for Liquorice Allsorts10/16/2011 c5 
20Narcissa-Weasly
I could see why Pansy wanted to date Seamus, but not why he would want to date her. Poor Daphne, she is just a friend, nothing more to him.
20Narcissa-WeaslyI could see why Pansy wanted to date Seamus, but not why he would want to date her. Poor Daphne, she is just a friend, nothing more to him.
10/16/2011 c4 Narcissa-Weasly
Untill I read the last two or three lines I thought that they where just kids!
I don't know what it is with your writing that make it so good, but it is!
Untill I read the last two or three lines I thought that they where just kids!
I don't know what it is with your writing that make it so good, but it is!
10/16/2011 c3 Narcissa-Weasly
This is a very sweet father daughter story. Bill understand what she meant and Vic isn't as everyone else.
This is a very sweet father daughter story. Bill understand what she meant and Vic isn't as everyone else.
10/16/2011 c2 Narcissa-Weasly
I would never be able to figure out the math.
Really good, even if the twists between diffrent stories are very fast.
I would never be able to figure out the math.
Really good, even if the twists between diffrent stories are very fast.
10/16/2011 c1 Narcissa-Weasly
You can deskribe th slow, stupid and twisted ming of Vincent Crabbe. How he twist to torture to show how good he is at SOMETHING!
You can deskribe th slow, stupid and twisted ming of Vincent Crabbe. How he twist to torture to show how good he is at SOMETHING!
9/17/2011 c6 13AsterLea
First of all, I love the name you've given to this drabble collection! The name implies variety I browsed through a few chapters before deciding to review this one, and you definitely have variety here! There are so many pairings both usual and unusual, which is a definite hook for me because I don't know what's coming next- kind of like a bag of allsorts!
The opening sentence of this chapter is really strong and establishes Gabrielle's dreamy, yet self-aware personality. I like how she is not very similar to Fleur, who is more grounded, outspoken, and strong. I love the little idea of a chance meeting she has- honestly, who hasn't hoped for that from a forgotten crush? I also enjoyed how "reality is quite different to dreams," but it doesn't crush the rest of the piece and make it entirely hopeless- it would have been to cliche, I think. Dennis having those "same shining brightness" in his eyes was a really sweet, touching line, and I love how her faith is re-assured at the end (just one nitpick- thoughts should be italicized to separate it from what isn't the character's thoughts). I really enjoyed this chapter and will probably read the whole thing now!
13AsterLeaFirst of all, I love the name you've given to this drabble collection! The name implies variety I browsed through a few chapters before deciding to review this one, and you definitely have variety here! There are so many pairings both usual and unusual, which is a definite hook for me because I don't know what's coming next- kind of like a bag of allsorts!
The opening sentence of this chapter is really strong and establishes Gabrielle's dreamy, yet self-aware personality. I like how she is not very similar to Fleur, who is more grounded, outspoken, and strong. I love the little idea of a chance meeting she has- honestly, who hasn't hoped for that from a forgotten crush? I also enjoyed how "reality is quite different to dreams," but it doesn't crush the rest of the piece and make it entirely hopeless- it would have been to cliche, I think. Dennis having those "same shining brightness" in his eyes was a really sweet, touching line, and I love how her faith is re-assured at the end (just one nitpick- thoughts should be italicized to separate it from what isn't the character's thoughts). I really enjoyed this chapter and will probably read the whole thing now!
4/30/2011 c9 Maara Annika
You made great tribute to this character.
She'd want us to remember her as poetry in motion, ever moving and destroying and as close as she would ever get to happiness.
You made great tribute to this character.
She'd want us to remember her as poetry in motion, ever moving and destroying and as close as she would ever get to happiness.
4/30/2011 c7 Maara Annika
My favourite one was about Amos Diggory.
Also I like how Umbridge still didn’t understand what wrong she had done while she ruled Hogwarts.
And every one of the drabbles was sad except Ron/Hermione. Well done : )
My favourite one was about Amos Diggory.
Also I like how Umbridge still didn’t understand what wrong she had done while she ruled Hogwarts.
And every one of the drabbles was sad except Ron/Hermione. Well done : )
4/30/2011 c6 Maara Annika
Nice. I like how she dreamed about the day they would meet and that the reality was different but after feeling sad that it is not like she wished she begin wonder maybe it is still worth it.
Nice. I like how she dreamed about the day they would meet and that the reality was different but after feeling sad that it is not like she wished she begin wonder maybe it is still worth it.
4/30/2011 c5 Maara Annika
This post war mood is more realistic then canon one (early marriage & children). Liked how you described Daphne’s thoughts and the triangle Seamus-Pansy-Daphne.
This post war mood is more realistic then canon one (early marriage & children). Liked how you described Daphne’s thoughts and the triangle Seamus-Pansy-Daphne.
4/30/2011 c4 Maara Annika
I like how you repeated “Well, now they know it.” Light and sweet fic about friendship.
I like how you repeated “Well, now they know it.” Light and sweet fic about friendship.
4/30/2011 c3 Maara Annika
This wonderful! A little uplifting fic about child/father. And I loved the ending.
This wonderful! A little uplifting fic about child/father. And I loved the ending.
4/30/2011 c2 Maara Annika
[...] the sentence, what makes his desperate sacrifice reality.
[...] secretly she knows some of her tears are real.
This is the most insightful sentence ever about Myrtle.
Wonderful one shot I especially liked that it was not only about happy/romantic love.
[...] the sentence, what makes his desperate sacrifice reality.
[...] secretly she knows some of her tears are real.
This is the most insightful sentence ever about Myrtle.
Wonderful one shot I especially liked that it was not only about happy/romantic love.