for Rite of Passage11/3/2010 c1 chocolatecheesecake
great story :)
victoria was described well and a great job writing from bree's POV. i also liked how you linked it with Eclipse with Amanda Reed but made it a different story to wat actually happened to bree.
great story :)
victoria was described well and a great job writing from bree's POV. i also liked how you linked it with Eclipse with Amanda Reed but made it a different story to wat actually happened to bree.
5/25/2010 c1 
44Shadows of a Dream
Hey - - congratulations on winning the NNT challenge. I entered but didn't make it. I liked your story's use of Amanda Reed as a key player, especially because she was barely mentioned in Eclipse. And I like Victoria's... creepyness. She's just cool. Nice job portraying Bree.
44Shadows of a DreamHey - - congratulations on winning the NNT challenge. I entered but didn't make it. I liked your story's use of Amanda Reed as a key player, especially because she was barely mentioned in Eclipse. And I like Victoria's... creepyness. She's just cool. Nice job portraying Bree.
5/19/2010 c1 15KristenLynn
Oohhh! Very cool! It's easy to overlook the small players, isn't it, but they all had a history, too. Interesting to see your take on Bree, her troubled relationship with her parents, and the fact that she lost everything b/c of a boy... I also like that you chose a name from the victims around which you centered this story. Hate to say this, but I hope that Jim got his comeuppance as well, b/c that was just mean... I know that their human memories fade, but I have a feeling that Bree will hold onto that hurt for a while...
Congrats on the win, bb.
:)
KL
15KristenLynnOohhh! Very cool! It's easy to overlook the small players, isn't it, but they all had a history, too. Interesting to see your take on Bree, her troubled relationship with her parents, and the fact that she lost everything b/c of a boy... I also like that you chose a name from the victims around which you centered this story. Hate to say this, but I hope that Jim got his comeuppance as well, b/c that was just mean... I know that their human memories fade, but I have a feeling that Bree will hold onto that hurt for a while...
Congrats on the win, bb.
:)
KL
5/19/2010 c1 5lalalove-Rae
Wow, this was Great! very moving. I'm not the biggest fan of Bree, but I really enjoyed this. I like how you had Victoria picking her victims. I kinda pictured her pulling random ppl off the street into an alley. It makes much more sense that she would go for ppl who would make good fighters.
xxoo, Rae
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5lalalove-RaeWow, this was Great! very moving. I'm not the biggest fan of Bree, but I really enjoyed this. I like how you had Victoria picking her victims. I kinda pictured her pulling random ppl off the street into an alley. It makes much more sense that she would go for ppl who would make good fighters.
xxoo, Rae
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5/19/2010 c1 16animal8
This was a really good story, I loved reading the thoughts of Bree before, during and just after her change ;D. Nice idea of giving her an incentive of revenge as a way to get her to follow Victoria. Very well done on this and congratulations on winning the Novel Novice Twilight Challenge ;D.
16animal8This was a really good story, I loved reading the thoughts of Bree before, during and just after her change ;D. Nice idea of giving her an incentive of revenge as a way to get her to follow Victoria. Very well done on this and congratulations on winning the Novel Novice Twilight Challenge ;D.