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76Gothic-Romantic99
Nice chapter. This chapter a good way to end this story. This collection of stories have been fun to read. Good work.
76Gothic-Romantic99Nice chapter. This chapter a good way to end this story. This collection of stories have been fun to read. Good work.
3/30/2012 c6 Gothic-Romantic99
Aww, this chapter is cute. It's a nice addition to the collection.
You said you don't have spell check, but you can catch most spelling mistakes by proofreading before posting. There are a lot (like a third of the words) misspelled words in this chapter and it distracts from your plot. You might want to read over your document before posting.
Other than that this is a good chapter.
Aww, this chapter is cute. It's a nice addition to the collection.
You said you don't have spell check, but you can catch most spelling mistakes by proofreading before posting. There are a lot (like a third of the words) misspelled words in this chapter and it distracts from your plot. You might want to read over your document before posting.
Other than that this is a good chapter.
3/30/2012 c5 Gothic-Romantic99
Aww, the first part is so cute. Winry should feel wonderful hearing Ed compliment her so much. Very sweet.
The second part is sad to know how much he is longing to see her again. Good job with this chapter.
Aww, the first part is so cute. Winry should feel wonderful hearing Ed compliment her so much. Very sweet.
The second part is sad to know how much he is longing to see her again. Good job with this chapter.
3/30/2012 c3 Gothic-Romantic99
Good chapter. It's interesting how you include other couples in this story and Al/Rose is so cute. Good job with writing all the angst, and so much of it could be resolved if they just admitted their feelings. However the angst makes this a good story. Nice work with this chapter.
Good chapter. It's interesting how you include other couples in this story and Al/Rose is so cute. Good job with writing all the angst, and so much of it could be resolved if they just admitted their feelings. However the angst makes this a good story. Nice work with this chapter.
3/30/2012 c2 Gothic-Romantic99
A pretty interesting chapter. I like the bit about how wrath can bring people together. Good job with showing how each of those people display their wrath. You might want to proofread before posting in order to catch the spelling mistakes though. Anyway, good chapter.
A pretty interesting chapter. I like the bit about how wrath can bring people together. Good job with showing how each of those people display their wrath. You might want to proofread before posting in order to catch the spelling mistakes though. Anyway, good chapter.
3/30/2012 c1 Gothic-Romantic99
This is an interesting idea for a story. You've done a great job with showing the angst of their relationship. Good work with showing how each one of them has their own way of being greedy for the other. It's well written. Good job with this chapter.
This is an interesting idea for a story. You've done a great job with showing the angst of their relationship. Good work with showing how each one of them has their own way of being greedy for the other. It's well written. Good job with this chapter.
12/28/2010 c4 Queen NekoChan
the voices in MY head always fight with each other...don't know why...as for something completely unrelated to this subject,do you know why people always say blondes are stupid?cause my family and friends are all mostly blonde and are actually pretty smart.me included.i could probably get straight A's whenever i wanted,but i'm just too lazy...but then again,i still can't figure out if my hair is blonde or light-ish brown...forget all the comments made on blondes.it's stupid and highly unrelated to the current condition of the dieing world we're living on.
the voices in MY head always fight with each other...don't know why...as for something completely unrelated to this subject,do you know why people always say blondes are stupid?cause my family and friends are all mostly blonde and are actually pretty smart.me included.i could probably get straight A's whenever i wanted,but i'm just too lazy...but then again,i still can't figure out if my hair is blonde or light-ish brown...forget all the comments made on blondes.it's stupid and highly unrelated to the current condition of the dieing world we're living on.
12/28/2010 c3 Queen NekoChan
...i have never seen AlxRose in my entire life...i have never even thought of the possibility...and you spelled being wrong.are you seriously editing this?
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sorry if you take that as some sort of unneeded and insignificant comment.if i didn't like this,i would never waste my time reviewing on a hopelessly lost fan fic.which this isn't.which is precisely the reason why i'm reading this.this just has some stupid little mistakes,nothing wrong with the writing.and that,on my opinion,is a sort of compliment.(hehe,i can be kinda mature when i want.)
...i have never seen AlxRose in my entire life...i have never even thought of the possibility...and you spelled being wrong.are you seriously editing this?
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sorry if you take that as some sort of unneeded and insignificant comment.if i didn't like this,i would never waste my time reviewing on a hopelessly lost fan fic.which this isn't.which is precisely the reason why i'm reading this.this just has some stupid little mistakes,nothing wrong with the writing.and that,on my opinion,is a sort of compliment.(hehe,i can be kinda mature when i want.)
12/28/2010 c2 Queen NekoChan
...you spelled words wrong...luckily,i could decipher most of them.you probably meant; many, whether ,inanimate, physically, brings, through, and... well, that's pretty much it. but there were other mistakes that you can fix, such as getting rid of the second 'in fact' in the second sentence. it's unnecessary and makes it sound weird. you can probably turn some ideas separated by commas into individual sentences, and turn individual sentences into two ideas separated by commas.or just throw in a comma or two. actually, i'm trying to figure out how old you are so i visited your profile, but you didn't say how old you are... but i read the whole thing, even that infinite list if copy and paste things, and you seem like a teen... which means your probably older than me... omfg this review is long.
...you spelled words wrong...luckily,i could decipher most of them.you probably meant; many, whether ,inanimate, physically, brings, through, and... well, that's pretty much it. but there were other mistakes that you can fix, such as getting rid of the second 'in fact' in the second sentence. it's unnecessary and makes it sound weird. you can probably turn some ideas separated by commas into individual sentences, and turn individual sentences into two ideas separated by commas.or just throw in a comma or two. actually, i'm trying to figure out how old you are so i visited your profile, but you didn't say how old you are... but i read the whole thing, even that infinite list if copy and paste things, and you seem like a teen... which means your probably older than me... omfg this review is long.
12/28/2010 c1 Queen NekoChan
when did you start writing this?before the manga was finished?'cause Arakawa-sensei made it pretty clear that everybody ends up together...as in,EdWin,Royai,Almei,etc.and you repeated things way too much in this.other than that...it's good!*peace sign*
when did you start writing this?before the manga was finished?'cause Arakawa-sensei made it pretty clear that everybody ends up together...as in,EdWin,Royai,Almei,etc.and you repeated things way too much in this.other than that...it's good!*peace sign*
12/28/2010 c1 2LarkOfTheSky
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO, WRIIIIIIIIIIIIITE. I liked the idea of this story- and you only had one more chapter! WHY? WHYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY?
Please continue! You really did have talent.
~Lark
2LarkOfTheSkyNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO, WRIIIIIIIIIIIIITE. I liked the idea of this story- and you only had one more chapter! WHY? WHYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY?
Please continue! You really did have talent.
~Lark