for First Contact10/22/2012 c1 Guest
you know you had the makings for a epic multi chapter story but instead you when half assed and rushed a ending :(
you know you had the makings for a epic multi chapter story but instead you when half assed and rushed a ending :(
10/5/2012 c1 
2CigarChomper
This was a pretty cool story. I'm a little disapointed it didn't turn into a series.
2CigarChomperThis was a pretty cool story. I'm a little disapointed it didn't turn into a series.
5/21/2012 c1 2skipper 1337
You know, you have a prologue here, not a one-shot (well yes, but it shouldn't be).
Tell us the story, show us what happened, what adventures the Grand Company had, how they managed to get back to imperial space and of course, did they meet others of the SW galaxy. Continue!
2skipper 1337You know, you have a prologue here, not a one-shot (well yes, but it shouldn't be).
Tell us the story, show us what happened, what adventures the Grand Company had, how they managed to get back to imperial space and of course, did they meet others of the SW galaxy. Continue!
3/18/2011 c1 marticuss
i want to know the rest of the story, i want to see that lowly bred sith squeal like a cowardly stuck heritic cultist that he is
i want to know the rest of the story, i want to see that lowly bred sith squeal like a cowardly stuck heritic cultist that he is
10/9/2010 c1 18Hideout Writer
Meh. It was relatively good, up to the end, but then it fizzled. I doubt I'll come back to this one.
18Hideout WriterMeh. It was relatively good, up to the end, but then it fizzled. I doubt I'll come back to this one.
8/20/2010 c1 909Hawki
-Could be down to formatting, but the text is a bit off somehow. A new line is given with each sentence, with paragraphs non-existant, which doesn't help the story's flow.
-Later on, the text becomes something akin to a script, particuarly with the appearance of Darth Malice. I'm able to follow it, but without any true feeling of narrative or feel for the characters, it feels more story than summary
909Hawki-Could be down to formatting, but the text is a bit off somehow. A new line is given with each sentence, with paragraphs non-existant, which doesn't help the story's flow.
-Later on, the text becomes something akin to a script, particuarly with the appearance of Darth Malice. I'm able to follow it, but without any true feeling of narrative or feel for the characters, it feels more story than summary
8/1/2010 c1 2Dessel Ordo
interesting setup, it'll be interesting to see the Wplves response to the GA and Fel Empire.
2Dessel Ordointeresting setup, it'll be interesting to see the Wplves response to the GA and Fel Empire.
7/12/2010 c1 ello 'ello
I thought the Space Wolves were supposed to be a "nice" chapter... oh well. Wouldn't they have at least tried to flag someone else down, if only for an apology?
And what SW/40k eras are this? And seriously, Morkai should have known better, considering the person he was talking to called himself "Malice".
Last point: aren't the Space Wolves' Navigators all from House Belisarius? They don't strike me as the creeped out timid type. I could be wrong, of course.
I thought the Space Wolves were supposed to be a "nice" chapter... oh well. Wouldn't they have at least tried to flag someone else down, if only for an apology?
And what SW/40k eras are this? And seriously, Morkai should have known better, considering the person he was talking to called himself "Malice".
Last point: aren't the Space Wolves' Navigators all from House Belisarius? They don't strike me as the creeped out timid type. I could be wrong, of course.
7/9/2010 c1 3Haegr
Not bad, but there are few things that you should clean up.
First, why is Malice attacking the Space Wolves? What is his reason. Does he wants their technology ,or does he fear that the SWs will ruin one of his schemes?
Second, the Trade federation ships on orbit were pretty outdated, and not really a big match for a Space Wolf fleet, really.
A newer fleet of Destroyers might have been better choice.
Apart from that, it seems good if a little to short and hurried.
3HaegrNot bad, but there are few things that you should clean up.
First, why is Malice attacking the Space Wolves? What is his reason. Does he wants their technology ,or does he fear that the SWs will ruin one of his schemes?
Second, the Trade federation ships on orbit were pretty outdated, and not really a big match for a Space Wolf fleet, really.
A newer fleet of Destroyers might have been better choice.
Apart from that, it seems good if a little to short and hurried.
7/7/2010 c1 3Skulls' Laughing
The end was definitely too fast (i mean how they hunted malice down and returned to the imperium), I sincerely hope you are planning to further elaborate
good chap
3Skulls' LaughingThe end was definitely too fast (i mean how they hunted malice down and returned to the imperium), I sincerely hope you are planning to further elaborate
good chap