for BFF's or not7/13/2012 c13 Guest
I loved it, please continue with the story.
I loved it, please continue with the story.
1/8/2011 c12 
10Silent Shootting Star
no Edward . He can't get hurt ahh and poor bella. I did that once :( not fun. Great chapter can't wait for the next one.
10Silent Shootting Starno Edward . He can't get hurt ahh and poor bella. I did that once :( not fun. Great chapter can't wait for the next one.
12/31/2010 c12 McAliceBonesPotter 'red head
GOTTA LOVE EDWARD! PLZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ RITE MORE SOOOON! CANT WAIT LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE IT!
GOTTA LOVE EDWARD! PLZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ RITE MORE SOOOON! CANT WAIT LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE IT!
9/11/2010 c1 3luluxox
Hi
Normally I would start this kind of message like : Hi, great storyline but...
But this time I can't even do that because there is a mistake in the authors note, then in the first sentence of the story.
So all I'm saying is that maybe you should write this on microsoft word, or just run it through a spell check.
And learn the names of the characters.
In the first chapter, these are all the mistakes:
It's werewolVES, his name is EMMET, there should be a full stop inbetween sentences, the sentence should be: Rosalie IS captain OF the Cheer Squad, people sit in SEATS not sits, I should be a capital letter, and in your authors note at the bottom, you don't capitalise words after commas.
You see my point? This isn't me insulting you, it's just a pointer on how to become a better author.
3luluxoxHi
Normally I would start this kind of message like : Hi, great storyline but...
But this time I can't even do that because there is a mistake in the authors note, then in the first sentence of the story.
So all I'm saying is that maybe you should write this on microsoft word, or just run it through a spell check.
And learn the names of the characters.
In the first chapter, these are all the mistakes:
It's werewolVES, his name is EMMET, there should be a full stop inbetween sentences, the sentence should be: Rosalie IS captain OF the Cheer Squad, people sit in SEATS not sits, I should be a capital letter, and in your authors note at the bottom, you don't capitalise words after commas.
You see my point? This isn't me insulting you, it's just a pointer on how to become a better author.
8/29/2010 c10 1BeastsAndFallenAngels
Good chapter, though a tad short. Hope for some more soon, Z, xx
1BeastsAndFallenAngelsGood chapter, though a tad short. Hope for some more soon, Z, xx
8/18/2010 c9 10AliceCullensTwinENA
I love it! Do you think that maybe the guys can sing like the boys of fall?
10AliceCullensTwinENAI love it! Do you think that maybe the guys can sing like the boys of fall?