but he's just so powerful I find myself wondering can they even really defeat him. He's more powerful than any villain on the show including the D-Reaper could have ever hoped to be. This was a great chapter. I loved that the rest of the original DD's have entered the story. I'm hoping Jin returns to normal soon. Poor kid can't catch a break.
10/29/2012 c21 9RogueTamer2k7
Finally, I'm done reading this. I have to say, this is probably one of the best fics I've read in a long while. You've done a good job fleshing out your characters and using a monster of the chapter arc (the eight gods arc) to develop them. For instance, you fleshed out Michael pretty well and, heck, even Mimi, one of the originals got some good development. Then there's Jin, who went from being a loose canon to being someone that you can root for (at least until the Ancient Enemy hijacks him).
Also, despite being ten years old, this story has aged quite well. True, there are a couple of things, like the Ancient Enemy being a sort of fifth sovereign, which was, I assume, written before Huanglongmon was introduced. Also, the WTC attack in 'Unintended' was quite crazy, but I'll let those things slid. Everything else seems pretty current.
I definitely look forward to your next update. You killed off a character, which was unexpected, and I look forward to seeing how everything turns out during the Doomsday Festival Arc. Somehow, I can see Jin purifying his crest, eventually (which, I remember reading allusions to earlier in the story). Also, I'm curious to see where Amanda's development goes since she was the one most affected by the above death. And then I'm curious about seeing everyone reach Mega. Good luck on the rest of your story (btw, I could read the parts in Spanish without translation. Some of your earlier dialogue in the language was slightly off, but I think you've gotten better).
9RogueTamer2k7Finally, I'm done reading this. I have to say, this is probably one of the best fics I've read in a long while. You've done a good job fleshing out your characters and using a monster of the chapter arc (the eight gods arc) to develop them. For instance, you fleshed out Michael pretty well and, heck, even Mimi, one of the originals got some good development. Then there's Jin, who went from being a loose canon to being someone that you can root for (at least until the Ancient Enemy hijacks him).
Also, despite being ten years old, this story has aged quite well. True, there are a couple of things, like the Ancient Enemy being a sort of fifth sovereign, which was, I assume, written before Huanglongmon was introduced. Also, the WTC attack in 'Unintended' was quite crazy, but I'll let those things slid. Everything else seems pretty current.
I definitely look forward to your next update. You killed off a character, which was unexpected, and I look forward to seeing how everything turns out during the Doomsday Festival Arc. Somehow, I can see Jin purifying his crest, eventually (which, I remember reading allusions to earlier in the story). Also, I'm curious to see where Amanda's development goes since she was the one most affected by the above death. And then I'm curious about seeing everyone reach Mega. Good luck on the rest of your story (btw, I could read the parts in Spanish without translation. Some of your earlier dialogue in the language was slightly off, but I think you've gotten better).
8/26/2012 c20 Roby
Thanks for the fast update, everything is out of order you're a great writer I really feel sad about Angel and Muchomon and the Dark One is very scary lol please update soon
Thanks for the fast update, everything is out of order you're a great writer I really feel sad about Angel and Muchomon and the Dark One is very scary lol please update soon