11/28/2012 c5 LisaG16
great story...loved all the realizations charlie had about don and how skilled he is as an agent. don is always the self-effacing one that doesn't call attention to his successes, but i'm glad charlie got some great insights to his big brother and how good he is at his job.

2/10/2010 c5 91st endeavor
Sorry I,m late; ran into a few computer issues but I think they've been resolved now. (crosses fingers)

Loved the story and as always I thought your characters were just perfect. I especially liked the fact that Charlie had an active part in the story.

2/8/2010 c5 PattyB
I rate that five star, Aleo. Really, really good story and in my book,

the miracle certainly qualified.

Love the brief look at the brothers watching the old movie. In my mind's

eye I can see Don holding that menorah as well as the hero in the movie holding

the cross up against the vampire. LOL What kid hasn't watched such movies at

some time or another but not all FBI agent's are so lucky as to be able to hold

up a menorah against a drug deprived bad guy. Yup, the menorah falling into

Don's hands was a miracle . . . the fact that the gun misfired was a by-product!

I do hope you have another story for us on the front burner. These daily

updates have been wonderful to look forward to. Thank you ever so much.

Patty

2/8/2010 c5 3gypsy71
Thank you for this exciting and well thought out story, made all the more interesting by contrasting Don's cold, detached statement and Charlie's emotional turmoil.

I loved the way the story unfolded gradually; even though from chapter two it was told in hindsight, you kept the details of their injuries hidden and that added to the tension.

You got the characterisations just right too; Charlie didn't go to pieces like he does with a lot of writers! He had the presence of mind to give Don some first aid and he managed to look after Ms Levi.

I thought you did an excellent job of getting into Charlie's head and despite their different responses I thought Charlie came out of the experience understanding his brother a bit better.

Thanks for sharing!

2/8/2010 c5 6Maz101
Great story with an interesting setting to give an extra symbolic layer to the action and the characters I thought. I liked your use of the interspersed statement clips - the difference they represented in the brothers was really clever and it was an effective device for exposition and a change of pace. For a strange moment I thought that a bullet was actually going to ricochet off that minorah - I should have known you could never be so cheesey! Great writing - as ever.

2/8/2010 c5 28Synbou
ALEO,

Thank you for another excellent story. I really enjoyed the story line and the way it was told, that was different and nicely done.

2/8/2010 c5 9weldolet
Loved it. Nicely rounded up. Great how Don anticipates exactly what Charlie needs. What a hero! :)

I really like how you write understated angst...you don't over egg the pudding at all and it fits really well with the characters.

I think its also good that you don't mention Alan, Amita or Robin here either...this is between brothers only and again that fits so well.

Thanks for another great story from a great writer!

2/7/2010 c4 weldolet
A very clever way of telling the story. Subtle use of flashback that clearly demonstrates the different traits of the brothers. Love how Charlie is in awe of how Don quickly assimulates information and processes it in this situation - just how Charlie does with a math problem.

I remember an episode where David (I think) says to Alan, "Alan how can you have two sons who are so different yet so alike?"

Can't wait for the climax!