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12Allen Bedillion Trahurn
Just finished reading through what you have, thought I would do some reading to learn your characters a little better. It's well written, very few errors that I can see. Keep up the good work.
12Allen Bedillion TrahurnJust finished reading through what you have, thought I would do some reading to learn your characters a little better. It's well written, very few errors that I can see. Keep up the good work.
7/7/2012 c7 Guest
So a white scientist goes into the heart of Africa to socialize with an undiscovered tribe who've never seen a white man before. He teaches them of the civilized world and makes good friends with the chief. One day, one of the women gives birth to a white baby. The chief says to the scientist, "This woman just gave birth to a white baby and you're the only white man here, it doesn't take a genius to figure out what happened!" The innocent man calmly replied, "I didn't do anything, what you have here is an albino baby. It's just like those sheep in the field, all of them are white except the single black one. It's just how nature works, sometimes." However, the chief, who was previously disbelieving, stiffened at the mention of the sheep. He then leaned in and, in a hushed tone, told the white man, "Tell you what, I won't say nothing about the kid if you won't say nothing about the sheep."
So a white scientist goes into the heart of Africa to socialize with an undiscovered tribe who've never seen a white man before. He teaches them of the civilized world and makes good friends with the chief. One day, one of the women gives birth to a white baby. The chief says to the scientist, "This woman just gave birth to a white baby and you're the only white man here, it doesn't take a genius to figure out what happened!" The innocent man calmly replied, "I didn't do anything, what you have here is an albino baby. It's just like those sheep in the field, all of them are white except the single black one. It's just how nature works, sometimes." However, the chief, who was previously disbelieving, stiffened at the mention of the sheep. He then leaned in and, in a hushed tone, told the white man, "Tell you what, I won't say nothing about the kid if you won't say nothing about the sheep."
7/3/2012 c7 3Paxloria
I SO GLAD YOU UPDATED WITH A NEW CHAPTER!
Just wanted to say that.
Ok.
I'd be cool if your next chapter was the one to reveal that Akri was the son on Sebastian. You could have Undertaker do it since he's right there, or have Akri speak his true & complete name. That would probably do it to.
Your asking reviewers for jokes... Well I'm better at slapstick & situational humor, but I'll try.
Joke:
When is something that looks like a duck, quack's like a duck, and swims like a duck, NOT a duck?
When it is a spy.
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I know it sucks but its all I got at the moment.
3PaxloriaI SO GLAD YOU UPDATED WITH A NEW CHAPTER!
Just wanted to say that.
Ok.
I'd be cool if your next chapter was the one to reveal that Akri was the son on Sebastian. You could have Undertaker do it since he's right there, or have Akri speak his true & complete name. That would probably do it to.
Your asking reviewers for jokes... Well I'm better at slapstick & situational humor, but I'll try.
Joke:
When is something that looks like a duck, quack's like a duck, and swims like a duck, NOT a duck?
When it is a spy.
.
I know it sucks but its all I got at the moment.
4/22/2012 c6 Daniella
Its interesting hoe Ciel & Sebastian never even noticed that Butler doll the boy was holding earlier.
Its interesting hoe Ciel & Sebastian never even noticed that Butler doll the boy was holding earlier.
4/13/2012 c6 712hinata123
I'm so happy you finally updated this story. I had believed you completely forgot about so i was sad because your story is excellent and i have one question. Is Yoruichi dead?
712hinata123I'm so happy you finally updated this story. I had believed you completely forgot about so i was sad because your story is excellent and i have one question. Is Yoruichi dead?
9/26/2011 c5 712hinata123
Omg i love this story it contains my favorite characters and a new favorite yoruichi and sabastians son i love this story please continue to right and could you answer this question that been on my mind. will yoruichi have a relationship with sabastian in this story
712hinata123Omg i love this story it contains my favorite characters and a new favorite yoruichi and sabastians son i love this story please continue to right and could you answer this question that been on my mind. will yoruichi have a relationship with sabastian in this story
9/5/2011 c4 niki
please update im dyinng here
please update im dyinng here
2/13/2011 c4 6HippoKrys
Hell yah, you finally updated! :D Poor Akri I have a feeling he's gonna kick some serious butt. ;P
6HippoKrysHell yah, you finally updated! :D Poor Akri I have a feeling he's gonna kick some serious butt. ;P
8/31/2010 c3 5sasorilover7
lolz grimmjow is awesome! oh about the ambulance it's probaby for his mother-yoruichi. lolz i can see why sebastian falling for her-lolz! how do you pronaunce Akri's name? is it Ak-ri? or does it sound like Aki-ri?
5sasorilover7lolz grimmjow is awesome! oh about the ambulance it's probaby for his mother-yoruichi. lolz i can see why sebastian falling for her-lolz! how do you pronaunce Akri's name? is it Ak-ri? or does it sound like Aki-ri?
7/11/2010 c3 2Sasural
Loved the update! Really getting into the story. Can't wait till the next update. Update soon please
2SasuralLoved the update! Really getting into the story. Can't wait till the next update. Update soon please
6/29/2010 c3 Kai uh.u know me
At first I thought ciel was Kenny then I realized my mistake! Lol! Well, keep up the good writing and can ya" werk a littl faster on tha ads8? And, keep on updating!
At first I thought ciel was Kenny then I realized my mistake! Lol! Well, keep up the good writing and can ya" werk a littl faster on tha ads8? And, keep on updating!