10/23/2010 c1 5BookwormRose
Well, the story started out fine. It kept my interest and made me want to see what would happen. Then in the restaurant everything fell apart. You kept switching from third person to first person, and switching from Kit to Nita that it was difficult to follow. Really, if you go back and polish this up, it would be a good story, but right now, I had trouble sticking through to the end. Keep trying and keep writing, though. It's what makes us better. :)

Rose