for By The Light Of The Silvery Moon2/1 c1 fukuyama
Well, have you? Fallen in love with the AU and written the Claire and the Ando parts of this bit? Because that might be fun.
Actually the only thing in your story that I didn't think was very good, was the ending. The reader is so sucked into the story with the fight going on and everything and then - suddenly - two paragraphs and that's it. You don't even have the time to ask yourself what's going on before it's over.
Although we all know that all good things come to an end, I really think, that this end was quite a bit too sudden for the rest of the fanfic. A little bit like you wanted to end it NOW, damnit!
Other than that really cute and halfway realistic, meaning I can somehow see this happening. Very in character, at least on Peter's part. With Sylar I won't be the judge.
Awesome and great work.
Well, have you? Fallen in love with the AU and written the Claire and the Ando parts of this bit? Because that might be fun.
Actually the only thing in your story that I didn't think was very good, was the ending. The reader is so sucked into the story with the fight going on and everything and then - suddenly - two paragraphs and that's it. You don't even have the time to ask yourself what's going on before it's over.
Although we all know that all good things come to an end, I really think, that this end was quite a bit too sudden for the rest of the fanfic. A little bit like you wanted to end it NOW, damnit!
Other than that really cute and halfway realistic, meaning I can somehow see this happening. Very in character, at least on Peter's part. With Sylar I won't be the judge.
Awesome and great work.
7/15/2010 c1 
86Gamebird
Aghh! This is great! It's constantly laced with crack and humor, yet still manages to hang together, make sense and develop emotionally. I love it!
Wow, great!
Though I do have to wonder who the hooded guy was, what Claire said that Sylar didn't pay attention to that offended Peter so badly, and when exactly this happened in canon (like, is Nathan dead? Does Sylar have his memories? Or is Nathan still out there somewhere? Did The Wall happen? when did you set this story?)
I need to read more of your stuff. But I'm supposed to be working, which was really hard with a stupid grin plastered over my face from reading your work. Thanks for writing and doing such a good job of it. Your stuff is always so funny! And this was sweet. I liked how you did a believable shift in sexual orientation, at least in regards to one another (not that I think either of them will ever be the slightest bit interested in anyone else, ever again, which is something you expressed really well too).
I also wonder what the hell happened to Peter's job, but that's just me.
(Mohinder's memoirs were a good touch too. Very funny.)
86GamebirdAghh! This is great! It's constantly laced with crack and humor, yet still manages to hang together, make sense and develop emotionally. I love it!
Wow, great!
Though I do have to wonder who the hooded guy was, what Claire said that Sylar didn't pay attention to that offended Peter so badly, and when exactly this happened in canon (like, is Nathan dead? Does Sylar have his memories? Or is Nathan still out there somewhere? Did The Wall happen? when did you set this story?)
I need to read more of your stuff. But I'm supposed to be working, which was really hard with a stupid grin plastered over my face from reading your work. Thanks for writing and doing such a good job of it. Your stuff is always so funny! And this was sweet. I liked how you did a believable shift in sexual orientation, at least in regards to one another (not that I think either of them will ever be the slightest bit interested in anyone else, ever again, which is something you expressed really well too).
I also wonder what the hell happened to Peter's job, but that's just me.
(Mohinder's memoirs were a good touch too. Very funny.)
1/11/2010 c1 Dragontrybe
WOW! Love this story. It's very well written, has a great plot and it's a wonderful tale of passion. Thank you.
No complaints or critiques here. This story is great.
WOW! Love this story. It's very well written, has a great plot and it's a wonderful tale of passion. Thank you.
No complaints or critiques here. This story is great.
1/11/2010 c1 4queenoftheoutlands
This was v. v. good.
Has someone been watching "The End of Time", because it sure sounds like you have. Mr hooded man didn't help :)
Werewolf!Sylar is... great. Maybe its because i justy watched Beauty and the Beast with my sister...
4queenoftheoutlandsThis was v. v. good.
Has someone been watching "The End of Time", because it sure sounds like you have. Mr hooded man didn't help :)
Werewolf!Sylar is... great. Maybe its because i justy watched Beauty and the Beast with my sister...
1/11/2010 c1 17HereItGoesAgain
Aww, this was a great fic:) I like the whole werewolf/vampire thing. Oddly, it reminded me of SupernaturalXD Dunno why.. anyway, I loved it:) I hope you write more Pylar soon:D
17HereItGoesAgainAww, this was a great fic:) I like the whole werewolf/vampire thing. Oddly, it reminded me of SupernaturalXD Dunno why.. anyway, I loved it:) I hope you write more Pylar soon:D
1/11/2010 c1 36Boisterous Hal
The word that popped into my head while I was reading this fic, and after I finished it, was "guh". Since that singular word would not have been very helpful as a review, fear not, I shall expand on that word. :-p
What an incredible story. After reading that this fic would involve werewolves, I immediately thought that this might be similar to Del Rion's equally-as-brilliant Heroes fic called "No Such Thing", which featured a werewolf-like creature. Much to my pleasant surprise, the two fics have distinct atmospheres.
I really loved everything in this. The plot, the characterisation, the suspense, the romance, the humour (e.g. Nathan's supposed S&M activities and Peter learning about werewolves by watching Buffy), everything was perfect. Like a great book, I could not put this fic down, so to speak.
I'm so happy for you that you finished one of your ideas, that that the fantastic Underworld films inspired it. Dare I say it, this fic could be your best effort so far (though to make it clear, all of your fics are of the highest quality).
36Boisterous HalThe word that popped into my head while I was reading this fic, and after I finished it, was "guh". Since that singular word would not have been very helpful as a review, fear not, I shall expand on that word. :-p
What an incredible story. After reading that this fic would involve werewolves, I immediately thought that this might be similar to Del Rion's equally-as-brilliant Heroes fic called "No Such Thing", which featured a werewolf-like creature. Much to my pleasant surprise, the two fics have distinct atmospheres.
I really loved everything in this. The plot, the characterisation, the suspense, the romance, the humour (e.g. Nathan's supposed S&M activities and Peter learning about werewolves by watching Buffy), everything was perfect. Like a great book, I could not put this fic down, so to speak.
I'm so happy for you that you finished one of your ideas, that that the fantastic Underworld films inspired it. Dare I say it, this fic could be your best effort so far (though to make it clear, all of your fics are of the highest quality).