for Vengeance Will Be Mine2/26/2010 c7 YamiKITG
Too lazy to log in right now. but ,.,"NO" another cliffy? hehe how could you. But its going well. i enjoyed this chaper very much :)
Too lazy to log in right now. but ,.,"NO" another cliffy? hehe how could you. But its going well. i enjoyed this chaper very much :)
2/22/2010 c6 
51OrlithNightfire
Oh i am loving this story, please update soon. i am dying on the cliffy
51OrlithNightfireOh i am loving this story, please update soon. i am dying on the cliffy
2/16/2010 c6 Levy120
Dear Stefanie.
There are plenty of those hidden “affection” signs in the story already. If you honestly wanted to have EVEN more, I supposed you were aiming to have the obvious. If that was a wrong assumption, I am deeply sorry. However pointing out to emphasize the “change of character” from the sequel wasn’t honestly the best move you could have done and probably the reason to lead me to this thinking, since the way the sequel was done was MORE than obvious.
I’d prefer to talk this out with you in PM, or a forum set-up, or something like this, to not clutter up the reviews here with this discussion.
As for the story itself, let’s move on now, shall we? ;D
I am eagerly awaiting the next update x3
Dear Stefanie.
There are plenty of those hidden “affection” signs in the story already. If you honestly wanted to have EVEN more, I supposed you were aiming to have the obvious. If that was a wrong assumption, I am deeply sorry. However pointing out to emphasize the “change of character” from the sequel wasn’t honestly the best move you could have done and probably the reason to lead me to this thinking, since the way the sequel was done was MORE than obvious.
I’d prefer to talk this out with you in PM, or a forum set-up, or something like this, to not clutter up the reviews here with this discussion.
As for the story itself, let’s move on now, shall we? ;D
I am eagerly awaiting the next update x3
2/16/2010 c6 stefanie1992
Well, I knew this chapter has a cliffhanger. What I said about the action sequences was a friendly suggestion for the upcoming chapters.
Levy120, About what you said of "love", by love I don't making up or kissing all the time. There are different ways to show love without to be to corny (as in the second film).
just enjoy the story.
Well, I knew this chapter has a cliffhanger. What I said about the action sequences was a friendly suggestion for the upcoming chapters.
Levy120, About what you said of "love", by love I don't making up or kissing all the time. There are different ways to show love without to be to corny (as in the second film).
just enjoy the story.
2/15/2010 c6 18levy120
Without wanting to seem blunt or something, but I so totally saw this coming and I can so totally see where this will be going xD
But that doesn’t make the story any less enjoyable ^^
There actually isn’t really much that I could say about this chapter here, other than I liked the way the tent set up on flames, it would have been a nice way of strategy, yet it appeared more accidental here. Oh well, it was just for Mushu’s luck – he is a lucky dragon after all, isn’t he?
I actually start to really like Wei. He’s positively insane. Let’s stay with that xD
The cliffhanger has a good point there, and over the night my mind has been stuck on it. Even though I feel that the mention of Cri-kee was a little too much already, indicating that Mulan might just show off and play football with Wei – if it’s not even Khan that stomps him flat (though I like to… ignore the latter possibility, just because it’s Mushu he would be saving there. Nope that’s not Khan at all xD)
Stuff that especially caught my attention:
“Your name Du Heng?” he asked. When the man didn’t answer, Yao smashed the man’s face into the dirt. The victim went limp as he lost consciousness. “Guess not,” shrugged the short man.
^ Yao is the Chinese version of Chuck Norris! Well done xD
One might have expected Shang on this term, but Shang has better manners *g*
“Unfortunately, he still ended up being under Wei’s nose. Which gave the dragon an unpleasantly close view of the feline’s teeth.“
^ Easy too read and still pretty graphic =) GW
“Okay,” Mushu growled. “Why is dragon such a hard word? Snakes don’t do this.”
^ Perfect
Basically Mushu keeps his ‘funny’ attitude in a more… sarcastic and serious way, the way we go to meet him in the temple first.
