for Star Broken5/8 c1 elyador
this made me cry
this made me cry
4/3 c1 T'Preea
Ok now I'm sobbing. And I want to smack Spock for not trusting Jim.
Ok now I'm sobbing. And I want to smack Spock for not trusting Jim.
10/29/2010 c1 
12Rokkis
I don't know if I can even bother pointing out all the illogical scenes in this fic.
I just... I hate it when writers like you trivialize rape. It is shattering beyond words. The ultimate violation. And nothing from the start of this fic to the end made any sense and was quite frankly done in very poor taste.
I can only recommend that you do some research into this subject and perhaps even read a rape survivor's account. Perhaps that would open your eyes.
Cheers and good luck
12RokkisI don't know if I can even bother pointing out all the illogical scenes in this fic.
I just... I hate it when writers like you trivialize rape. It is shattering beyond words. The ultimate violation. And nothing from the start of this fic to the end made any sense and was quite frankly done in very poor taste.
I can only recommend that you do some research into this subject and perhaps even read a rape survivor's account. Perhaps that would open your eyes.
Cheers and good luck
7/11/2010 c1 4MegKevin
I love this song. I was actually considering doing a story with it. But now-no. Just-no. There is no way I could write it without this influencing me, and no way I could surpass what you have just done. I concede. *bow*
Yeah, Airbender sux. but-and I'm sorry for this-Ecplipse does too. Taylor Lautner is the only person in that cast who can act. Sorry for bashing something you like!
-Meg
4MegKevinI love this song. I was actually considering doing a story with it. But now-no. Just-no. There is no way I could write it without this influencing me, and no way I could surpass what you have just done. I concede. *bow*
Yeah, Airbender sux. but-and I'm sorry for this-Ecplipse does too. Taylor Lautner is the only person in that cast who can act. Sorry for bashing something you like!
-Meg
7/9/2010 c1 2Spockaholic
Well, that was...evil; remind me to never get on your bad side :D That being said, great job! I especially enjoyed the first few paragraphs leading up to the evil-ness. You wrote the fake-polite dialogue between Dukath and Jim so perfectly.
2SpockaholicWell, that was...evil; remind me to never get on your bad side :D That being said, great job! I especially enjoyed the first few paragraphs leading up to the evil-ness. You wrote the fake-polite dialogue between Dukath and Jim so perfectly.
7/9/2010 c1 4my
It was really good and had me on the edge of my seat. Right until Aki, Kallista and Terry appeared. Exactly who are they? Don't write yourself and your friends into stories, it tends to ruin them. Honestly don't get offended by this review, its just a tip for improvement, or if you like writing these 'characters' in, put 'mary-sue' in the review. That'll stop people like me from reading them.
It was really good and had me on the edge of my seat. Right until Aki, Kallista and Terry appeared. Exactly who are they? Don't write yourself and your friends into stories, it tends to ruin them. Honestly don't get offended by this review, its just a tip for improvement, or if you like writing these 'characters' in, put 'mary-sue' in the review. That'll stop people like me from reading them.
7/8/2010 c1 70Andalusia25
How sad and sweet at the same time. Great job, T'Prime. Well done, twisted my heart along with Jim's. But now you must hunt down the evil Klingon and kill him... some revenge is in order!
70Andalusia25How sad and sweet at the same time. Great job, T'Prime. Well done, twisted my heart along with Jim's. But now you must hunt down the evil Klingon and kill him... some revenge is in order!
7/8/2010 c1 Tsohg
omg...wow. that was just so..heartbreaking, devastating, sad..Poor jim! reading the summery i thought "well hey, i know how this will go. he'll get close to killing jim, than spock will come in, save jim and all will be well again!" the amanda part also made me think that...but i was wrong! you sure know how to get to hearts and emotions thats for sure
omg...wow. that was just so..heartbreaking, devastating, sad..Poor jim! reading the summery i thought "well hey, i know how this will go. he'll get close to killing jim, than spock will come in, save jim and all will be well again!" the amanda part also made me think that...but i was wrong! you sure know how to get to hearts and emotions thats for sure
7/8/2010 c1 8Banbi-V
Wow.
Just wow. Angsty...and heart breaking. You know how to write a drama, that's for sure!
8Banbi-VWow.
Just wow. Angsty...and heart breaking. You know how to write a drama, that's for sure!
7/8/2010 c1 Carrie
Where´s Spock´s suicide and Bones turning an alcoholic?
Where´s Spock´s suicide and Bones turning an alcoholic?
7/8/2010 c1 32Toadflame
I can't even listen to this song, it makes me cry every time I listen to it (even though it's a really good song!), and the changed lyrics made it hit even closer to home because I love Star Trek. Great job on this story, I hope you do post the picture because I think it would go perfectly no matter how you drew it.
32ToadflameI can't even listen to this song, it makes me cry every time I listen to it (even though it's a really good song!), and the changed lyrics made it hit even closer to home because I love Star Trek. Great job on this story, I hope you do post the picture because I think it would go perfectly no matter how you drew it.
7/8/2010 c1 MilkyJoe12
Brilliant, I almost cried! Damn it! When will they learn Jim never cheats on Spock, it's always rape! Learn people, learn!
Brilliant, I almost cried! Damn it! When will they learn Jim never cheats on Spock, it's always rape! Learn people, learn!
7/8/2010 c1 3Huanted Darkling
i don't normally read these type of story but it was good i liked it was so sad but really good
3Huanted Darklingi don't normally read these type of story but it was good i liked it was so sad but really good