for Refuse to Fall7/15/2010 c3 ALittleMind
I really do love this story, and it wasn't too short! Simon's musings are great, and he seems a little more confident in what he says than usual. The way the characters interact with each other is perfect, you really have them down.
I really do love this story, and it wasn't too short! Simon's musings are great, and he seems a little more confident in what he says than usual. The way the characters interact with each other is perfect, you really have them down.
7/15/2010 c3 
41TuesdayNovember
Amazing! I mean, really, absolutely amazing. I didn't know anyone could make Lord of the Flies more awesome, but guess what? YOU JUST DID. Anyway, I'm pretty sure I've already told you this, but your writing style is amazing, and your whole concept is just pure brilliance. Great job! =)
41TuesdayNovemberAmazing! I mean, really, absolutely amazing. I didn't know anyone could make Lord of the Flies more awesome, but guess what? YOU JUST DID. Anyway, I'm pretty sure I've already told you this, but your writing style is amazing, and your whole concept is just pure brilliance. Great job! =)
7/7/2010 c2 4drizzzzle
this was great! :D
the present tense is unique in itself, but the storyline is something I've never seen.
continue please. (:
4drizzzzlethis was great! :D
the present tense is unique in itself, but the storyline is something I've never seen.
continue please. (:
7/5/2010 c2 MCD
OMG, Simon's back! *Dun dun duuuuun*
For truly he is the son of... well, I guess it would be blasphemous to say God, but taking into account the book's allegory, the connection is pretty much automatic.
Seriously, GREAT FIC, I can't wait to see what the hell is going to happen.
OMG, Simon's back! *Dun dun duuuuun*
For truly he is the son of... well, I guess it would be blasphemous to say God, but taking into account the book's allegory, the connection is pretty much automatic.
Seriously, GREAT FIC, I can't wait to see what the hell is going to happen.
6/17/2010 c2 ALittleMind
Great ending. Simon looks to be the saving grace so to put, like Jesus' resurrection. I really love the connection, I always wondered why / wished that Golding brought back Simon...
I really like the way you're going with this story, so far it seems to be well thought out, and I'm excited to see the rest!
There's not that much to criticize really... oh, there was one part, before the grip, haul, step, grip? "His bottom *[lip]* quivers at the memory" but that was all that really came out to slap me. You really stayed in present tense which I consider to be admirable in itself, and great vocabulary too~
Love it so far!
Great ending. Simon looks to be the saving grace so to put, like Jesus' resurrection. I really love the connection, I always wondered why / wished that Golding brought back Simon...
I really like the way you're going with this story, so far it seems to be well thought out, and I'm excited to see the rest!
There's not that much to criticize really... oh, there was one part, before the grip, haul, step, grip? "His bottom *[lip]* quivers at the memory" but that was all that really came out to slap me. You really stayed in present tense which I consider to be admirable in itself, and great vocabulary too~
Love it so far!
6/14/2010 c2 TuesdayNovember
Oh wow! That was epic!
I'm truly impressed with your work. You've done a spectacular job, and I'm excited for more. Also Simon. (yay!) =)
Oh wow! That was epic!
I'm truly impressed with your work. You've done a spectacular job, and I'm excited for more. Also Simon. (yay!) =)
6/14/2010 c2 Anonymous
Wow! You are truly amazing at writing LotF. I agree, the fandom should be bigger...
You really just capture their personalities wonderfully. I really felt scared and afraid when reading this! Truly awesome. :)
Wow! You are truly amazing at writing LotF. I agree, the fandom should be bigger...
You really just capture their personalities wonderfully. I really felt scared and afraid when reading this! Truly awesome. :)
6/14/2010 c2 HermioneLennon
No need to cough. I love it! It's completely unlike any other LOTF fic I've read! :) And I agree, the fandom could be and SHOULD be far bigger - but no one appears to have the passion for it that people like you and I do!
No need to cough. I love it! It's completely unlike any other LOTF fic I've read! :) And I agree, the fandom could be and SHOULD be far bigger - but no one appears to have the passion for it that people like you and I do!
6/14/2010 c2 Sheepz
Ah-ah! Simon~! :D Hooray, I like this story so far. :0 Jack's frightening, poor Maurice. D: Can't wait for the next chapter~. o wo
Ah-ah! Simon~! :D Hooray, I like this story so far. :0 Jack's frightening, poor Maurice. D: Can't wait for the next chapter~. o wo
6/12/2010 c1 person
That was great! I would really love to see where this story goes! You should really update. :)
That was great! I would really love to see where this story goes! You should really update. :)
6/11/2010 c1 Anise
You have a very nice writing style, I hope you'll be continuing it soon~
You have a very nice writing style, I hope you'll be continuing it soon~
6/10/2010 c1 ALittleMind
Only three reviews? Really? This is truly a breath of fresh air, very to the point and direct. Beautiful, I mean it. More people should read this.
I love your writing style, especially, very unique. Most people try to copy WG, but this is amazing as is. I really hope you follow this through, and if it helps, i promise to review every chapter!
Only three reviews? Really? This is truly a breath of fresh air, very to the point and direct. Beautiful, I mean it. More people should read this.
I love your writing style, especially, very unique. Most people try to copy WG, but this is amazing as is. I really hope you follow this through, and if it helps, i promise to review every chapter!
6/9/2010 c1 22prone2dementia
Oh, this was just wonderful! I loved the present tense style, the concept, and most of all, the parenthetical thoughts. Can't wait to see where this is going!
PS - the summary was an insanely good hook!
22prone2dementiaOh, this was just wonderful! I loved the present tense style, the concept, and most of all, the parenthetical thoughts. Can't wait to see where this is going!
PS - the summary was an insanely good hook!
6/2/2010 c1 HermioneLennon
I love the thoughts peppered between the lines! This is so creative! Do you plan to continue?
I love the thoughts peppered between the lines! This is so creative! Do you plan to continue?
6/1/2010 c1 41TuesdayNovember
Well now, you asked us to go easy on you, but there's really no need for that.
This was superb, and I mean it. At first I was a bit startled by your use of the present tense, but it works really well with the story, and I hope that this becomes a multi-chapter thing. Or if not, that you continue writing for Lord of the Flies.
Great job! =)
41TuesdayNovemberWell now, you asked us to go easy on you, but there's really no need for that.
This was superb, and I mean it. At first I was a bit startled by your use of the present tense, but it works really well with the story, and I hope that this becomes a multi-chapter thing. Or if not, that you continue writing for Lord of the Flies.
Great job! =)