for The Sins of the Fathers10/16/2010 c47 
6Mirefinwe
Thank you!
Actually, I've practically finished a story about Elros and his family - I just need to find the time to read through and revise it. Time is rather a rare commodity now that I've started university, but I'll get there eventually.
6MirefinweThank you!
Actually, I've practically finished a story about Elros and his family - I just need to find the time to read through and revise it. Time is rather a rare commodity now that I've started university, but I'll get there eventually.
10/14/2010 c47 Jenn
you did a wonderful work here
will you write more stories?
you did a wonderful work here
will you write more stories?
7/8/2010 c47 6Shemyaza1
What a heartwarming, yet chilling tale you have woven around what was one of the most moving and tumultuous events in the history of the Elves. Your characters shine and they become real. Indis becomes a real person, a mother, a wife and a person in her own right. All through the thread of their lives up to the point of the death of the Two Trees and subsequent events it becomes clear that the poor lady was damned if she did and damned if she didn't. She seized the day and the man, but I think all through her life she was aware that there would be some kind of reckoning eventually. Out of everyone in the story, I feel for Indis and Nerdanel the most.
Your tale inferred to me that Indis knew when Nolofinwe and Feanor had their showdown, that the end was in sight. I think she knew at that point that she had lost. I wonder how she would have felt knowing that in a way Miriel Serinde had the last laugh because when it came down to it, Finwe chose HER son over his second wife. That's how it must have seemed to Indis. What a bitter pill to swallow and she didn't deserve that.
I think your portrayal of Miriel was excellent. She was obviously someone who should never ever have married anyone. All of her being was put into her creations, her embroidered tapestries. She put into Feanor the same kind of effort that she did with her creations...in fact to her I believe that's all he was; a creation, but she was determined to make him her finest work. When it was done she had nothing left. She had reached the pinnacle of her talent and ability and there was nothing left in her to give.
It's strange, but no matter how one views Feanor, he does not come out of any of this in a good way, no matter how sympathetic the writer. I rather liked the way that you made him a sardonic yet humorous person in the run up to the end. It's so easy to write someone as being evil. I suspect that the nature of Feanor was somewhat psychopathic. Psychopaths tend to be extremely organized, secretive and manipulative and Feanor was probably all of these. The outer personality is often charismatic and charming, hiding the real person beneath. Though psychopaths do not feel for others, they can mimic behaviors that make them appear normal.
Oh my god, I just turned Feanor into a psychopath!
Anyway, thanks for this story, it was an absorbing read.
6Shemyaza1What a heartwarming, yet chilling tale you have woven around what was one of the most moving and tumultuous events in the history of the Elves. Your characters shine and they become real. Indis becomes a real person, a mother, a wife and a person in her own right. All through the thread of their lives up to the point of the death of the Two Trees and subsequent events it becomes clear that the poor lady was damned if she did and damned if she didn't. She seized the day and the man, but I think all through her life she was aware that there would be some kind of reckoning eventually. Out of everyone in the story, I feel for Indis and Nerdanel the most.
Your tale inferred to me that Indis knew when Nolofinwe and Feanor had their showdown, that the end was in sight. I think she knew at that point that she had lost. I wonder how she would have felt knowing that in a way Miriel Serinde had the last laugh because when it came down to it, Finwe chose HER son over his second wife. That's how it must have seemed to Indis. What a bitter pill to swallow and she didn't deserve that.
I think your portrayal of Miriel was excellent. She was obviously someone who should never ever have married anyone. All of her being was put into her creations, her embroidered tapestries. She put into Feanor the same kind of effort that she did with her creations...in fact to her I believe that's all he was; a creation, but she was determined to make him her finest work. When it was done she had nothing left. She had reached the pinnacle of her talent and ability and there was nothing left in her to give.
It's strange, but no matter how one views Feanor, he does not come out of any of this in a good way, no matter how sympathetic the writer. I rather liked the way that you made him a sardonic yet humorous person in the run up to the end. It's so easy to write someone as being evil. I suspect that the nature of Feanor was somewhat psychopathic. Psychopaths tend to be extremely organized, secretive and manipulative and Feanor was probably all of these. The outer personality is often charismatic and charming, hiding the real person beneath. Though psychopaths do not feel for others, they can mimic behaviors that make them appear normal.
Oh my god, I just turned Feanor into a psychopath!
Anyway, thanks for this story, it was an absorbing read.