“Mushu didn’t have a thousand pedestals (or even one, after the ancestors found out about everything) that he could give up to make things better. In fact, he didn’t have much to offer at all. But he did have one very angry, very stubborn dragon with nothing to lose and no reason to stay safe.“
^ This part shall remain uncommented but loved.
“You deaf? Du Heng went this way.”
^ I like the way Mushu’s “big mouth” is clashing with Shang’s status here – and the way Shang doesn’t even oppose xD
“Who is Wei?”
“A very bad thing,”
^ This + “psycho tiger guardian” = Loltastic character description.
“So, scaly guardian would need to be more cunning than the feline.”
^ Pretty good wording here. The tiger is granted with the attitude of the cunning, so this should be a hard – if not even impossible thing to do. Especially in Mushu’s current state he seems to be more on the “act first, think then” run. And we see where this ends as well.
(Btw, ripping out Wei’s whiskers was a thing I didn’t see coming. I would have expected that Mushu would bite him in the leg or something)
“That’s what separated him from the tiger: the dragon cared about Mulan as a person while Wei only did his duty and sought ways to gain honor for the family without really feeling attached to Du Heng.“
^ luv
Also:
@Steffanie1992: I’m sorry, but I couldn’t disagree more.
Because this chapter ends with a cliffhanger it is not said that the action is over already, on the contrary, it might only start out to begin with right now, that Mulan will be involved. And after all this story is rated K+.
Also the “Lots of love” was the greatest fatal mistake that the sequel could do, and putting any “love” in this fanfic would seem out of context and completely forced in. Just imagine Shang and Mulan making out on the spot now that she’s here – would you like to see that? I surely wouldn’t. If you want to read a Lovestory, then go find one that is labelled “Romance” and not “Angst/Adventure”. This page is flooded with love stories, it shouldn’t be hard to find one, while this little fanfic stands for a breeze of fresh air ;)
18levy120Without wanting to seem blunt or something, but I so totally saw this coming and I can so totally see where this will be going xD
But that doesn’t make the story any less enjoyable ^^
There actually isn’t really much that I could say about this chapter here, other than I liked the way the tent set up on flames, it would have been a nice way of strategy, yet it appeared more accidental here. Oh well, it was just for Mushu’s luck – he is a lucky dragon after all, isn’t he?
I actually start to really like Wei. He’s positively insane. Let’s stay with that xD
The cliffhanger has a good point there, and over the night my mind has been stuck on it. Even though I feel that the mention of Cri-kee was a little too much already, indicating that Mulan might just show off and play football with Wei – if it’s not even Khan that stomps him flat (though I like to… ignore the latter possibility, just because it’s Mushu he would be saving there. Nope that’s not Khan at all xD)
Stuff that especially caught my attention:
“Your name Du Heng?” he asked. When the man didn’t answer, Yao smashed the man’s face into the dirt. The victim went limp as he lost consciousness. “Guess not,” shrugged the short man.
^ Yao is the Chinese version of Chuck Norris! Well done xD
One might have expected Shang on this term, but Shang has better manners *g*
“Unfortunately, he still ended up being under Wei’s nose. Which gave the dragon an unpleasantly close view of the feline’s teeth.“
^ Easy too read and still pretty graphic =) GW
“Okay,” Mushu growled. “Why is dragon such a hard word? Snakes don’t do this.”
^ Perfect
Basically Mushu keeps his ‘funny’ attitude in a more… sarcastic and serious way, the way we go to meet him in the temple first.
“Mushu didn’t have a thousand pedestals (or even one, after the ancestors found out about everything) that he could give up to make things better. In fact, he didn’t have much to offer at all. But he did have one very angry, very stubborn dragon with nothing to lose and no reason to stay safe.“
^ This part shall remain uncommented but loved.
“You deaf? Du Heng went this way.”
^ I like the way Mushu’s “big mouth” is clashing with Shang’s status here – and the way Shang doesn’t even oppose xD
“Who is Wei?”
“A very bad thing,”
^ This + “psycho tiger guardian” = Loltastic character description.
“So, scaly guardian would need to be more cunning than the feline.”
^ Pretty good wording here. The tiger is granted with the attitude of the cunning, so this should be a hard – if not even impossible thing to do. Especially in Mushu’s current state he seems to be more on the “act first, think then” run. And we see where this ends as well.
