for Soaked3/19 c1 Peg
Your writing is like pure magic! Your use of vivid imagery (pinched face, stoic expression, something cold and heavy land on her neck, jagged rocks etc.) is very effective. You quickly key the reader into what the characters are about. Beneath the seemingly ordinary events, there's sense of building toward something big that's about to happen. What will it be? How will you reveal it? Otsu seems like a compressed spring about to let loose! You have the gift of writing!
Your writing is like pure magic! Your use of vivid imagery (pinched face, stoic expression, something cold and heavy land on her neck, jagged rocks etc.) is very effective. You quickly key the reader into what the characters are about. Beneath the seemingly ordinary events, there's sense of building toward something big that's about to happen. What will it be? How will you reveal it? Otsu seems like a compressed spring about to let loose! You have the gift of writing!
1511/6/2010 c1 Jazzabell
This was an enjoyable read and i too really like the otsu/takezo pairing.
Good job!
This was an enjoyable read and i too really like the otsu/takezo pairing.
Good job!