for ANBU9/18/2012 c5 Guest
you are amazing! i love this story...
you are amazing! i love this story...
5/7/2012 c18 Love the story
I had BIG problem to focus om my school studies today because of this story, it is way too good, thankfully im done reading it now ;P
I had BIG problem to focus om my school studies today because of this story, it is way too good, thankfully im done reading it now ;P
4/13/2012 c18 
2Missy-Skylar
Captivating story! I love the whole 'Political fights are fought with words' thing that Sakura does. I thought killing Madara was a bit easy though, I mean he controls the kyuubi and the leader of the Akatsuki (I don't know whether you knew that when you were writing or not so this isn't such a big issue). But during the whole fight I was like "Itachi's gonna die OMGFJKDGHKJ" because you made Madara sound so strong.
This is a fanfiction where Sakura is some powerful character that's on par with Sasuke/ Naruto, and that's why I was addicted to it, I hate fanfictions where she's a weak damsel in distress.
2Missy-SkylarCaptivating story! I love the whole 'Political fights are fought with words' thing that Sakura does. I thought killing Madara was a bit easy though, I mean he controls the kyuubi and the leader of the Akatsuki (I don't know whether you knew that when you were writing or not so this isn't such a big issue). But during the whole fight I was like "Itachi's gonna die OMGFJKDGHKJ" because you made Madara sound so strong.
This is a fanfiction where Sakura is some powerful character that's on par with Sasuke/ Naruto, and that's why I was addicted to it, I hate fanfictions where she's a weak damsel in distress.
7/22/2011 c18 5Yuuki-Hime 2097
this story is awesome! i could so see a oneshot sequel with itachi being tortured by his children ovr sakuras attention ^^ like he did with his father n mother lol their children could so kick **
5Yuuki-Hime 2097this story is awesome! i could so see a oneshot sequel with itachi being tortured by his children ovr sakuras attention ^^ like he did with his father n mother lol their children could so kick **
7/17/2011 c1 2Mari Iaceo
Very interesting story so far. I really like the different character you fleshed out for Sakura.
The only thing the really bothers me is the need for sentence variation. At least in Sakura's case, since her parts were the really noticeable ones. The word "she" begins so many times in the first few paragraphs, and in some areas later on in the chapter, that it just really annoyed me.
I wouldn't worry about it too much as your sentences are rather lengthy (and in at least one instance, a run-on), but I think the story would flow better if you varied the beginnings of the sentences starting with "She" a bit more. Perhaps replace a few with "Sakura" since you give her name already in the second paragraph. Or just rearrange the sentences a bit, and use commas. (You need a few more of those in a few instances as well.)
While you do not need to actually use my suggestions, as I know how much work editing a story can be after being finished with it for over a year, it's something to keep in mind.
That said, the story certainly does sound interesting so far and I hope to enjoy the rest of it.
2Mari IaceoVery interesting story so far. I really like the different character you fleshed out for Sakura.
The only thing the really bothers me is the need for sentence variation. At least in Sakura's case, since her parts were the really noticeable ones. The word "she" begins so many times in the first few paragraphs, and in some areas later on in the chapter, that it just really annoyed me.
I wouldn't worry about it too much as your sentences are rather lengthy (and in at least one instance, a run-on), but I think the story would flow better if you varied the beginnings of the sentences starting with "She" a bit more. Perhaps replace a few with "Sakura" since you give her name already in the second paragraph. Or just rearrange the sentences a bit, and use commas. (You need a few more of those in a few instances as well.)
While you do not need to actually use my suggestions, as I know how much work editing a story can be after being finished with it for over a year, it's something to keep in mind.
That said, the story certainly does sound interesting so far and I hope to enjoy the rest of it.
3/18/2011 c18 4craizypet
absolutely loved it! great job, heaps of thinking in it there, and i loved the different personalities! do you think you could tell me more about them? i am fascinated! how on earth did you come up with all of the ANBU nine? it would have been so much thinking put into them... great story, really interesting and intriguing! great plot too!
4craizypetabsolutely loved it! great job, heaps of thinking in it there, and i loved the different personalities! do you think you could tell me more about them? i am fascinated! how on earth did you come up with all of the ANBU nine? it would have been so much thinking put into them... great story, really interesting and intriguing! great plot too!
12/13/2010 c18 3xStarryyAngellx
omigosh. really really good story. couldn't/didn't want to tear my eyes off the screen even to go to the bathroom! brilliant really~~ :))
3xStarryyAngellxomigosh. really really good story. couldn't/didn't want to tear my eyes off the screen even to go to the bathroom! brilliant really~~ :))
10/9/2010 c18 Death's Kitty
I don't usually review the stories I read but yours intrest me to no end. The court dynamics that you portrayed were amazing. The way sakura had differnt personallities was genius in it's self. I love your work. For someone who has read hundreds of fanfiction, you have made my top 10. Thank you for writing and gracing us with you gift.
Ever faithful,
Death's Kitty
I don't usually review the stories I read but yours intrest me to no end. The court dynamics that you portrayed were amazing. The way sakura had differnt personallities was genius in it's self. I love your work. For someone who has read hundreds of fanfiction, you have made my top 10. Thank you for writing and gracing us with you gift.
Ever faithful,
Death's Kitty
4/8/2010 c18 Guest
Good reading^^
However, the epilogue felt too...abrupt.
Perhaps you could have expounded it some more, explaining several events that followed up after Sakura's mission but before the wedding itself.
Nonetheless, this was an entertaining story.^^
Good reading^^
However, the epilogue felt too...abrupt.
Perhaps you could have expounded it some more, explaining several events that followed up after Sakura's mission but before the wedding itself.
Nonetheless, this was an entertaining story.^^