(Btw, ripping out Wei’s whiskers was a thing I didn’t see coming. I would have expected that Mushu would bite him in the leg or something)
“That’s what separated him from the tiger: the dragon cared about Mulan as a person while Wei only did his duty and sought ways to gain honor for the family without really feeling attached to Du Heng.“
^ luv
Also:
@Steffanie1992: I’m sorry, but I couldn’t disagree more.
Because this chapter ends with a cliffhanger it is not said that the action is over already, on the contrary, it might only start out to begin with right now, that Mulan will be involved. And after all this story is rated K+.
Also the “Lots of love” was the greatest fatal mistake that the sequel could do, and putting any “love” in this fanfic would seem out of context and completely forced in. Just imagine Shang and Mulan making out on the spot now that she’s here – would you like to see that? I surely wouldn’t. If you want to read a Lovestory, then go find one that is labelled “Romance” and not “Angst/Adventure”. This page is flooded with love stories, it shouldn’t be hard to find one, while this little fanfic stands for a breeze of fresh air ;)
2/15/2010 c6 Stefanie1992
I like the way you made your fiction after the second film. However you story seems to have some lack of love situations and action sequences. I think you need more action in the upcoming chapters. So far I think the action sequence has been so mild.
And the way you made mulan, m, I believe you made her with no femenine side.
Don't use so much the "flashback tool", sometimes can interfere with story dynamic.
Don't make mushu a sufferable dragon all the time.
I'd like to read how the characters have involved. As we saw in the second film, their life changed and their personalities as well.
Dispite all I wrote, you have a great plot and I want to know what will happen. Please, add more action in battle and more love between the characters. So, keep with the updates.
I like the way you made your fiction after the second film. However you story seems to have some lack of love situations and action sequences. I think you need more action in the upcoming chapters. So far I think the action sequence has been so mild.
And the way you made mulan, m, I believe you made her with no femenine side.
Don't use so much the "flashback tool", sometimes can interfere with story dynamic.
Don't make mushu a sufferable dragon all the time.
I'd like to read how the characters have involved. As we saw in the second film, their life changed and their personalities as well.
Dispite all I wrote, you have a great plot and I want to know what will happen. Please, add more action in battle and more love between the characters. So, keep with the updates.
2/15/2010 c6 8Agrotera Thanatos
That is some awesome fight scene. Mushu definitely kicked major butt this chapter. And I liked Mushu's comparison between himself and Wei. This was a great chapter.
8Agrotera ThanatosThat is some awesome fight scene. Mushu definitely kicked major butt this chapter. And I liked Mushu's comparison between himself and Wei. This was a great chapter.
2/15/2010 c6 r2
wow, a fight between guardians, very nice!
keep going!
I'm looking forward the next chapter.
wow, a fight between guardians, very nice!
keep going!
I'm looking forward the next chapter.
2/15/2010 c6 3Rai Science
That was evil. Leaving us all with that ending. However, I can definitely say that I will be waiting for the next chapter.
3Rai ScienceThat was evil. Leaving us all with that ending. However, I can definitely say that I will be waiting for the next chapter.
2/13/2010 c5 LD
Update soon please!
Update soon please!
2/10/2010 c5 Rai Science
Interesting, especally Mushu's viws. I believe him of coure. The man would never get a date with that attitude and face. Go Mushu!
Interesting, especally Mushu's viws. I believe him of coure. The man would never get a date with that attitude and face. Go Mushu!
2/10/2010 c5 18levy120
Again, some lacking words and typos… but your style makes it all up to me ^^
“Mulan already broke a ton of rules and his record wasn’t exactly clean on the “obeying direct orders of the ancestors” thing. Time to bend another rule.“
I love you xD
‘Going after my theory Humans and their Guardians have some sort of a special bond anyway, this seems to also concern the character.
Mulan and Mushu are the perfect partners in crime - LITERALLY
Mulan: Screw this, I'm going to STEAL the stuff of my Dad to PREDICT I'm a boy and ILLEGALY joining the army to learn how to USE A WEAPON and stuff. I can save my dad and BRING HONOR to my family even though I BREAK ABOUT EVERY RULE I KNOW.
Mushu: Oh geez, I just KILLED the great stone dragon that was supposed to bring Mulan back. Well I might just wind up PROTECTING HER MYSELF, even if I'm NOT ALLOWED TO and make sure she stays away from home for quite an amount of time, PREDICTING to be the great stone dragon. Maybe they'll forget about THAT incident and REWARD ME for DISOBEYING THE RULES.’
- February 23 2009
I srsly love the way you make Mushu LOSE it completely, he’s just that desperate x3
And to be true… I never was fond of the princesses, but Mei is adorable in that chapter ^^
“Ever since one, painful incident, the thin soldier possessed a deep paranoia of snakes being too close to him.“
Oh dear xD
And the explosion… srsly – YES PLZ XD
“Bright orange fur was interrupted by ink black streaks.”
I WIN! xD
Do I get a cookie? 3
More guardian rules ~ 8D
“Every guardian possessed a particular trait or talent to aid in their responsibilities. Monkeys had wisdom, rabbits had incredible speed, and tigers had deadly cunning. But dragons, such as Mushu, possessed real “firepower.””
YOU SCARE ME GIRL!
‘Chinese dragons don’t breath fire! (This is plain American thinking)
Since everyone of the guardians has been announced to have a special ability/character in the very beginning when they were supposed to awaken, I figure that the fire breath is Mushu’s little “extra”.’
- October 2008
You are my long-lost soulmate, I just know it! 3
18levy120Again, some lacking words and typos… but your style makes it all up to me ^^
“Mulan already broke a ton of rules and his record wasn’t exactly clean on the “obeying direct orders of the ancestors” thing. Time to bend another rule.“
I love you xD
‘Going after my theory Humans and their Guardians have some sort of a special bond anyway, this seems to also concern the character.
Mulan and Mushu are the perfect partners in crime - LITERALLY
Mulan: Screw this, I'm going to STEAL the stuff of my Dad to PREDICT I'm a boy and ILLEGALY joining the army to learn how to USE A WEAPON and stuff. I can save my dad and BRING HONOR to my family even though I BREAK ABOUT EVERY RULE I KNOW.
Mushu: Oh geez, I just KILLED the great stone dragon that was supposed to bring Mulan back. Well I might just wind up PROTECTING HER MYSELF, even if I'm NOT ALLOWED TO and make sure she stays away from home for quite an amount of time, PREDICTING to be the great stone dragon. Maybe they'll forget about THAT incident and REWARD ME for DISOBEYING THE RULES.’
- February 23 2009
I srsly love the way you make Mushu LOSE it completely, he’s just that desperate x3
And to be true… I never was fond of the princesses, but Mei is adorable in that chapter ^^
“Ever since one, painful incident, the thin soldier possessed a deep paranoia of snakes being too close to him.“
Oh dear xD
And the explosion… srsly – YES PLZ XD
“Bright orange fur was interrupted by ink black streaks.”
I WIN! xD
Do I get a cookie? 3
More guardian rules ~ 8D
“Every guardian possessed a particular trait or talent to aid in their responsibilities. Monkeys had wisdom, rabbits had incredible speed, and tigers had deadly cunning. But dragons, such as Mushu, possessed real “firepower.””
YOU SCARE ME GIRL!
‘Chinese dragons don’t breath fire! (This is plain American thinking)
Since everyone of the guardians has been announced to have a special ability/character in the very beginning when they were supposed to awaken, I figure that the fire breath is Mushu’s little “extra”.’
- October 2008
You are my long-lost soulmate, I just know it! 3
2/10/2010 c5 8Agrotera Thanatos
Yeah, but since Mushu *technically* isn't a guardian...doesn't that mean rules don't apply?
That was cool. I love hoe you can get into a character's head and express them as they'd be in the actual canon. Great work.
8Agrotera ThanatosYeah, but since Mushu *technically* isn't a guardian...doesn't that mean rules don't apply?
That was cool. I love hoe you can get into a character's head and express them as they'd be in the actual canon. Great work.